Tanka(ladybugs and deep blue)
Ladybugs dance among violets32 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
Love your painting the colors are wonderful, and your words describing the spreading off the pollen so life continues, very well presenred and written****kahpot
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Love your painting the colors are wonderful, and your words describing the spreading off the pollen so life continues, very well presenred and written****kahpot
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think your painting is wonderful and the verse a beautiful match.
The poem tells the story that is displayed in the painting.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
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I think your painting is wonderful and the verse a beautiful match.
The poem tells the story that is displayed in the painting.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
Comment from dragonpoet
This tanka describes the life cycles of both the ladybugs and the flowers.
It alludes to the lure of the violets to the insects and their mating rituals.
Keep writing
Joan
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This tanka describes the life cycles of both the ladybugs and the flowers.
It alludes to the lure of the violets to the insects and their mating rituals.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
Comment from lyenochka
Good to see you back, Pamela! How are you feeling?
I like that you personify the seeds who enjoy the dancing of the ladybugs as they help pollinate and ensure the next generation of violets!
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Good to see you back, Pamela! How are you feeling?
I like that you personify the seeds who enjoy the dancing of the ladybugs as they help pollinate and ensure the next generation of violets!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
Comment from royowen
Lady bugs, or as we call them ladybirds are an integral part of nature, they devour the aphid, that sap sucking destroyer of plants. Well done, good to see you, beautifully written my friend, blessings, Roy
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Lady bugs, or as we call them ladybirds are an integral part of nature, they devour the aphid, that sap sucking destroyer of plants. Well done, good to see you, beautifully written my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your painting is amazing, Pam. Your words pair nicely with it. I enjoyed reading your poem. I can easily 'see' what you have written. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
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Your painting is amazing, Pam. Your words pair nicely with it. I enjoyed reading your poem. I can easily 'see' what you have written. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
As soon as I saw the painting, I knew it was yours Pam, I love your fun art. I love your nature write too, you very talented lady, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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As soon as I saw the painting, I knew it was yours Pam, I love your fun art. I love your nature write too, you very talented lady, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
Comment from Barbaraj1
Pam, I declare you the queen of tankas. You come up with interesting
ones. The fact that you do your own paintings just adds more to the
poem. I am looking forward to your next tanka.
By the way, I am still working on mine.
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Pam, I declare you the queen of tankas. You come up with interesting
ones. The fact that you do your own paintings just adds more to the
poem. I am looking forward to your next tanka.
By the way, I am still working on mine.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
Comment from Pantygynt
This follows the traditional 5-7-5-7-7 syllabic format and the third line creates an excellent pivot. As is so often it is slightly less effective as a satori line. It doesn't give me that aha feeling and may be giving too much away.
Might 'yellow stamens watch' be more effective?
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This follows the traditional 5-7-5-7-7 syllabic format and the third line creates an excellent pivot. As is so often it is slightly less effective as a satori line. It doesn't give me that aha feeling and may be giving too much away.
Might 'yellow stamens watch' be more effective?
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
Comment from jenintorre
Lovely painting. I really like the vibrant colours that you've used. A nice description of the dancers and the audience. Well done Pam. All the best
. Jen
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Lovely painting. I really like the vibrant colours that you've used. A nice description of the dancers and the audience. Well done Pam. All the best
. Jen
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
