Reflections of a dying breed
The future is not written in stone.36 total reviews
Comment from L. Kalere
Overall this is a clever and beautiful metaphor. Life is like a game that has played out but there's still time to make something of our existence that is of real value. I thought this was very well thought out and beautifully written. Thanks so much for sharing it with us.
Linda
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Overall this is a clever and beautiful metaphor. Life is like a game that has played out but there's still time to make something of our existence that is of real value. I thought this was very well thought out and beautifully written. Thanks so much for sharing it with us.
Linda
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you, Linda, for this insightful and encouraging review. Your kind words and commentary are very much appreciated!
Have a lovely day,
Jesse
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This ultra-concise personal essay is thought-provoking and moving, a vivid blend of literal and figurative language about time and generations. We live and die with questions, as will the next generation--and the next.
As you say, we can do our part to make a good change before our time is up.
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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This ultra-concise personal essay is thought-provoking and moving, a vivid blend of literal and figurative language about time and generations. We live and die with questions, as will the next generation--and the next.
As you say, we can do our part to make a good change before our time is up.
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Janice, for this wonderful commentary, about how from generation to generation, we live and die, with questions. Thank you also for the kind words and the excellent review and rating.
Have a lovely evening,
Jesse
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Are you the same Jesse James Doty that didn't think he could write decent prose? Nah, couldn't be. This is a stunner. Compelling and thought-provoking.
bit-chomping=>CHAMPING
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Are you the same Jesse James Doty that didn't think he could write decent prose? Nah, couldn't be. This is a stunner. Compelling and thought-provoking.
bit-chomping=>CHAMPING
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you, Elizabeth, for your enthusiastic review. I appreciate the kind comments and excellent rating. Have a good evening,
Jesse
Comment from Raul1
Interesting story you have written here. I have enjoyed reading it. A different kind of fiction story. Interesting and unique. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Interesting story you have written here. I have enjoyed reading it. A different kind of fiction story. Interesting and unique. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you, Raul, for your kind review. I am glad you enjoyed reading this prose piece. I appreciate the excellent rating and review!
Have a good night,
Jesse
Comment from kahpot
What a very intriguing read, life's journey with fears of being replaced by knowledge, though we are human so we should not ever give up and continue to enjoy and contribute within our time, very well written with great artwork, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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What a very intriguing read, life's journey with fears of being replaced by knowledge, though we are human so we should not ever give up and continue to enjoy and contribute within our time, very well written with great artwork, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Thank you for your kind words and insightful review. I agree with your assessment of how we should never give up and instead continue to contribute and enjoy what life still has to offer. Thank you for sharing your views with me...they are enlightening and so true!
Have a good day, my friend,
Jesse
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Food for thought in this well-constructed poem that I can relate with! Getting older is definitely something that needs to be written about - poetry isn't only for youth or love or nature's beauty.
I especially liked this part:
And nobody has lost or won, yet we remain on the playing field--
long after the rain has brought the game to an undesirable end.
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Food for thought in this well-constructed poem that I can relate with! Getting older is definitely something that needs to be written about - poetry isn't only for youth or love or nature's beauty.
I especially liked this part:
And nobody has lost or won, yet we remain on the playing field--
long after the rain has brought the game to an undesirable end.
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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I am so glad this resonated with you, Susan! Thank you for your kind comments and insightful perspective of my piece. I appreciate your choice of the part you liked best. Another reader also liked this part the most. Thanks for the super review and excellent rating!
Have a wonderful evening,
Jesse
Comment from AnnaLinda
Jesse,
This is a super free verse you have penned. Realistic, a bit dark and ends on that positive note, which is the best we could really hope for.
Depending on the defonition of righteous, noble and profound is...the world has its definition, God has His own.
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Jesse,
This is a super free verse you have penned. Realistic, a bit dark and ends on that positive note, which is the best we could really hope for.
Depending on the defonition of righteous, noble and profound is...the world has its definition, God has His own.
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Hello AnnaLinda.
Thank you for your positive comments and unique perspective on the definition of what is available for us older generation to achieve. I appreciate you taking the time and effort to read and review my work.
Have a beautiful evening,
Jesse
Comment from Wendy G
Jesse, what a thoughtful piece! I like the image of life as a game on a playing field, with the game sometimes washed out and spoilt by life's events. But that is not the end, even in defeat, for there is an optimistic note, along with acceptance that the game has a limited time and other players will take over ... but there is till the role we play - making something righteous, noble and profound of our lives.
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Jesse, what a thoughtful piece! I like the image of life as a game on a playing field, with the game sometimes washed out and spoilt by life's events. But that is not the end, even in defeat, for there is an optimistic note, along with acceptance that the game has a limited time and other players will take over ... but there is till the role we play - making something righteous, noble and profound of our lives.
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Hello Wendy! Thank you for this insightful and encouraging review. I am glad you chose the part you liked best...it helps me to know what readers identify with. I appreciate your kind words and assessment of what the piece means to you.
Have a wonderful evening,
Jesse
Comment from Ulla
Well, I for one have plans and loads to do for quite a few years more. I understand your message, but I'm still very much alive and kicking. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Well, I for one have plans and loads to do for quite a few years more. I understand your message, but I'm still very much alive and kicking. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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So am I, Ulla. I was addressing the younger generation, who look at those of us older than them, as a dying breed. Thank you for your thoughtful review and excellent rating.
Have a nice evening,
Jesse
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork to
go with your story, Jesse.
-It is well written and
poetic, too, a nice
combination.
-The opening line about
the hands chasing time
is a good image and hook
for your story.
-You have a good concluding
verse, too, although personally
I don't taste defeat, but I do plan
to do the best I can with my life.
-A good job with this.
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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-Good artwork to
go with your story, Jesse.
-It is well written and
poetic, too, a nice
combination.
-The opening line about
the hands chasing time
is a good image and hook
for your story.
-You have a good concluding
verse, too, although personally
I don't taste defeat, but I do plan
to do the best I can with my life.
-A good job with this.
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Pam, for your detailed assessment of my prose piece. I am happy that you liked the combination of poetic devices in my prose. I am glad you chose each part to comment on and gave me great feedback as to what worked for you. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
Take care,
Jesse
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You are very welcome for the review and comments, Jesse. I think you have found a good niche for yourself.
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Thank you, Pam...and, so do I. I think that I've found a niche for myself to build on and, expand into other works in my future.
Have a good day,
Jesse
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You are welcome, Jesse, and have a good day, too!
