Always a Tomorrow...
Life will forever have its ups and downs13 total reviews
Comment from Sylvia Page
I like your perfectly crafted diamante poem.
Fall
down, dispirited
sinking, descending, regretting
uncontrolled, needful, determined, hopeful
rising, ascending, believing
joyful, free
Flight
of the bird perfectly matches this along with the sunset hues of earthy colours. Well done.
All the best in the contest
Sylvia
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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I like your perfectly crafted diamante poem.
Fall
down, dispirited
sinking, descending, regretting
uncontrolled, needful, determined, hopeful
rising, ascending, believing
joyful, free
Flight
of the bird perfectly matches this along with the sunset hues of earthy colours. Well done.
All the best in the contest
Sylvia
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your review.
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My pleasure!
Comment from Janilou
This is really beautiful. It tells the story of life in just a few well written lines. I loved it. I have nothing to suggest for edits or corrections. It looks great and the artwork is a wonderful addition. Thank you for the notes about the form. Fascinating. You have done well!
Jan
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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This is really beautiful. It tells the story of life in just a few well written lines. I loved it. I have nothing to suggest for edits or corrections. It looks great and the artwork is a wonderful addition. Thank you for the notes about the form. Fascinating. You have done well!
Jan
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Wow, Jan!! Thank you for this fantastic review and for those wonderful stars! You have made my weekend!!
Comment from ShyWri
I almost gave you four stars because flight isn't actually an antonym of fall; however, you wrote such a lovely contrast between the acts of falling and flying that I went ahead with five. I especially liked the beginning, "Fall down, dispirited." Well done.
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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I almost gave you four stars because flight isn't actually an antonym of fall; however, you wrote such a lovely contrast between the acts of falling and flying that I went ahead with five. I especially liked the beginning, "Fall down, dispirited." Well done.
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Thank you, ShyWri -- I went in and put a different antonym... tell me what you think...! ;) ;) Thanx for keeping me on my toes -- very much appreciated! ;) ;)
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For me it's perfect!
