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Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Anupam,
You have penned a lovely 5/7/5 poem and one I enjoyed reading more than once. You have chosen expressive words, the count is spot on and I love the theme. I so agree with you. I grew up in a small town and thought the whole world was a bowl of cherries. I was so disappointed when I got out in the real word and found nothing is simple and won't ever be. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Hi Anupam,
You have penned a lovely 5/7/5 poem and one I enjoyed reading more than once. You have chosen expressive words, the count is spot on and I love the theme. I so agree with you. I grew up in a small town and thought the whole world was a bowl of cherries. I was so disappointed when I got out in the real word and found nothing is simple and won't ever be. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Hi cheyennewy
its nice to know that you had the same experience as mine.it's disappointing af first really when you get glimpse of that world.
I respect and praise your words.thanks for such lovely review
Comment from Sagnik Das
You, I presume, do invariably fare a "six" with this immensely sensitive extravaganza. The contextual & thematic coherence thereof, combined with your unbridled, free-styled poetic expressiveness, makes it in every way, a delightful read.
Fraught in plausible touches of artistic symbolism, I can't help admiring the sheer mastery of articulate diction, you so brilliantly chose to employ in this tender piece - the choicest use of metaphoric imagery in just three tiny lines, truly deems commendable appraisal ; For the employment of so few words, you manage to say so much indeed - and herein, I conjecture, thrives your beseeming greatness as a poet - the lofty message in the poem rings out in vociferous clarity. Scarcely have I words enough to commend you ....
In the face of its inevitable limitations, (it being a '5-7-5' poetry sequence), the unbridled flow of poetic expression tends to "glide" on, effortlessly yet - an attribute which in itself seems challenging enough for any writer of poetry to achieve .... Your work thus pleases me all the more ; I adore it ! ...
Hence, to infer precisely, there persists a somewhat latent sense of 'intriguing profoundness' around this enigmatic work of yours, which pleases me the most and deserves my fondest appraisal ... Well done, good friend ; Hats off to you !
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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You, I presume, do invariably fare a "six" with this immensely sensitive extravaganza. The contextual & thematic coherence thereof, combined with your unbridled, free-styled poetic expressiveness, makes it in every way, a delightful read.
Fraught in plausible touches of artistic symbolism, I can't help admiring the sheer mastery of articulate diction, you so brilliantly chose to employ in this tender piece - the choicest use of metaphoric imagery in just three tiny lines, truly deems commendable appraisal ; For the employment of so few words, you manage to say so much indeed - and herein, I conjecture, thrives your beseeming greatness as a poet - the lofty message in the poem rings out in vociferous clarity. Scarcely have I words enough to commend you ....
In the face of its inevitable limitations, (it being a '5-7-5' poetry sequence), the unbridled flow of poetic expression tends to "glide" on, effortlessly yet - an attribute which in itself seems challenging enough for any writer of poetry to achieve .... Your work thus pleases me all the more ; I adore it ! ...
Hence, to infer precisely, there persists a somewhat latent sense of 'intriguing profoundness' around this enigmatic work of yours, which pleases me the most and deserves my fondest appraisal ... Well done, good friend ; Hats off to you !
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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I have all praise and respect for your such analytical,deep.and pleasing thinking.you have put your words in such alluring manner that i just stand amazed at your benevolence.a hearty thanks:-)
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Oh, please, don't thank me thus, I beg ; for it was much to my own elated pleasure that I availed the opportunity of coming across such a wonderful poetic piece. Hence,on the contrary, it is rather I who ought to extend my overwhelming thankfulness to you for your kind appreciation of my much erroneous review...! Thank you so much, indeed , for this most affable bounty. You are but one of a Kind !
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Comment from TKField
Moon, cocoon. Not bad. Tonight's going to the biggest moon of the year, for what it's worth. Shining, sweet full moon? Alright, no more modifiers for you. Guess you had to get that syllable count, though, to make it a proper Hi-Coo thingy. This you have done.As these things go, this is better than most.It's like...metaphoric, man!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Moon, cocoon. Not bad. Tonight's going to the biggest moon of the year, for what it's worth. Shining, sweet full moon? Alright, no more modifiers for you. Guess you had to get that syllable count, though, to make it a proper Hi-Coo thingy. This you have done.As these things go, this is better than most.It's like...metaphoric, man!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Thanks for your words and time.and hehe..that typical american sound..lol..just kidding:-)
Comment from Dibul
Wow! You've conveyed a little one's dream of growing up and exploring the world very beautifully in this 5/7/5. That picture does great justice to this little one! "Shining sweet full moon" is a lovely simile for a cocoon, or a child's beautiful world. True that we face the harsh reality of the big, bad or not-so-good world out there when we grow up! Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Wow! You've conveyed a little one's dream of growing up and exploring the world very beautifully in this 5/7/5. That picture does great justice to this little one! "Shining sweet full moon" is a lovely simile for a cocoon, or a child's beautiful world. True that we face the harsh reality of the big, bad or not-so-good world out there when we grow up! Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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I am touched that you like it so much and saw its depth.i was very lucky with picture though.i wasn't just aware of how it works here.but in these four days,i have learnt a lot.i appreciate your view.thanks for a lovely feedback
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a lovely 5-7-5. You express it so well - the pleasure of being a child again. I think we all think that the older we get and we think about our youth more. You expressed this meaning in such a few words. Well done. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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This is a lovely 5-7-5. You express it so well - the pleasure of being a child again. I think we all think that the older we get and we think about our youth more. You expressed this meaning in such a few words. Well done. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Your words are very positive and motivating.i appreciate and respect it.thanks for sharing your opinion:-)
Comment from Martin Chan
A good 5-7-5 poem composed with nicely chosen words and thoughts.It is true that as kids we are living in a cocoon protected from the real life of harsh world.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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A good 5-7-5 poem composed with nicely chosen words and thoughts.It is true that as kids we are living in a cocoon protected from the real life of harsh world.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Glad to know that you liked it.thanks for reading and sharing your views
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am so glad you childhood was so good you want to stay there. Many of my first graders childhoods are not so good and they pray to escape them.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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I am so glad you childhood was so good you want to stay there. Many of my first graders childhoods are not so good and they pray to escape them.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Thanks for sharing your view and kind words:-)
Comment from Glasstruth
Great picture. Don't know if it can imagine, but I'll take your word for it. Like the internal rhyme of "moon & cocoon" The beauty of life is everywhere. Good luck with the contest. Les
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Great picture. Don't know if it can imagine, but I'll take your word for it. Like the internal rhyme of "moon & cocoon" The beauty of life is everywhere. Good luck with the contest. Les
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Your kind views are appreciated.thank you:-)
Comment from TheNakedPoet
plenty of human parallels here and it certainly is a big wide world once we get amongst it
i liked the caccoon theme and we are in that bubble for awhile and the anticipation of experiencing the world can get a bit long in the tooth though as most of us just want to get out there and start living it
well done
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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plenty of human parallels here and it certainly is a big wide world once we get amongst it
i liked the caccoon theme and we are in that bubble for awhile and the anticipation of experiencing the world can get a bit long in the tooth though as most of us just want to get out there and start living it
well done
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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I appreciate your deep insight review.thanks for your kind feedback
Comment from Ridley Williams
Your poem expresses deep insight. Which of
us would not love to return to those innocent
times. Reality is a harsh mistress. Well done
on your thought process for this piece, Ridley
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Your poem expresses deep insight. Which of
us would not love to return to those innocent
times. Reality is a harsh mistress. Well done
on your thought process for this piece, Ridley
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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I appreciate what you said.thanks for an encouraging review