Poor Me
Self Centered16 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write and this happens to some people as they strive to grab life for themselves and trample on others to get it, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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A poignant write and this happens to some people as they strive to grab life for themselves and trample on others to get it, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi There,
Sometimes our own desires to get what we want are so important to our own self need, that we trample on others to get there. soon you discover that your own desires have pushed loved ones and friends away. You only realise this when you find yourself alone. A lovely clear poem and well presented.
Brenda.x
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Hi There,
Sometimes our own desires to get what we want are so important to our own self need, that we trample on others to get there. soon you discover that your own desires have pushed loved ones and friends away. You only realise this when you find yourself alone. A lovely clear poem and well presented.
Brenda.x
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Ottava Rima writing prompt.
You tell of letting your ego take over your life and the loneliness that has caused.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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I think this is a good entry for the Ottava Rima writing prompt.
You tell of letting your ego take over your life and the loneliness that has caused.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
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Comment from moonsunrise
I really enjoyed reading your Ottava Rima writing prompt entry. The image you selected is very dark, leaving the reader feeling isolated.
Self-centeredness is a curse. This person will walk over anyone to obtain whatever it is that he/she wants.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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I really enjoyed reading your Ottava Rima writing prompt entry. The image you selected is very dark, leaving the reader feeling isolated.
Self-centeredness is a curse. This person will walk over anyone to obtain whatever it is that he/she wants.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from papa55mike
There are so many forms of poetry. I've read several of these entries today, and I like this one. Pride eliminates all love.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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There are so many forms of poetry. I've read several of these entries today, and I like this one. Pride eliminates all love.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
This looks like a compact poetic form. I like the line: stranded in silence I did not hear or see. Nice 's' alliteration there. This poem reminds the reader of the thought, "First, admit you know nothing." That might be the beginning of relinquishing pride or 'self desire,' which is an interesting way to depict the essential nature of pride. I guess the absence of punctuation is a personal style choice?
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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This looks like a compact poetic form. I like the line: stranded in silence I did not hear or see. Nice 's' alliteration there. This poem reminds the reader of the thought, "First, admit you know nothing." That might be the beginning of relinquishing pride or 'self desire,' which is an interesting way to depict the essential nature of pride. I guess the absence of punctuation is a personal style choice?
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much, and to be honest not confident or sure about punctuation, all help welcomed
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Well, there is one style of poetry which is called minimalist, where you leave out all or most of the punctuation. It will work when lines make sense on their own, with complete thoughts. I think you can leave this one as is, if you want. English majors might say something, though (and I was one, twice).
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Many thanks, I will have a look and see at my lines****kahpot