The Gardens at Weatherbury
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Comment from MamaBebop
Yvette,
I wish I had a 6 for this chapter! Sir Archie is a delightful character (I love that he is PINK!) and Nicholas appears to be a most perceptive young man (be still my heart~ as a young lady reading this, I would have a total crush on him already!!). Dialogue still awesome.
On to Chap 5..
Beth
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Yvette,
I wish I had a 6 for this chapter! Sir Archie is a delightful character (I love that he is PINK!) and Nicholas appears to be a most perceptive young man (be still my heart~ as a young lady reading this, I would have a total crush on him already!!). Dialogue still awesome.
On to Chap 5..
Beth
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Oh, he's gonna grow up to be a heart-breaker to be sure! ;) Thanx, ma'am!! ;)
Comment from w.j.debi
Sir Archibald is a delightful creature and Nicholas appears to be a perceptive young man. As the "real" grounds keeper it seems he will have quite a crew to assist him.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Sir Archibald is a delightful creature and Nicholas appears to be a perceptive young man. As the "real" grounds keeper it seems he will have quite a crew to assist him.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Pink Armadillos are certainly good knights to have around, yes?! ;) Thanx for the review... glad to have you on-board! ;) Yvette
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, YM, Archie is going to take over being the star of your story--love him! I enjoyed this chapter. You did a great job with the dialogue, the setting, and the imagery. Thanks for sharing, I'm about caught up. Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Well, YM, Archie is going to take over being the star of your story--love him! I enjoyed this chapter. You did a great job with the dialogue, the setting, and the imagery. Thanks for sharing, I'm about caught up. Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Jan
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Pink Armadillos are certainly good knights to have around, yes?! ;) Thanx for the review... glad to have you on-board, Jan! ;) Yvette
Comment from May 1
Haha, I don't think I would be able to control my laughter if I saw something like that. I love the description of Archie, he sounds so cute. Aww, he is so nice Archie, that's great. It's good that he is so perceptive.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Haha, I don't think I would be able to control my laughter if I saw something like that. I love the description of Archie, he sounds so cute. Aww, he is so nice Archie, that's great. It's good that he is so perceptive.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Pink Armadillos are certainly good knights to have around, yes?! ;) Thanx for the review... glad to have you on-board! ;) Yvette
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They sure are. :) You're welcome.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Well told. This is starting out to be an interesting and fun story.
I love a good fantasy. And here it is.
I look forward to reading a lot more.
Sharon
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Well told. This is starting out to be an interesting and fun story.
I love a good fantasy. And here it is.
I look forward to reading a lot more.
Sharon
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Pink Armadillos are certainly good knights to have around, yes?! ;) Thanx for the review... glad to have you on-board! ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Schott
This is still a marvelous tale of Nicholas and the garden crew. I enjoyed the diplomatic handling of Archie and thanks for listing the characters again. I'll need to read this to my granddaughter.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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This is still a marvelous tale of Nicholas and the garden crew. I enjoyed the diplomatic handling of Archie and thanks for listing the characters again. I'll need to read this to my granddaughter.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Oh, Bill, I think that's the best compliment I could ever hope for!! ;) So glad to hear you enjoyed.... if I can manage to finish it, perhaps you'll have a book to give her... (course, that a BIG if...!) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 13-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Thanx so much for your review on this chapter, Doctor Ricky -- so good to hear from you!! ;) Take care and have a great week ahead! ;) Yvette
Comment from robyn corum
Yvette,
I'm so glad you are continuing this story. It is simply delightful. The imagination shown in the creation is out of the box. *smile* These characters are just sooooo stinking FUN!
One note:
1.) He eyed me suspiciously as he stared for (a) few silent moments.
Thanks a bunch! Looking forward to more!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Yvette,
I'm so glad you are continuing this story. It is simply delightful. The imagination shown in the creation is out of the box. *smile* These characters are just sooooo stinking FUN!
One note:
1.) He eyed me suspiciously as he stared for (a) few silent moments.
Thanks a bunch! Looking forward to more!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Hey there, LadyR! ;) Thanx for the catch and for keeping up with Nicholas and all the shenanigans at the Gardens -- gonna try to stay up on things this time... ;) :) Yvette :)
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Can I be bold enough to suggest the first paragraph is a run-on sentence?
From "Constantine to grin" is another.
"Stared for few silent moments" seems to be missing the word "a" to make the sentence read "Stared for a few silent moments".
Possibly in order to keep the entire sentence in the past tense make "Constantine huffed. Rolling his eyes, and elbowed Archie" to "Constantine huffed. He rolled his eyes and elbowed Archie".
These are mere suggestions so feel free to use any that may help or toss the whole lot.
Enjoyed this encounter between Archie and the Gardener. Archie is indeed an interesting character.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Can I be bold enough to suggest the first paragraph is a run-on sentence?
From "Constantine to grin" is another.
"Stared for few silent moments" seems to be missing the word "a" to make the sentence read "Stared for a few silent moments".
Possibly in order to keep the entire sentence in the past tense make "Constantine huffed. Rolling his eyes, and elbowed Archie" to "Constantine huffed. He rolled his eyes and elbowed Archie".
These are mere suggestions so feel free to use any that may help or toss the whole lot.
Enjoyed this encounter between Archie and the Gardener. Archie is indeed an interesting character.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Nowhereman1
Interesting story. It is very well written. You paint a vivid picture with your words and the story is entertaining. I am going to have to go and read the other chapters soon. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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Interesting story. It is very well written. You paint a vivid picture with your words and the story is entertaining. I am going to have to go and read the other chapters soon. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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Look forward to hearing what you thought.... and glad you enjoyed the shenanigans of Nicholas and company ! ;) :) Have a great evening! ;) Yvette
