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A collection of stories: Some True, some not

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Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Your story is impressive, rarely nowadays you hear and read story about the soul bond made with your life partner. I really liked the disclosure in your author notes:"I believe in living a life completely, in doing so, can never be achieved by being alone. We were designed to have a life mate. A Soul Friend, who will always, always have your back and the one person other than God who knows, knows everything." Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
    Thank you.
Comment from Mistydawn
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What a beautiful piece. Well-written, very interesting start to finish. I could feel your love, your admiration, the bond you to share. Could feel the closeness, connection through your words. I do hope you two have a long, happy life together.
PS. I'd give you a six if I had it. This piece deserves it and more.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    Thank you we were well on our way....
Comment from Susan Morritt
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This is a beautifully written story about your soulmate. Lucky you! My favourite lines are, "the wounded shadows that sneak out from under the covers", "my material girl and Brinks Armored truck", "lost my focus on the divine" and "no, as a complete sentence." All very original ideas with an original style of putting them across. The Celtic reference I found charming as well (my own background too.) The only suggestion I have for you is to check the line, "She has been by side when my broken..." Good luck in the contest!

Susan

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    Thank you, Susan thanks for seeing dropped word. I am very grateful for your exceptional rating.
Comment from Raul1
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I have enjoyed reading your story. It is very good and well written. I think that this is a chapter of a book. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you
reply by Raul1 on 27-Sep-2019
    You're welcome.
Comment from royowen
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I tend to agree with, my wife and I met in 1971, and have been together for all those years, as it is true that I met God at a strategic point in my, so too did I meet, and as sure as God led me here, my script was already written, although one writes His own script, but God knows who writes it. And records His message on our hearts, well done, I related totally to your biographical account, well done,
Typo (Never) one of us was on the prowl, neither? 2: the most trust(ed) friend.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Roy I am so happy for you both, and especially grateful for the copy edit assistance.
reply by royowen on 28-Sep-2019
    Well done
Comment from Cindy Warren
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You are very lucky to have found your soul mate. I think some people never do. Living alone is better than living with the wrong person. I hope you and your wife have many more years of happiness. Good luck in the contest. 'She has seen my flaw's...flaws doesn't need the apostrophe.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank error noted and corrected.
Comment from LisaMay
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Your story moved from a historic explanation of a term, 'Anam Cara', to a deeply personal exploration of your truly special relationship. You are blessed to have found each other. I loved the paragraph where you listed the 'specific assets in your union', which reveal the depth and shared harmony and understanding of your connection.

A minor correction is needed in this sentence: the very first time I sat (set) my eyes upon her.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you Lisa May, error noted and comments appreciated.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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sometimes quit lifetime,???

Not sure what this means. I am so glad you have your soulmate. I'm 57 and haven't found one yet--unless you count my beagle, Katie Jo who is a dear and treasured friend.

Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank for pointing out my typo. I?m certain that Katie Jo at the moment is your anam cara...
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a beautiful tribute to your wife and I enjoyed your journey together as your relationship blossomed into love and a lifelong friendship based on firm foundations, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you Dolly, I did correct a silly word mistake. Quiet was the intention.
Comment from tfawcus
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This is an extraordinary tribute to the lady who is central to your life. How fortunate to have found such a complete and symbiotic relationship. You are a lucky man indeed.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you, yes indeed I am.