Untethered-Never Forgotten
A Nonet Poem18 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh my, this is an e exceptional nonet for the co test. The words flow as a complete piece, not jerky or broken. Emotional and perfectly metered. A true winner
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Oh my, this is an e exceptional nonet for the co test. The words flow as a complete piece, not jerky or broken. Emotional and perfectly metered. A true winner
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and review, they are always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent nonet. I haven't counted the syllables, I trust you. However, it reads well and is very fluid, and the shape is perfect.
If you look after them carefully, no-one (except age) can take your memories off you, and your control of them lets you move on, in strength.
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This is an excellent nonet. I haven't counted the syllables, I trust you. However, it reads well and is very fluid, and the shape is perfect.
If you look after them carefully, no-one (except age) can take your memories off you, and your control of them lets you move on, in strength.
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your wonderful and encouraging comments and review, and yes age can take our memories, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Nonet tells a cause of happiness, past love unchains the hidden or buried treasures of memories; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. Good luck. ALCREATOR
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This Nonet tells a cause of happiness, past love unchains the hidden or buried treasures of memories; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. Good luck. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thank you very much, as always much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Cindy Decker
Kahpot, I've never seen the kind of poem that sound like it has one continuous thought. (With sub thoughts). I love it. You do this employing skill and cohesiveness.
Excellent work.
Best wishes, Cindy
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Kahpot, I've never seen the kind of poem that sound like it has one continuous thought. (With sub thoughts). I love it. You do this employing skill and cohesiveness.
Excellent work.
Best wishes, Cindy
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Wow! thank you Cindy, yes this is a good form of poetry I think, your wonderful comments and six stars are very much appreciated, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
There's something powerful and freeing about the word, "untethered." Your nonet is beautifully formed and the words are reassuring about the treasures of the memories of loves in our past. Best wishes in the contest!
Some comments:
"buried within my minds valued depths (mind's)
I find the most preciuos treasure (precious)
"urging lifes freedom" (life's)
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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There's something powerful and freeing about the word, "untethered." Your nonet is beautifully formed and the words are reassuring about the treasures of the memories of loves in our past. Best wishes in the contest!
Some comments:
"buried within my minds valued depths (mind's)
I find the most preciuos treasure (precious)
"urging lifes freedom" (life's)
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Hello my very helpful friend, thought I was getting the hang of this punctuation thing! though with your valued help I think I am improving, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You're welcome!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Content deserves five stars. I like the flow and progression of this nonet. Having lost a love, we might be untethered but long for that tethering. I might point out a few places to improve on punctuation and spelling:
buried within my minds valued depths mind's
I find the most preciuos treasure precious
chained 'round solid memories
which surface untarnished
urging lifes freedom life's
in time now lived
untethered ~
from past
love
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Content deserves five stars. I like the flow and progression of this nonet. Having lost a love, we might be untethered but long for that tethering. I might point out a few places to improve on punctuation and spelling:
buried within my minds valued depths mind's
I find the most preciuos treasure precious
chained 'round solid memories
which surface untarnished
urging lifes freedom life's
in time now lived
untethered ~
from past
love
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thank you very much, your help is much appreciated and I have corrected as you suggested, very helpful and many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These are deep meaningful words full of memories and melancholy remembrances of the past, a finely tuned nonet here, perfectly formed, much enjoyed,love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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These are deep meaningful words full of memories and melancholy remembrances of the past, a finely tuned nonet here, perfectly formed, much enjoyed,love Dolly x
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Comment Written 03-May-2020
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Thank you very much , your comments and review are very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Puzzle
I loved this. My fave part is chained round solid memories which surface untarnished. That is some poetic stuff right there! Beautifully done. Love it. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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I loved this. My fave part is chained round solid memories which surface untarnished. That is some poetic stuff right there! Beautifully done. Love it. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and I am glad you liked this one****kahpot
