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The Homeless Need...22 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your double etheree is creatively composed, vividly descriptive, and timely.
The homeless population is going to be even larger because of the pandemic. It will take more than a blanket, a cup of coffee, or a couple of meals to make even a dent in the problem!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Your double etheree is creatively composed, vividly descriptive, and timely.
The homeless population is going to be even larger because of the pandemic. It will take more than a blanket, a cup of coffee, or a couple of meals to make even a dent in the problem!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much, yes they do need help
Comment from Bill Pinder
Good point that we need to keep extending the help to the hungry and homeless during these times. This is definitely a major crunch time that makes it easy for certain people to be forgotten. Bill
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Good point that we need to keep extending the help to the hungry and homeless during these times. This is definitely a major crunch time that makes it easy for certain people to be forgotten. Bill
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you, it seems the homeless don't get the help others are getting
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your poem touches our hearts. I cannot imagine what it is like for the homeless, especially now in this very traumatic time? If there is anything we can due to help someone, we must do it.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Your poem touches our hearts. I cannot imagine what it is like for the homeless, especially now in this very traumatic time? If there is anything we can due to help someone, we must do it.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you, and yes the homeless have know where to isolate
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They should try the churches.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well done etheree and reversed etheree telling us the importance of helping others and not forgetting those who have less than we do.
I think the black and white color scheme shows right and wrong or the white light help is to the black (dark) life of the poor.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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This is a well done etheree and reversed etheree telling us the importance of helping others and not forgetting those who have less than we do.
I think the black and white color scheme shows right and wrong or the white light help is to the black (dark) life of the poor.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for these very encouraging comments
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Don't mention it, kahpot
Joan
Comment from Badger_29
An excellent example, it it the format well. I'm not familiar with his form, this seems difficult but you have managed to convey a clear concise message utilizing the etheree.
I see no room for improvement.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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An excellent example, it it the format well. I'm not familiar with his form, this seems difficult but you have managed to convey a clear concise message utilizing the etheree.
I see no room for improvement.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Wow! thank you very much Darren, your review and comments are very uplifting and encouraging
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Glad to oblige, nice to connect with you during these difficult times.
Stay safe!
Blessing
Brother Badger
Darren
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Etheree in a diamond shape, the homeless are people too, and we may find ourselves in their position too, stretch out a helping hand to those who cannot help themselves.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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A very well-written Etheree in a diamond shape, the homeless are people too, and we may find ourselves in their position too, stretch out a helping hand to those who cannot help themselves.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Eve Vasa
Hello, lovely etheree, they almost make a shape poem, but for those you can only be out by one unit, but very pleasing visually. It is very sad about the homeless, I agree. Your observations are astute in this verse.
And I'm afraid, because we've been so reactionary with this virus, a lot more people will be pushed over the line into homelessness and poverty, possibly million. That is going to be one of the worst, and far reaching affects, and I think it is one of the reasons we should have opened the door and let it in. It is not of man, only in the sense of intercessory prayer where you can pray directly into something, and God answers. But even leaving religion aside, it's natural, and I think we should let nature take its course and get on with our lives. (You can only put off paying the piper for so long.) There's just too many of us and our resources can't support this type of growing populous into the future, not and be equitable, which we aren't at the moment. So much poverty world wide as your poem says, with a few rich nations using such a high percentage of the goods.
Suggestions for improvement, only one:
You have one space to many between 'world' and 'praying'.
We take our children sometimes, so they can see what it is like for those less fortunate, and other things, like 'this can be where drugs lead'. If you want a good life, and not end up like this, 'clean living and education, education, education.' And we are getting educated. But we have these tent/sleeping bags to give to the homeless when we take the kids. And that is important, it's what you do for the poor, not what you write and get all emotional over. Not meaning you at all, very important you don't take it personally, I'm just responding to your writing. But I do read a lot about the poor here, and I always feel like saying the same thing. "Okay, you're all up in arms, but what do you DO for them?" Love acts ....
Lovely poem nicely presented and thanks for sharing it at FS. Eve.
Thanks for sharing your poem.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Hello, lovely etheree, they almost make a shape poem, but for those you can only be out by one unit, but very pleasing visually. It is very sad about the homeless, I agree. Your observations are astute in this verse.
And I'm afraid, because we've been so reactionary with this virus, a lot more people will be pushed over the line into homelessness and poverty, possibly million. That is going to be one of the worst, and far reaching affects, and I think it is one of the reasons we should have opened the door and let it in. It is not of man, only in the sense of intercessory prayer where you can pray directly into something, and God answers. But even leaving religion aside, it's natural, and I think we should let nature take its course and get on with our lives. (You can only put off paying the piper for so long.) There's just too many of us and our resources can't support this type of growing populous into the future, not and be equitable, which we aren't at the moment. So much poverty world wide as your poem says, with a few rich nations using such a high percentage of the goods.
Suggestions for improvement, only one:
You have one space to many between 'world' and 'praying'.
We take our children sometimes, so they can see what it is like for those less fortunate, and other things, like 'this can be where drugs lead'. If you want a good life, and not end up like this, 'clean living and education, education, education.' And we are getting educated. But we have these tent/sleeping bags to give to the homeless when we take the kids. And that is important, it's what you do for the poor, not what you write and get all emotional over. Not meaning you at all, very important you don't take it personally, I'm just responding to your writing. But I do read a lot about the poor here, and I always feel like saying the same thing. "Okay, you're all up in arms, but what do you DO for them?" Love acts ....
Lovely poem nicely presented and thanks for sharing it at FS. Eve.
Thanks for sharing your poem.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much, what a wonderful and helpful review and your comments are so encouraging, the homeless have no homes to isolate in so it must be very hard for them
Comment from Frank Jauregui
Wow! the visual structure of your poem and the subject written of, reminds the reader that we have the ability to chose to do nothing or selflessly intervene on behalf of the homeless. I mentioned the visual because it resembles the temperature controls on our air conditioner. Again, we have control. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Wow! the visual structure of your poem and the subject written of, reminds the reader that we have the ability to chose to do nothing or selflessly intervene on behalf of the homeless. I mentioned the visual because it resembles the temperature controls on our air conditioner. Again, we have control. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you so very much
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine Etheree and the homeless much be having a terrible time just now with this virus about and I day say it will wipe many of them out, your poem has a lot of heart and soul, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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A fine Etheree and the homeless much be having a terrible time just now with this virus about and I day say it will wipe many of them out, your poem has a lot of heart and soul, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much, yes they need help also
Comment from sunnilicious
That was a beautiful poem. Everyone deserves home, work, family, food and and plenty love. Well thought out. Clearly written. Nice visual imagery presented. Excellent work :)
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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That was a beautiful poem. Everyone deserves home, work, family, food and and plenty love. Well thought out. Clearly written. Nice visual imagery presented. Excellent work :)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review
