Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Tempted"My book of poems and stories
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Comment from equestrik
What-this is indeed unfair. Poor girl. What a mean bully. I hope he didn't get away with it. Kids can be so mean at times and often hurt one-another without thinking about it at all.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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What-this is indeed unfair. Poor girl. What a mean bully. I hope he didn't get away with it. Kids can be so mean at times and often hurt one-another without thinking about it at all.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. Still, the boy hits girl thing goes on eh?
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-Your note is appreciated.
-It must be a different
world out there!
-Good imagery and rhyme.
-You tell the story well, too.
-Sounds like she got punished
for sticking up for her friend!
-A small thing in your
description: dilemma.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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-Nice image and presentation.
-Your note is appreciated.
-It must be a different
world out there!
-Good imagery and rhyme.
-You tell the story well, too.
-Sounds like she got punished
for sticking up for her friend!
-A small thing in your
description: dilemma.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. Still, the boy hits girl thing goes on eh?
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Being grounded for defending yourself not fair. Sends the wrong message that bullying is okay, when in fact it is not.
friends should be friend's
Should make a good entry for this contest.
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Being grounded for defending yourself not fair. Sends the wrong message that bullying is okay, when in fact it is not.
friends should be friend's
Should make a good entry for this contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. Still, the boy hits girl thing goes on eh?
Comment from Mary Vigasin
your prose tells a full story and is well written.
You captured a moment when someone does step up to defend.
Sorry that there was punishment for it. As a kid I was bullied and those who witnessed it, I became a pariah as they were afraid that they would also be bullied for defending me.
So kudos to the defender and how your wrote this poem.
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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your prose tells a full story and is well written.
You captured a moment when someone does step up to defend.
Sorry that there was punishment for it. As a kid I was bullied and those who witnessed it, I became a pariah as they were afraid that they would also be bullied for defending me.
So kudos to the defender and how your wrote this poem.
Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. Still, the boy hits girl thing goes on eh?