Blissfully Aware
A Tanka Poem18 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a pretty intriguing tanka, because it seems the stars and turning the corner can mean more than one thing. I actually took it first as if someone's health had changed and taken a turn for the worse, around a corner, and that the speaker was headed for eternity with the suggestion of stars being the only thing left to look at. But it could also mean that something else happened in a subconscious or nearly unaware train of events. Interesting share, and not entirely certain the speaker was 'blissfully unaware' since this reads so well :).
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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This is a pretty intriguing tanka, because it seems the stars and turning the corner can mean more than one thing. I actually took it first as if someone's health had changed and taken a turn for the worse, around a corner, and that the speaker was headed for eternity with the suggestion of stars being the only thing left to look at. But it could also mean that something else happened in a subconscious or nearly unaware train of events. Interesting share, and not entirely certain the speaker was 'blissfully unaware' since this reads so well :).
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful review and comments, I am glad you found more than one interpretation, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your lovely tanka conveys a powerful message about, as some people would say, "finding themselves," choosing a better way to approach life, and being joyous about that change.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Your lovely tanka conveys a powerful message about, as some people would say, "finding themselves," choosing a better way to approach life, and being joyous about that change.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thank you, and yes finding a better self is the right path, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gail Denham
Your poem makes me think of some of the persons in our church - those who have turned the corner out of drugs and alcohol addiction, choosing a better way - trust in Jesus Christ. We have a man who counsels persons with addictions. A needed ministry.
Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Your poem makes me think of some of the persons in our church - those who have turned the corner out of drugs and alcohol addiction, choosing a better way - trust in Jesus Christ. We have a man who counsels persons with addictions. A needed ministry.
Good job.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much, and yes we must trust, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Beautifully stated. Very nice in the realization that even though life throws us curves at times, there is a corner that we turn and everything straightens out for awhile
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Beautifully stated. Very nice in the realization that even though life throws us curves at times, there is a corner that we turn and everything straightens out for awhile
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and yes we do come across a few curves, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem ,not only is it beautiful they are perfect match.you Capture my attention from the first line to the last. I understand you poem I'm praying what you said about life can turn the corner, where everything looks bright.
Heaven knows I need to see some light
.this is a good write
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem ,not only is it beautiful they are perfect match.you Capture my attention from the first line to the last. I understand you poem I'm praying what you said about life can turn the corner, where everything looks bright.
Heaven knows I need to see some light
.this is a good write
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much for your wonderful review, comments, and the sixer, and yes we all need a corner to turn, very much appreciated****kahpot
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Your very welcome, you earned it.
cookie
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
I like this one! Good for you to get your life on the right track. A path where you can dream and hope and be happy with the choices you make in life. That is a rare thing so do cherish it. Best wishes for the contest. Cheers :-)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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I like this one! Good for you to get your life on the right track. A path where you can dream and hope and be happy with the choices you make in life. That is a rare thing so do cherish it. Best wishes for the contest. Cheers :-)
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thank you for this very encouraging review and comments, much appreciated****kahpot
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You are most welcome!
Comment from Ogden
If you see only stars shining, doesn't that suggest a dim view of everything else?
Keep walking that straight line! :)
Good luck in the tanka contest,
Ogden (Don)
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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If you see only stars shining, doesn't that suggest a dim view of everything else?
Keep walking that straight line! :)
Good luck in the tanka contest,
Ogden (Don)
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thank you Don, turning a corner from darkness all one wants to see is brightness, there was no dim awhile ago just black, much appreciated****kahpot
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You're welcome, Kahpot.
I hope you always see the daylight, can keep your focus on the stars at night, and rainy weather is rare wherever you go.
Don
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Very nice tanka Kapot! There is an ingenious turn in the second and third lines: my life had turned a corner / walking the straight line.
There is a bit of an inconsequence in the syllable count 6-7-5-7-6 and in the last line a typo (I think) "shinning?".
But an earned 5 stars by me.
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Very nice tanka Kapot! There is an ingenious turn in the second and third lines: my life had turned a corner / walking the straight line.
There is a bit of an inconsequence in the syllable count 6-7-5-7-6 and in the last line a typo (I think) "shinning?".
But an earned 5 stars by me.
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Many thanks for you excellent comments and your help, I must have been asleep at the keyboard, very much appreciated****kahpot
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I am glad to have been of help. Thanks for your response
