The Last Visit
A dying old cowboy story.33 total reviews
Comment from judester
This is a clever story in a poem that gives the reader a final glimpse of a humble cowboy. The rhyming is steady with an easy flow. Bravo, judester
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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This is a clever story in a poem that gives the reader a final glimpse of a humble cowboy. The rhyming is steady with an easy flow. Bravo, judester
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Thanks very much for your review and stars.
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Very well done. I am not into the whole western bit, but once I started reading this, I could not stop. SO, you must have done something very right. I like it that you wrote as an old cowboy would talk. That adds considerably to the authenticity of it. A bit of a sad ending, but was expecting that. Great photo choice to accompany. Great job and Good Luck!
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Very well done. I am not into the whole western bit, but once I started reading this, I could not stop. SO, you must have done something very right. I like it that you wrote as an old cowboy would talk. That adds considerably to the authenticity of it. A bit of a sad ending, but was expecting that. Great photo choice to accompany. Great job and Good Luck!
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your great review and stars. Very much appreciated.
Comment from Nike23
This is a very well written cowboy poem. I enjoyed reading it because it flowed very well. The story is sad as I did not expect the cowboy to die. I like the use of cowboy language as it made the poem come to life. Great poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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This is a very well written cowboy poem. I enjoyed reading it because it flowed very well. The story is sad as I did not expect the cowboy to die. I like the use of cowboy language as it made the poem come to life. Great poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for your nice interview and stars.
Comment from Gail Denham
Very good cowboy poem - you fulfilled this challenge with the right tone. I like the "wild west show" - wearing out one saddle and many horses - and outliving friends. The elements of the old west are there.
Good job
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Very good cowboy poem - you fulfilled this challenge with the right tone. I like the "wild west show" - wearing out one saddle and many horses - and outliving friends. The elements of the old west are there.
Good job
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Thanks for the review and stars.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written cowboy poem/story about the last visit with an old friend who died while you were still there with him. His story of his life he tells over and over because that is all he have left.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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A very well-written cowboy poem/story about the last visit with an old friend who died while you were still there with him. His story of his life he tells over and over because that is all he have left.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your review and stars.
Comment from Janetsue
You are a natural story teller, and the rhyming couplets are the dazzling candles on a frosted cake. I enjoyed reading this very much because it was interesting and flowed very well.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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You are a natural story teller, and the rhyming couplets are the dazzling candles on a frosted cake. I enjoyed reading this very much because it was interesting and flowed very well.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Thank you kindly for your comments and five stars.
Comment from WryWriter
This fabulous work deserves a six star but I don't have one to give. The poem flows with the western jargon and is a very pleasant reading experience. The story itself fills the reader with emotion. This should be a poem of the month! I love it!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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This fabulous work deserves a six star but I don't have one to give. The poem flows with the western jargon and is a very pleasant reading experience. The story itself fills the reader with emotion. This should be a poem of the month! I love it!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words and stars.
Comment from pome lover
a good cowboy story in a poem. I loved that he was honest about his relationships with women. Sounded like he probably was ornery.
I like poems that rhyme, too, although I think a lot of publishers today prefer free verse.
What are some of your children's books? And your new one? I write for kids, too. An enjoyable thing to do.
good luck in the contest.
pome lover
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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a good cowboy story in a poem. I loved that he was honest about his relationships with women. Sounded like he probably was ornery.
I like poems that rhyme, too, although I think a lot of publishers today prefer free verse.
What are some of your children's books? And your new one? I write for kids, too. An enjoyable thing to do.
good luck in the contest.
pome lover
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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My newest book is "Through The Mist." The prior one is "Mysteria."
These were my first attempts to write children books. I wrote my autobiography a few years ago "Autobiography of a Nobody (Then
Till Now"), It is doing quite well. If you read any of them, please let
me know what you think, vvdt575963@yahoo.com. Thank you very much for your kind review and five stars. They are greatly appreciated. I prefer rhyming poetry, free verse is more like a story to me.
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do you have a website?
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No, I'm sorry, I have never set one up.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image, Willie.
-This is an excellent poem
and story with very excellent rhyme
and meter so it flowed down the page.
-The imagery is very good, too.
-The first line gets our attention.
-He's done so much in his life
and deserves to be proud of it.
-He has so much to share
about the time he lived in, too:
"I really don't remember how old I am.
At this point, who gives a damn?"
-I love the ending, too.
-This is a wonderful entry;
good luck!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2019
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-Very nice image, Willie.
-This is an excellent poem
and story with very excellent rhyme
and meter so it flowed down the page.
-The imagery is very good, too.
-The first line gets our attention.
-He's done so much in his life
and deserves to be proud of it.
-He has so much to share
about the time he lived in, too:
"I really don't remember how old I am.
At this point, who gives a damn?"
-I love the ending, too.
-This is a wonderful entry;
good luck!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2019
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Thank you, Pam, for your very kind words and wonderful six-star review. You are very kind.
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You are very welcome and deserving, Willie. This was a really good poem.
Comment from Sanku
this is an interesting poem with a touching story in it .An honest cowboy spending his days working hard and trying out marrying once and now in his last days remembering his life.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2019
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this is an interesting poem with a touching story in it .An honest cowboy spending his days working hard and trying out marrying once and now in his last days remembering his life.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your very kind review and five stars.
