A Window On My World
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Staying Afloat"Daily 5-7-5 simplicities for April Na-Po-Wri-Mo
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Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your nautical metaphor and you certainly have a wonderful leader/captain leading your boat of five million strong Kiwis! Great job with all your thoughtful poems throughout April.
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Enjoyed your nautical metaphor and you certainly have a wonderful leader/captain leading your boat of five million strong Kiwis! Great job with all your thoughtful poems throughout April.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
Comment from Drew Delaney
Is there some distancing required? We are slowly opening up here in parts of Canada. The worry of second wave is going to keep me close to home, but I will visit with family soon. Thank you for sharing your lovely poems.
Drew xx
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Is there some distancing required? We are slowly opening up here in parts of Canada. The worry of second wave is going to keep me close to home, but I will visit with family soon. Thank you for sharing your lovely poems.
Drew xx
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is the first time in my lifetime that I have felt like the world is my neighbor. You pick up on this nicely. Sometimes simple words say it the best--We're in the same boat.
I enjoyed this very much. I found it inspiriting and intelligent. Did you know that your next to last line has only 6 syllables? The poem is so nice, I would fix that.
Thank you for sharing, my friend.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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This is the first time in my lifetime that I have felt like the world is my neighbor. You pick up on this nicely. Sometimes simple words say it the best--We're in the same boat.
I enjoyed this very much. I found it inspiriting and intelligent. Did you know that your next to last line has only 6 syllables? The poem is so nice, I would fix that.
Thank you for sharing, my friend.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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ooops... I get ahead of myself with a thought for the poem then forget about syllable accuracy! Lucky I have you to check me... thanks you! I've amended the last stanza to read:
Let?s cast off anchors
while taking our new bearings
to steer through the storm.
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That is perfect.
Comment from poetwatch
LisaMay, your daily poem is good. need to fix one line though, "and take our new bearings", 6 syllables. You're writing on a serious topic that involves the world. I'm glad your Prime Minister got your back. Our Pres... what can I say. Yet, overall you made me laugh. :D "the really scary thing is that people will get trampled to death in the mad frenzy to get takeaways! Honestly, you'd think some people were going to die of starvation without an immediate fix of McDonalds or KFC.) " I copied this and laughed again. :) Write something like this to make people laugh. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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LisaMay, your daily poem is good. need to fix one line though, "and take our new bearings", 6 syllables. You're writing on a serious topic that involves the world. I'm glad your Prime Minister got your back. Our Pres... what can I say. Yet, overall you made me laugh. :D "the really scary thing is that people will get trampled to death in the mad frenzy to get takeaways! Honestly, you'd think some people were going to die of starvation without an immediate fix of McDonalds or KFC.) " I copied this and laughed again. :) Write something like this to make people laugh. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Thanks for noticing the lapse on my part about the syllable count in the last stanza. I fixed it to read:
Let?s cast off anchors
while taking our new bearings
to steer through the storm.
I'm pleased you got a chuckle out of my author notes. People prioritise the strangest things (in my opinion. (I would have thought lockdown would make them appreciate home cooking, but no, they were lusting after what they couldn't have.)
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
It will ever be so, LisaMay. When did we ever not think of feeding ourselves? Your poem is rife with common sense. I believe that despite the tragic loss of lives, we are strong enough to ameliorate our experiences to our advantage as we go forward.
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It will ever be so, LisaMay. When did we ever not think of feeding ourselves? Your poem is rife with common sense. I believe that despite the tragic loss of lives, we are strong enough to ameliorate our experiences to our advantage as we go forward.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
Comment from RodG
Your extended metaphor of us all being at sea in a leaky boat and needing to work together to "plot a new course" is terrific--and very accurate. We won't come out of this pandemic unscathed even if we don't get infected.
Where I live, we're still told to stay at home and any restaurant still open only has pick-up service. Rod
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Your extended metaphor of us all being at sea in a leaky boat and needing to work together to "plot a new course" is terrific--and very accurate. We won't come out of this pandemic unscathed even if we don't get infected.
Where I live, we're still told to stay at home and any restaurant still open only has pick-up service. Rod
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
Comment from JudyE
Australia is doing well too, as far as the figures go. I've been very impressed with your Prime Minister. We live out of town but I think we've been able to get getaways from the beginning. Certainly some people think their throats have been cut if they're deprived of takeaway.
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Australia is doing well too, as far as the figures go. I've been very impressed with your Prime Minister. We live out of town but I think we've been able to get getaways from the beginning. Certainly some people think their throats have been cut if they're deprived of takeaway.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
Comment from Sugarray77
Hi Lisa. I enjoyed reading your take on the CV pandemic and how nations are reopening and recovering. It sounds like you all are doing it right... glad you have a great leader. Well written and interesting read.
Melissa
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Hi Lisa. I enjoyed reading your take on the CV pandemic and how nations are reopening and recovering. It sounds like you all are doing it right... glad you have a great leader. Well written and interesting read.
Melissa
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
Comment from Cindy Decker
Lisa,
Good evening? (In New Zealand?)
I love your metaphors using boats to symbolize our navigating through life. Some people drive speed boats, some yachts, and some, lifeboats. What a wonderful vehicle (no pun intended) for your poem. you've written an excellent poem.
Best wishes.
Blessings, Cindy
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Lisa,
Good evening? (In New Zealand?)
I love your metaphors using boats to symbolize our navigating through life. Some people drive speed boats, some yachts, and some, lifeboats. What a wonderful vehicle (no pun intended) for your poem. you've written an excellent poem.
Best wishes.
Blessings, Cindy
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Excellent use of boating theme and bailing/sailing imagery. I appreciate the footnotes--glad to hear some good news; let's hope no stampede. Cheers. LIZ
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Excellent use of boating theme and bailing/sailing imagery. I appreciate the footnotes--glad to hear some good news; let's hope no stampede. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
