Comment from JRaeVaughn

Excellent

I'm impartial regarding a lot of alliteration in short Japanese form and wonder what traditionalists would say, however, I enjoyed the metaphor in "leech-vampire and life liquor-blood." Also, resurrection is an interesting analogy of the walking dead. Good luck in the contest. JR

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

reply by JRaeVaughn on 08-Jul-2013

My pleasure.

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

WOW! I'm afraid of these creatures. Your poem is well written and follows the rules for this type of poetry. Also you said a lot in those three lines. Excellent.

Have a nice week.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Oh, goodness, what images you evoke with a few nicely chosen words.

I would have never thought of them as leeches ... but that's exactly what they are!

Nicely done, Anupam. All the best in the contest!

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Oh grisly, but a good 5-7-5 for the competition. I like your likening vampires to leeches. Good alliteration throughout. Rave resurrection is a good line. You express in two words a vampires need for blood to stay alive. Good luck in the competition. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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I appreciate your thoughts.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Yes indeed, the vampire is such an interesting creation. I don't think I'd go so far as to say they gift reincarnation because those poor souls are doomed to eternal life of angst. Lou

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

You have a great title for this, "Revival of the Red." Your 5-7-5 syllable count is perfect. I like your alliteration, but might turn the first line to read "lusty leeches lurk." The description of the vampire's actions "love luminal life-liquor is great. Very powerful presentation, and best of luck in the contest. judi

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013

I appreciate your words.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

reply by judiverse on 08-Jul-2013

You're so welcome, and best of luck in the contest. judi

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Love the alliterations in all lines and the thought behind the work. You write with old knowledge even though you are so young. It's impressive. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from pattipac

Exceptional

Your perfect artwork selection segues directly into your well worded 5-7-5 poem. Your use of alliteration throughout gives life to your poem. Especially like,"love luminal life-liquor" in reference to blood.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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I apprecitae your words and thoughts.it means a lot.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Steve Pantazis

Excellent

Those lusty leeches have captured our imaginations for centuries. Your ode to the lovers of liquity red enlivened my morning. Now that I have dined on your haiku, I can sleep in my crypt undisturbed.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013

That's a very nice review.
Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Wow! Impressive alliteration, especially on the letter L. That word, rave, seems out of place to me. How about Rude Resurrection, or Rare resurrection, or best yet Red Resurrection,

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)