The Fighter
The perks of winning31 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
I like the way you delivered the philosophy of the act at the end of the work. I boxed for 12 years when younger. Loved the logic and the delivery. Good luck with this.
It has my six stars.
Best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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I like the way you delivered the philosophy of the act at the end of the work. I boxed for 12 years when younger. Loved the logic and the delivery. Good luck with this.
It has my six stars.
Best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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R.G. thank you (again...) for your kind words. I say again because i already answered it, but since it comes with a repeat of the six, who am I to let it just float by without letting you know how much I appreciated it.
Comment from Bill Schott
This slice of life brings us into the ring and a hip-pocket lesson in the fleetness of fame. These hundred words resemble everyone's fifteen minutes of fame in whatever he or she excelled in for that golden moment of recognition. Your smoker segment recalls the days when boxing was an acceptable platoon activity. Today that sport will be fought in a virtual ring, but the praise and spoils are the same. As always, a terrific post.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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This slice of life brings us into the ring and a hip-pocket lesson in the fleetness of fame. These hundred words resemble everyone's fifteen minutes of fame in whatever he or she excelled in for that golden moment of recognition. Your smoker segment recalls the days when boxing was an acceptable platoon activity. Today that sport will be fought in a virtual ring, but the praise and spoils are the same. As always, a terrific post.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Glory be, and huge thank-yous for the delightful six. Oddly they still have the fights on tv. I watch them about every week. The only ones not wearing masks are the fighters and Jimmy Lennon, the announcer. The audience is made up of cardboard cutouts. It's not quite the same without the smoke and the jeering. But I love watching them fight from the safety of my living room.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jay, I loved the story, and especially because it is a true one. It's also a great entry for the contest. I only saw one thing: instantaniosly should be instantaneosly. Good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Hi Jay, I loved the story, and especially because it is a true one. It's also a great entry for the contest. I only saw one thing: instantaniosly should be instantaneosly. Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Haha, well, that's embarrassing. A spelling error in 100 words! Thanks for your eye, Ulla, and for your kind words and stars.
Comment from lancellot
Too bad on the whooping, but there are lessons to be learned from a defeat. This is well crafted flash. You had just enough to give the readers all they needed to know to understand.
Yes, the sub-rules say 98-102 words, but a word of caution. I have never placed when I followed those sub-rules.
notes:
Instantanious
-should be: Instantaneous
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Too bad on the whooping, but there are lessons to be learned from a defeat. This is well crafted flash. You had just enough to give the readers all they needed to know to understand.
Yes, the sub-rules say 98-102 words, but a word of caution. I have never placed when I followed those sub-rules.
notes:
Instantanious
-should be: Instantaneous
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thanks for your catch. It is corrected. So, I take it you mean you stick exactly to the 100 words?
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Yes.
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
I like your flash story; even more so because it is true.
As an athlete when I was younger myself, I am ever aware of the thrill of victory and agony of defeat. The thrill of winning the first match has had to sustain you in this case--but it gave you something to write about.
I like the word choices and the spacing. It has a nice pacing that goes well with a fight atmosphere. I can almost smell the sweat.
If those potential pretty dates turned their backs over such a trivial thing as a loss, they weren't worth your time.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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I like your flash story; even more so because it is true.
As an athlete when I was younger myself, I am ever aware of the thrill of victory and agony of defeat. The thrill of winning the first match has had to sustain you in this case--but it gave you something to write about.
I like the word choices and the spacing. It has a nice pacing that goes well with a fight atmosphere. I can almost smell the sweat.
If those potential pretty dates turned their backs over such a trivial thing as a loss, they weren't worth your time.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Cynthia for reading and leaving your kind words. Their reward, if they are still living, is that they're pushing 80 years old.
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ha ha
Comment from damommy
Fame gone in a moment's time. I'm so sorry, but boxing longer might have left you injured. I grew up in a family that loved watching boxing. I always think of how the boxers might end up. You told a good story in so few words. Great job.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Fame gone in a moment's time. I'm so sorry, but boxing longer might have left you injured. I grew up in a family that loved watching boxing. I always think of how the boxers might end up. You told a good story in so few words. Great job.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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You are so kind, Damommy. Thank you so much.
Comment from kmoss
I like this story. It paints a picture using only a few words. I'm stumped on writing something for this challenge. This one could very well be the winner! Brilliant lines: "Fame romanced me."
"Saw Scotty educate me with the brutal efficiency of a champion."
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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I like this story. It paints a picture using only a few words. I'm stumped on writing something for this challenge. This one could very well be the winner! Brilliant lines: "Fame romanced me."
"Saw Scotty educate me with the brutal efficiency of a champion."
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thanks, Kmoss. I'm so happy you enjoyed this and had some lines stick out in your mind.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You were a boxer?? My word, Jay. In a way I'm glad you gave it up, you could have been seriously hurt and never written a story! We would have been the losers. You did a great job writing this under the rules of those word limits, and I agree with you about the two words either side, it makes so much difference. Well done, my friend, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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You were a boxer?? My word, Jay. In a way I'm glad you gave it up, you could have been seriously hurt and never written a story! We would have been the losers. You did a great job writing this under the rules of those word limits, and I agree with you about the two words either side, it makes so much difference. Well done, my friend, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Sandra. Yes, I boxed those two fights while in the military. Had no desire to pursue it afterward.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Wow! Who would ever have thought and ellipsis could cause that problem? I never would've. Oh well, I enjoyed reading this contest entry. It's concise and to the point. That's a very good thing. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Wow! Who would ever have thought and ellipsis could cause that problem? I never would've. Oh well, I enjoyed reading this contest entry. It's concise and to the point. That's a very good thing. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Barbara. For your kind words, and also a dollop of thanks for the 6 stars.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow - it's those days of short-lived glory and our falls from such that help to define who we are (and how we deal with both further down the road...). Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Instantanious --> Instantaneous
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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Wow - it's those days of short-lived glory and our falls from such that help to define who we are (and how we deal with both further down the road...). Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Instantanious --> Instantaneous
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Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thanks, Y.M. for your takeaway from this small piece. I agree, it's what you bring into your life AFTER your rise and fall. I appreciate you.