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The Inn at Blackpool

Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Sing A Silly"
These are free-verse poems.

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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I believe, Stu, children would enjoy this just for the fun
of it. They could make silly dance moves to go along
with the silliness in your poem. I liked the use of rhymes.
I think this would strike a chord with kids. Your words
glowed well whether real words or not.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
    Thanks so much....these are scribbled out on a legal pad and then just thrown toward the platform....always need some work.....but very fun to wiggle together .....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell
Comment from Mary Shifman
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This is a delightful poem and I'm sure children would love it. I think that if someone put it to music, it would make a great song that they would enjoy singing.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
    Thanks so much.....I actually pace these out on a keyboard and then slam bang something together and splash it towards the contest...usually finish in the top fifty...HAHA....I am somewhere between Vaudeville and Tin Pan Alley.....Godspeed to you and yours......Stu Harrell
reply by Mary Shifman on 08-Feb-2023
    You are welcome. I know just what you mean...I put some of my poems to a melody but I can't play a lick on any musical instrument.
Comment from Kaiku
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First of your work I have read. Such a history behind you. My brother served in Nam about the time you did. Navy. A stock broker for 30 years and living to tell about it. I spent time with Prudential Securities. I hated it and didn`t last long. You are a man of many talents. Congrats.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
    Yo Brother....thanks for your kind thoughts...I was blessed in Vietnam...had terrific troops...got most of them home....very few of us left....Wall Street WAS a bitch....lucky to survive....mostly traded municipal bonds and Pepsi....average "Producer"......
    You are more literate....I am a slap dash bim bam rhyme runner....grew up with Irish drinkers....enjoy Fan Story as I get a deadline and date of posting.....to see if I might have a wider story....
    Here is my e-mail and cell and text.....Nttybmpo@aol.com......602-717-8735.....pick a spot near you and let the old "grunt" buy you lunch sometime..I live near Biltmore and can get anywhere...Godspeed to you and yours....Stu Harrell
reply by Kaiku on 07-Feb-2023
    that is awesome. I know your area well. Overseas for a bit but when I return, we will definitely hook up. Look forward to lunch. Keep the pen moving forward. Got you in my contacts. klierkc22@gmail.com
Comment from Michael Hemingstreet
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I think it would be more emotionally interesting to focus more concisely on a specific point of interest. That way we can see the pain or triumph of something and be empathetic. General is hard to feel something.

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 Comment Written 05-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
    Thanks for your thoughts.....you are right ....this lacks focus....but it's really written to be nonsense....thus not really be about anything...just scatter your brain and let something stick.....Godspeed to you and yours......Stu Harrell
Comment from JT traveller
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Great poem. Was is not to love. The best entry for the Children's poetry competition I have read so far.

These lines took my fancy,

"Sing a sprinkle of gorgeous burbs
Create envy from the farthest star."

What a fun jingle. Keep up the good work and best of luck.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
    Thanks so very much.....these are fun to squiggle together....makes little sense but is not supposed to make sense.....Godspeed to you and yours......Stu Harrell
reply by JT traveller on 06-Feb-2023
    Best of luck!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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An uplifting write for children to cheer their day and give them a positive outlook on life Stu, I enjoyed your rhymes and your sentiments here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
    Dolly....you are still my hero....I always love reading your posts...
    I write scraggly verse....you write actual "litracha."....Godspeed to you and yours......Stu Harrell
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 05-Feb-2023
    Thank you for your kind words and for your nomination, what a sweet guy you are, love Dolly x
Comment from jmdg1954
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That's awesome about Grandma. Impressive.
Your poem or your silly song is wonderful. It does just what you intended it to do.
Silly sentences, rhymes, words and all in between.
Best of luck in the contest.

Cheers to a great day.
John

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
    Thanks so much.....these are squiggled together but lots of fun....not sure if they are for younger kids....but still neat to do.....Godspeed to you and yours....Stu Harrell
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this silliness with us as a contest entry. I enjoyed reading. I taught first grade for 26 years. My only suggestion for this entry is it's a little long for children. Maybe older children, but I wonder about them. Good luck with the contest.

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 Comment Written 05-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
    You are right....this is a bit thrown together.....I tell the neighbor urchins to wander around and just make stuff......they run instead to Chat GPT.....HAHA........Godspeed to you and yours......Stu Harrell