Tanka(garden arenas)
An ekphrastic tanka28 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork, Pam.
-Notes are appreciated.
-The imagery is good,
with "garden arenas."
-I like the concept of
the "dance contests"
and the concluding lines
about the twist.
-Thanks for sharing.
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-Nice artwork, Pam.
-Notes are appreciated.
-The imagery is good,
with "garden arenas."
-I like the concept of
the "dance contests"
and the concluding lines
about the twist.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from kahpot
What gorgeous artwork, The Mantis Twist-as they dance for the love of another, an excellent read and Tanka poem very well written and presented****kahpot
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What gorgeous artwork, The Mantis Twist-as they dance for the love of another, an excellent read and Tanka poem very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from lyenochka
Good to see you back, Pamela! Appreciate the info about the mantis and how it is this insect that gave us the "twist!" Enjoyed your painting and your humor!
But I feel sorry for the poor male that gets eaten afterwards!
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Good to see you back, Pamela! Appreciate the info about the mantis and how it is this insect that gave us the "twist!" Enjoyed your painting and your humor!
But I feel sorry for the poor male that gets eaten afterwards!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think your Tanka is fun and tells a good story about the insects dancing in the garden.
The artwork is lovely besides.
well done and thank you for sharing this colorful piece with us.
Sharon
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I think your Tanka is fun and tells a good story about the insects dancing in the garden.
The artwork is lovely besides.
well done and thank you for sharing this colorful piece with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from Michele Harber
This is adorable, Pam. Not only do you provide interesting actual information, but you personify the mantii and the gardens, making them relatable. This is a fun poem to read.
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This is adorable, Pam. Not only do you provide interesting actual information, but you personify the mantii and the gardens, making them relatable. This is a fun poem to read.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from Janetsue
I really like your artwork, and it perfectly illustrates the message in your creative tanka. It is an excellent posting and a good addition to your Nature's Dancers Series.
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I really like your artwork, and it perfectly illustrates the message in your creative tanka. It is an excellent posting and a good addition to your Nature's Dancers Series.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from Barbaraj1
This is a very good Tanka poem. Not only are you a talented poet,
but you are a very good artist. I love the title of your The Mantis twist
for your artwork.
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This is a very good Tanka poem. Not only are you a talented poet,
but you are a very good artist. I love the title of your The Mantis twist
for your artwork.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Pam, a good tanka and very amusing. Written true to form, this is a fine ekphrastic poem. 'insects perfected the twist eons before we found it' - LOL! Not many people know that LOL! - Not a contest piece ? It should be. Warm regards Dorothy xx
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Hello Pam, a good tanka and very amusing. Written true to form, this is a fine ekphrastic poem. 'insects perfected the twist eons before we found it' - LOL! Not many people know that LOL! - Not a contest piece ? It should be. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from rspoet
Hello Pam,
Wonderful painting and tanka to match.
I like how the flowers dominate the visual
and frame the center mantis attracting the upper one.
One suggestion on your poem: I would remove the period
after line three. This would allow line three to pivot
and apply to three line and the bottom three.
Nicely done
Robert
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Hello Pam,
Wonderful painting and tanka to match.
I like how the flowers dominate the visual
and frame the center mantis attracting the upper one.
One suggestion on your poem: I would remove the period
after line three. This would allow line three to pivot
and apply to three line and the bottom three.
Nicely done
Robert
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from Sugarray77
Hi Pam! Another wonderful example of your own brand of poetry... a wonderful tanka combined with your lively and colorful artwork. So well done, my friend.
Melissa
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Hi Pam! Another wonderful example of your own brand of poetry... a wonderful tanka combined with your lively and colorful artwork. So well done, my friend.
Melissa
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
