Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hello AnnieDawn :)
I really enjoyed this. It's so innocent and nostalgic.
I love the bouncy rhythm and the monorhymed stanzas, it all adds to the childlike fun :)
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thanks for your review and kind comments. We had no idea we were unable to catch a fish with the equipment we were given. The downcast eyes? We felt guilty for eating all the crackers which, I think, were given to us because they knew we would do just that.

Comment from ESOSTINE

Excellent

A very good walk into childhood memories. It appears quite safer those years past than today. Would you consider taking at it again especially line 1 of the last stanza appears to be short of the 10 syllable count you maintained on others. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thank you so much for reviewing and your good pickup on that line. I did go back and fixed it so all the lines have the same syllable count now. Really nice of you to point that out. I appreciate when I get a pointer like that rather than just words. Thank you so much.

reply by ESOSTINE on 18-Aug-2020

You are appreciated. And thanks for counting me worthy of the nomination.

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

What a wonderful story, to have the love no matter if you have succeeded or not, the fact that it was all about having fun, very well written with great flow and rhyme****kahpot

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thanks for your review and kind comments. We had no idea we were unable to catch a fish with the equipment we were given. The downcast eyes? We felt guilty for eating all the crackers which, I think, were given to us because they knew we would do just that.

Comment from gramalot8

Excellent

Thank you for your cute storyline. I could envision the day of fishing with all the kids lined along the shore.... even though it ended in a not so successful way, I'm sure it was a fun-filled day.

Thanks for sharing this with us and I hope you do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thanks for your review and kind comments. We had no idea we were unable to catch a fish with the equipment we were given. The downcast eyes? We felt guilty for eating all the crackers which, I think, were given to us because they knew we would do just that.

Comment from LisaMay

Excellent

I love your reminiscing portrayal of simple childhood fun. Your parents' strategy on camping trips of sending you off to fish in a 3-inch deep brook is funny. Good memories of happy times - apart from the disappointment of not catching anything.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thanks for your review and kind comments. We had no idea we were unable to catch a fish with the equipment we were given. The downcast eyes? We felt guilty for eating all the crackers which, I think, were given to us because they knew we would do just that.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

Your childhood story is well-told and charming. Presumably no fish were expected! LOL! I remember wading in a creek, watching tadpoles swim around, and avoiding crawfish; they liked to clamp onto toes.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thanks for your review and kind comments. We had no idea we were unable to catch a fish with the equipment we were given. The downcast eyes? We felt guilty for eating all the crackers which, I think, were given to us because they knew we would do just that.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Just moved this very cutesy poem, quite beautifully written, entertaining because all have delicious stories from our childhood days, and this is from your wonderful childhood and it is wonderful, I like the fact you wrote it in divine monorhyme, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thanks for your review and kind comments. We had no idea we were unable to catch a fish with the equipment we were given. The downcast eyes? We felt guilty for eating all the crackers which, I think, were given to us because they knew we would do just that.

reply by royowen on 18-Aug-2020

I think so too

Comment from Kermit R. Mullins

Excellent

Very lovely vision of a past still filled with fond memories. Thank God for memories. Best of luck with your "Share a Story in a Poem" entry. Best regards.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thanks for your review and kind comments. We had no idea we were unable to catch a fish with the equipment we were given. The downcast eyes? We felt guilty for eating all the crackers which, I think, were given to us because they knew we would do just that.

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Excellent

Yes. Sometimes all you gain was the journey you took, not the end results. Using "crackers" as baits was funny. Only little kids would have believed it would work.

Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thanks for your review and kind comments. We had no idea we were unable to catch a fish with the equipment we were given. The downcast eyes? We felt guilty for eating all the crackers which, I think, were given to us because they knew we would do just that.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written story/poem as bout the childhood freedoms we enjoyed and we were not afraid to become the fishermen that the grownups show bus nieces should be the best.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thanks for your review and kind comments. We had no idea we were unable to catch a fish with the equipment we were given. The downcast eyes? We felt guilty for eating all the crackers which, I think, were given to us because they knew we would do just that.