Regain
A Pleiades poem22 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
You are right in your author's notes, this is "a very worthy read." I like the line that goes, "reinvent those distant goals," with the sound-alikes of "those" and "goals," as well as the next line, with the internal rhyme, of "thought" and "cannot," too. And finally, the last line, that says, "remind yourself the world's still yours." This too has the sound-alikes of "world's" and "Yours," which are very pleasant sounding. The meaning and message are clear. Invest in yourself, and your ultimate goals, can be and most possibly, will be fulfilled. Thank you for letting me stand on my soapbox and preach. I am most certainly preaching to the choir.
Have a great week,
Jesse
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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You are right in your author's notes, this is "a very worthy read." I like the line that goes, "reinvent those distant goals," with the sound-alikes of "those" and "goals," as well as the next line, with the internal rhyme, of "thought" and "cannot," too. And finally, the last line, that says, "remind yourself the world's still yours." This too has the sound-alikes of "world's" and "Yours," which are very pleasant sounding. The meaning and message are clear. Invest in yourself, and your ultimate goals, can be and most possibly, will be fulfilled. Thank you for letting me stand on my soapbox and preach. I am most certainly preaching to the choir.
Have a great week,
Jesse
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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I will always accept the preaching's of my my peers, especially when help intrudes my ears, (sorry bout that) must be the wanna be poet surfacing, this is a wonderful review with many encouraging comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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I am glad you accept my preachings. As far as the accidental rhyme, as far as that goes, I do it all the time. See? I just love rhyme so much I use it freely in everything I write. I am glad you find value in my reviews.
Have a good day,
Jesse
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Value is something I can rely and always depend on, never will I disregard that
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Thanks, my friend.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This poem deserves six stars in my opinion for the subject. You display such optimism and enthusiasm for life despite age. You are raring to go at an age that others (presumably) are slowing down. And you write it so well. It is a poem form I don't know well, but it is pleasant and lends itself to resolutions and exhortations.
Potential SPAG for your consideration
never to late > never too late
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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This poem deserves six stars in my opinion for the subject. You display such optimism and enthusiasm for life despite age. You are raring to go at an age that others (presumably) are slowing down. And you write it so well. It is a poem form I don't know well, but it is pleasant and lends itself to resolutions and exhortations.
Potential SPAG for your consideration
never to late > never too late
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Wow! thank you so very much, this is my first attempt at this form, SPAG fixed (many thanks) I found myself succumbing to age but wanted to relive-found that was not possible
, decided to reach for goals within my abilities, achieve I will, as always very much appreciated-I am thrilled with the sixer, many thanks for your continued encouragement****kahpot