Wilderness Redemption Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Evil Walks Part I"Shenanigans on the frontier
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Comment from Ben Colder
"They will be allowed build one, but that doesn't mean they'll be allowed to stay," Swooping Eagle said with an evil grin. Minis a word. My first reading your work. Interesting time frame. I have had several Shoshone friends in Wyoming. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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"They will be allowed build one, but that doesn't mean they'll be allowed to stay," Swooping Eagle said with an evil grin. Minis a word. My first reading your work. Interesting time frame. I have had several Shoshone friends in Wyoming. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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I'm glad you plunged in on this one. I was afraid it wouldn't be able to stand on it's own merits, but from the reviews I'm getting i guess I was wrong. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Gail Denham
Well told story - the dialog is good - always a plus. Sounds as if you have a good book going - the various pawns in this story fixing to kill each other. Good suspense.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Well told story - the dialog is good - always a plus. Sounds as if you have a good book going - the various pawns in this story fixing to kill each other. Good suspense.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much. I didn't think this chapter could stand on it's own merit but you help ispell those doubts. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my.
Comment from juliaSjames
I'm new to this tale but I followed along pretty well. The characters are interesting and obviously there's a good deal of action on the way.
Well done.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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I'm new to this tale but I followed along pretty well. The characters are interesting and obviously there's a good deal of action on the way.
Well done.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thank you Julia, and welcome aboard. My earlier chapters were a lot longer and I was getting requests to shorten them. I hope you continue to follow this story.
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Yes I will. Sorry my review didn't go into detail on this occasion. Next time I'll do better.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Earl God job my friend. The story still has good continuity regardless the break.
Suggestions: Use some spacing here: Even though it is just a recap before your chapter it still looks messy and not "reader-friendly" "Carter Holler, Kentucky
1860 Roseanna's oldest son, Clancy, appeared on the porch. (And so on)
And: Eliminate the word "on" here. you do not need it, Earl. "where he'd be building his trading post on."
And "spoke Shawnee" not speaks Shawnee. Speaks is present tense. You are narrating in past tense, I believe.
Keep at it, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Hi, Earl God job my friend. The story still has good continuity regardless the break.
Suggestions: Use some spacing here: Even though it is just a recap before your chapter it still looks messy and not "reader-friendly" "Carter Holler, Kentucky
1860 Roseanna's oldest son, Clancy, appeared on the porch. (And so on)
And: Eliminate the word "on" here. you do not need it, Earl. "where he'd be building his trading post on."
And "spoke Shawnee" not speaks Shawnee. Speaks is present tense. You are narrating in past tense, I believe.
Keep at it, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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I appreciate the pointers about spacing and grammar and youre absolutely correct, I made the fixes. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
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Good job, Earl. : ) Bob
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You show great consideration to the reader. It is very helpful to have an annotated list of characters. I like your effective use of allusions. It invites the reader to research the concepts further. I enjoy stories with varying dialect. You have managed that nicely. You have skillfully captured the culture and traditions. There is evidence that you have done your homework to be able to write this series. This a good example to readers if they are writers that there is often a need to research a subject unless the writer is merely gathering fodder from there own life-experience. Well thought out and planned.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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You show great consideration to the reader. It is very helpful to have an annotated list of characters. I like your effective use of allusions. It invites the reader to research the concepts further. I enjoy stories with varying dialect. You have managed that nicely. You have skillfully captured the culture and traditions. There is evidence that you have done your homework to be able to write this series. This a good example to readers if they are writers that there is often a need to research a subject unless the writer is merely gathering fodder from there own life-experience. Well thought out and planned.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from poetwatch
Good story Earl. You left me hanging from a tree just a'thinking what's next. :) That Tyler McGraw is just an educated Indian that wants to make money. Yet, I'm wondering who that "brown haired one" with the "big hanging pears" is. :) Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Good story Earl. You left me hanging from a tree just a'thinking what's next. :) That Tyler McGraw is just an educated Indian that wants to make money. Yet, I'm wondering who that "brown haired one" with the "big hanging pears" is. :) Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Chapter one explained who the brown haired on with the big hangin pears is. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from LaFrance
Earl, a great continuing chapter, your plot is building up good, and I am eager to read more, and I am glad you are back writing more chapters to the story.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Earl, a great continuing chapter, your plot is building up good, and I am eager to read more, and I am glad you are back writing more chapters to the story.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much. I figured I'd better get this one done before I start posting my next book, which I've already written long hand last year. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for continuing, Earl. I guess it's still grandmother continuing with her story. I like how you give equal time to both the white folk and the Indian folk. It's good Wise Owl has a more open view to everyone.
"your elder's that-a-way." (elders) no apostrophe needed.
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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thanks for continuing, Earl. I guess it's still grandmother continuing with her story. I like how you give equal time to both the white folk and the Indian folk. It's good Wise Owl has a more open view to everyone.
"your elder's that-a-way." (elders) no apostrophe needed.
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Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Sally Law
Yes, this is way overdue, Mr. Corp. A wonderful chapter though and great promise and suspense built for the next one. It looks like we have lying, revenge, and evil intent on both sides though, which can't be good. Hurry along with the next one. . . please.
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal :+)
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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Yes, this is way overdue, Mr. Corp. A wonderful chapter though and great promise and suspense built for the next one. It looks like we have lying, revenge, and evil intent on both sides though, which can't be good. Hurry along with the next one. . . please.
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal :+)
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Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thanks Sally, I'll try to get it out much quicker. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
