Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "As Seasons Change"My book of poems and stories
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Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Your use of the required words seemed natural and not forced. You also were able to maintain a meter and rhyming pattern and create a vivid picture of the advent of winter that matched the attractive artwork you selected.
Great job!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Your use of the required words seemed natural and not forced. You also were able to maintain a meter and rhyming pattern and create a vivid picture of the advent of winter that matched the attractive artwork you selected.
Great job!
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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your support and kind review.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is Very beautiful choice of words. You managed to use fire cold ice and breath and incorporated it into your poem very nicely. Great writing ð???
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This is Very beautiful choice of words. You managed to use fire cold ice and breath and incorporated it into your poem very nicely. Great writing ð???
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Thanks for your support and kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I find your last stanza perfect, such a beautiful personification for Mr. Jack Frost that creeps on us with its icy mischief: "
Fingers of ICE creep slow across the land
Spreading like FIRE across each window pane
Creating lacy patterns oh so grand
As people bundle warmly once again"
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I find your last stanza perfect, such a beautiful personification for Mr. Jack Frost that creeps on us with its icy mischief: "
Fingers of ICE creep slow across the land
Spreading like FIRE across each window pane
Creating lacy patterns oh so grand
As people bundle warmly once again"
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your support and kind review. I am so honored to have received the six stars.
Comment from Earl Corp
Excellentj ob using the words in the prompt. Your poem rhymed and made sense.Very nice job. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing. Stay safe and stay healthy.
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Excellentj ob using the words in the prompt. Your poem rhymed and made sense.Very nice job. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your support and kind review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and excellent use of the selected words. Season changes are part of our lives and we know each season's time and name whether it will be cold, warm, rain, or snow.
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A very well-written poem and excellent use of the selected words. Season changes are part of our lives and we know each season's time and name whether it will be cold, warm, rain, or snow.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your support and kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I like your poem. I remember using those very same words in a poem. That's why I like to use my time writing for non contests now. Although it is good to enter the contests to compete.
It is getting chilly. I love fall. It sounds like the cool weather will get alittle warmer this week. Stay warm. It is sweatshirt weather. Pull up the hood.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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I like your poem. I remember using those very same words in a poem. That's why I like to use my time writing for non contests now. Although it is good to enter the contests to compete.
It is getting chilly. I love fall. It sounds like the cool weather will get alittle warmer this week. Stay warm. It is sweatshirt weather. Pull up the hood.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Contests give me a challenge to write on a specific subject. With working a full time job and an autistic grandsons care I have little spare time to choose my own subjects. Thank you so much for reviewing and sharing.
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I have an autistic granddaughter, too. They are so very special.
Comment from oliver818
I like this poem. You included the words in the instructions well. The imagery is beautiful and powerful all the way through, and I particularly enjoyed the line "fingers of ice creep slowly"
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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I like this poem. You included the words in the instructions well. The imagery is beautiful and powerful all the way through, and I particularly enjoyed the line "fingers of ice creep slowly"
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Where I live, fall is well on the way. Thanks so much for your kind review.
Comment from RodG
You have done a commendable job of using the required words to describe Fall and the approach of Winter. But I don't think your simile works. I don't see ICE spreading like FIRE. The antonyms don't work here.
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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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You have done a commendable job of using the required words to describe Fall and the approach of Winter. But I don't think your simile works. I don't see ICE spreading like FIRE. The antonyms don't work here.
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Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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I am so sorry you don't see it. I have watched ice spread across a window when living in below zero weather in Alaska, just like fire on the news in Ca. That is where the line came from. Real to me as I witnessed it...lol. I do thank you for reviewing and for your honest comments.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
A delightful piece about the changing of times and weather - we better all get used to the idea, whether we like it or not!
i thought the ice moving like fire was a real unique and unusual metaphor.
Thanks and good luck!
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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Dear Mystery Writer,
A delightful piece about the changing of times and weather - we better all get used to the idea, whether we like it or not!
i thought the ice moving like fire was a real unique and unusual metaphor.
Thanks and good luck!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Where I live, fall is well on the way. Thanks so much for your kind review.