Anthrax
a bottle story15 total reviews
Comment from Raul1
This story is a bit tricky to that character reading the letter. Anthrax got to him. Very creative. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like this story. Good luck on the contest!
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This story is a bit tricky to that character reading the letter. Anthrax got to him. Very creative. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like this story. Good luck on the contest!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story about the messy Inna bottle that is not always the message we may hope to be it is always better to be safe than sorry when we handle foreign objects.
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A very well-written story about the messy Inna bottle that is not always the message we may hope to be it is always better to be safe than sorry when we handle foreign objects.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
Comment from Jomo17
I enjoyed your humorous story. The back and forth conversation was clever and effective. Great use of dialogue. It was crisp and easy to read. The twist at the end made me smile. Thanks for sharing.
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I enjoyed your humorous story. The back and forth conversation was clever and effective. Great use of dialogue. It was crisp and easy to read. The twist at the end made me smile. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
Comment from poetwatch
Author, you have a clean sense of humor. :) Nowadays, it is the only way to be. it is a well-written story, different in a sense that the motto would have to be cleanliness is the best step to safety. You could change this word. I believe you want to write (hid)hide. This is a good entry for the Message in a Bottle contest.
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Author, you have a clean sense of humor. :) Nowadays, it is the only way to be. it is a well-written story, different in a sense that the motto would have to be cleanliness is the best step to safety. You could change this word. I believe you want to write (hid)hide. This is a good entry for the Message in a Bottle contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
Comment from humpwhistle
I'm afraid this isn't very clear to me. There's a backstory involving a genie that has me quite confused. Also, I think you me Anthrax--or am I missing something.
- No, thank you. My mom told me not to open bottles without reading the instructions first. Come on, open me! I will grant you a wish!--shouldn't these two thoughts be separated--as from different speakers?
contact something.--perhaps you mean, 'contract'?
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
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I'm afraid this isn't very clear to me. There's a backstory involving a genie that has me quite confused. Also, I think you me Anthrax--or am I missing something.
- No, thank you. My mom told me not to open bottles without reading the instructions first. Come on, open me! I will grant you a wish!--shouldn't these two thoughts be separated--as from different speakers?
contact something.--perhaps you mean, 'contract'?
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020