Betrayal
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Comment from Jay Squires
I love my periodic romp with your characters, Sandra. This was a good chapter, mostly building up expectation of what's to come later.
A couple of questions, not necessarily needing corrections:
Tania was sat with her back pressed into the sofa, [I don't know whether 'Tania was sat' is correct grammar in England, and it may even be in the U.S., but it sounds kinda klunky. I would say, "Tania was SITTING with her back ..."]
her husband was Colin's mate, he knew she was a friend of mine [even though it's in dialogue, this is a run-on sentence and you should have a semicolon or a period after "mate".]
Thank you for sharing this, Sandra.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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I love my periodic romp with your characters, Sandra. This was a good chapter, mostly building up expectation of what's to come later.
A couple of questions, not necessarily needing corrections:
Tania was sat with her back pressed into the sofa, [I don't know whether 'Tania was sat' is correct grammar in England, and it may even be in the U.S., but it sounds kinda klunky. I would say, "Tania was SITTING with her back ..."]
her husband was Colin's mate, he knew she was a friend of mine [even though it's in dialogue, this is a run-on sentence and you should have a semicolon or a period after "mate".]
Thank you for sharing this, Sandra.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Jay, for your lovely review. I'd already changed 'sat' to 'sitting' when I read it through again. I have no idea why I made that mistake in the first place. I'll sort that run-on out right away! Thank you for that. Warm hugs my dear friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Sandra, I am so far behind on reading and now I have some time I will catch up on this latest story as I enjoyed you previous ones.
Back home and taking some time out now so will have the time but no sixes left either
'Cheers Chris
Ps waiting on chapter 8 hurry ha ha
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Hi Sandra, I am so far behind on reading and now I have some time I will catch up on this latest story as I enjoyed you previous ones.
Back home and taking some time out now so will have the time but no sixes left either
'Cheers Chris
Ps waiting on chapter 8 hurry ha ha
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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That would be wonderful, Chris, I love it that you are enjoying the story.
It's always nice to come home, isn't it? I expect you're pleased to be able to relax for a while as we all need time out for ourelves. Enjoy it! Warm hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, some of the words you us are so funny...
like nits...you wrote...While Monica dished out their meals...Tania poured them both a glass of wine...Before tucking in, they clinked glasses. "Cheers"...sounds like they were getting ready to go hop in the sack...enjoy the evening...threw me off for a minute...ask Graham...
even though we truly don't know who the bad guy is yet...this is exciting getting there...and she could have at least answered the phone...sigh...know for sure if it was Colin...the good thing about owning the book...is you don't have to keep stopping...that's how I am my amazing friend...if I get into a book...I just keep reading it until the end...awesome chapter sweet girl...NEXT...lets see what Tania and Monica have in mind...and then there's Grant...sending bunches of hugs and love over yonder...Linda xxoo
and say hi to Ian for me...lots of prayers heading his way...xxoo
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Hi Sandra, some of the words you us are so funny...
like nits...you wrote...While Monica dished out their meals...Tania poured them both a glass of wine...Before tucking in, they clinked glasses. "Cheers"...sounds like they were getting ready to go hop in the sack...enjoy the evening...threw me off for a minute...ask Graham...
even though we truly don't know who the bad guy is yet...this is exciting getting there...and she could have at least answered the phone...sigh...know for sure if it was Colin...the good thing about owning the book...is you don't have to keep stopping...that's how I am my amazing friend...if I get into a book...I just keep reading it until the end...awesome chapter sweet girl...NEXT...lets see what Tania and Monica have in mind...and then there's Grant...sending bunches of hugs and love over yonder...Linda xxoo
and say hi to Ian for me...lots of prayers heading his way...xxoo
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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LOL! Linda, I'm going to have to watch those words, aren't I? Tucking in, and, get stuck in, are such common phrases here for starting a meal and enjoying it. Clinking glasses, I wasn't sure how else to say that. Everyone taps each others glasses (which makes a tinkling sound) and then says, 'cheers .. bottoms up ... here's to you ... and millions of other expressions. What do you all say? I like to learn these things! Lol. Someone told me they liked the word 'wobbly' which is when a person throws a tantrum.
I'm the same as you when it comes to reading a book, once I start a good one, I have trouble putting it down. Graham was asleep while I continued reading until 1:30 in the morning a couple of nights ago. I've always loved reading. I take after my dad there. How I wish he'd lived a few more years, to read my Mildred and Veronica time-travel books. And even though my mum didn't read much, I know she would have read mine. Do you think I'll be allowed to take some copies up there when I go????? (assuming I'll be allowed in, of course!)
Right, back to this chapter. The baddie is revealed very soon, and not in the way you would think. No, I'm not telling you, so stop throwing a wobbly! LOL. Thank you so much my dear friend for another really lovely review and for those six highly polished glowing stars! Love you millions, my dear friend. Loads of hugs. Sandra. xxx
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A prayer ????....LOL...but I guess God would appreciate a good "here's to you" just as well...cheers, bottoms up...and many more...are mostly for special occasions...
I don't read books like I did growing up...but when I find one that interest me...I have to finish it...but my mom is a big reader...she has had to go to reading large print now...but every week my brother picks up a stack of books they order at the library on the net...and my sister is a big reader as well...
stop throwing a wobbly...that's what people here do after they say cheers...a few times...you don't have to tell me the story...but a hint...something I can ponder on through the week...mountains of love back to ya my amazing friend...and bigger hugs back at you...xxoo
Comment from Colin John
Hi Sandra, this is an excellent chapter and thought I was out of sixes from my last post but glad it's there for you, and glad you added me although as a villain lol. Thanks for sharing, kind regards Colin xx
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Hi Sandra, this is an excellent chapter and thought I was out of sixes from my last post but glad it's there for you, and glad you added me although as a villain lol. Thanks for sharing, kind regards Colin xx
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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LOL! I'm so sorry you're the baddie in my book. Thank you so much for those shiny stars, Colin, it's so nice to have you read this story. It gets a bit heated soon. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
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Cheers Sandra, in my only play a couple of years ago through my daughters local acting group, I played a villain from Southend living in Barcelona lol.xx
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I bet that was exciting. Have you caught the acting bug now?
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haha, that was a one-off, she left for better things and I left lol x
Comment from royowen
It's getting rather exciting, I wonder how Tania is going to handle this one. Rachel giving her number to Colin, but her discussion with Monica hasn't led to any resolution either. You are such a good writer Sandra, I don't know what to say in superlatives. Well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Col(l)in will wat to speak to.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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It's getting rather exciting, I wonder how Tania is going to handle this one. Rachel giving her number to Colin, but her discussion with Monica hasn't led to any resolution either. You are such a good writer Sandra, I don't know what to say in superlatives. Well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Col(l)in will wat to speak to.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, dear Roy. You know how to make a lady blush, don't you! Lol. Sending you lots of love and warm hugs. :)) Sandra xxx
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You?re worth it
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra. Oh dear so the story unfolds and the plot widens. I love it. I also love the scene with the spilt wine.A really nice touch. And now you've left us on a cliff hanger. Well done. I love it. It's so well written, my friend. Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Hi Sandra. Oh dear so the story unfolds and the plot widens. I love it. I also love the scene with the spilt wine.A really nice touch. And now you've left us on a cliff hanger. Well done. I love it. It's so well written, my friend. Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for those golden stars, Ulla, and your lovely review. I'm glad you liked the spilt wine episode, that is me to a T. I either spill it down someone else, or down me when something makes me jump. Lol. Have a lovely week, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The story is gaining momentum Sandra. The characterization of Colin rings true for a sleazebag that one wouldn't want to be connected to. I am looking forward to the next chapter of intrigue where Colin will try to get access to Tania's computer, once more and perhaps Tania will be able to get proof of his fraudulent ways to present to Blake.
Ralf
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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The story is gaining momentum Sandra. The characterization of Colin rings true for a sleazebag that one wouldn't want to be connected to. I am looking forward to the next chapter of intrigue where Colin will try to get access to Tania's computer, once more and perhaps Tania will be able to get proof of his fraudulent ways to present to Blake.
Ralf
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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I like that, 'sleazebag' lol! Thank you so much, Ralf, for this lovely, review and for making me laugh. I'm delighted you are enjoying my story. Warm hugs my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from aryr
Another great continuation chapter Sandra. I like that Monica and Tania are such good friends and are truly support for each other. Colin really did a despicable thing to Tania, taking advantage of her. And she is still a little apprehensive about how she will handle him but she should or rather will be fine. Great job. Hugs, smiles and blessings.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Another great continuation chapter Sandra. I like that Monica and Tania are such good friends and are truly support for each other. Colin really did a despicable thing to Tania, taking advantage of her. And she is still a little apprehensive about how she will handle him but she should or rather will be fine. Great job. Hugs, smiles and blessings.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Alie, for this lovely review and for your continued support. You're lovely! It's so nice to know you are enjoying my story, my friend, and I really appreciate you. Warm hugs, love Sandra xxx
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You are so welcome Sandra, it truly is enjoyable reading, blessings.
Comment from blondie560
Another good chapter. Girl time chapters help make the story more real. Plus they're fun if they're trash talking the scoundrel of the story. I love learning new English terms used like "I bet he threw a wobbly." We would say something like "I bet he threw a fit, or hissy fit, or tantrum."Wobbly sounds fun to use. Also a serviette is a napkin. You don't need to change them, I just like learning what is said across the pond!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Another good chapter. Girl time chapters help make the story more real. Plus they're fun if they're trash talking the scoundrel of the story. I love learning new English terms used like "I bet he threw a wobbly." We would say something like "I bet he threw a fit, or hissy fit, or tantrum."Wobbly sounds fun to use. Also a serviette is a napkin. You don't need to change them, I just like learning what is said across the pond!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much, Blondie, for another lovely review. I've found the same with the American terms, this is a great site for learning different terms used in other countries. I think the word napkin has crept into our language, but I'm so used to saying serviette which is what most of us say. Wobbly is one of our fun descriptions, I'm glad you like it, lol. Thanks again for your lovely review, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Another very good chapter, Sandra.
-The dialogue between Monica and Tania
is very good, and gives insight into Colin,
and the whole situation she is dealing with.
-It's also good for her to share her feelings.
-The chapter is nicely broken up between
that and just enjoying Monica's company,
and having wind and dinner.
-The telephone conversation with Rachael
was done very well, and I could feel the
tension and concern coming from Rachael.
-I like Tania's comment about how Colin would sulk.
-Her conversation with Colin should prove very interesting!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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-Another very good chapter, Sandra.
-The dialogue between Monica and Tania
is very good, and gives insight into Colin,
and the whole situation she is dealing with.
-It's also good for her to share her feelings.
-The chapter is nicely broken up between
that and just enjoying Monica's company,
and having wind and dinner.
-The telephone conversation with Rachael
was done very well, and I could feel the
tension and concern coming from Rachael.
-I like Tania's comment about how Colin would sulk.
-Her conversation with Colin should prove very interesting!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you so very much for this lovely review, Pam, and all those pretty stars. I really appreciate all your your positive comments. I'm so pleased the tension came through with Tania's telephone conversation with Rachael, and that you enjoyed the chat between the ladies. Your review was amazing, thank you, my friend. Warm hugs and love. Sandra xx
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You are very welcome and deserving, Sandra, and I appreciate your reply. I'm glad you liked a few things that I had highlighted in the story.
