My Clock
My favourite (but testing) thing!52 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is a wonderful piece of work and I can see why it won.
My favorite poignant stanza:
But, though undimmed my love affair,
The clock has many quirks:
It loses time and scorns the rain,
Unruly when it works.
The reason I voted for it.....it was the best one.
D
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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This is a wonderful piece of work and I can see why it won.
My favorite poignant stanza:
But, though undimmed my love affair,
The clock has many quirks:
It loses time and scorns the rain,
Unruly when it works.
The reason I voted for it.....it was the best one.
D
Comment Written 14-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and so generous rating. I'm thrilled with your comments, vote and the fact you enjoyed it. All very motivating. Very best wishes, Debbie
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Well deserved!
Comment from w.j.debi
I can see why you won the contest with this gem of a verse. Your well written quatrains and end rhymes flow smoothly--maybe more smoothly than the clock in question.
It is funny how an object can become dear to us and we will do what it takes to keep it going.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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I can see why you won the contest with this gem of a verse. Your well written quatrains and end rhymes flow smoothly--maybe more smoothly than the clock in question.
It is funny how an object can become dear to us and we will do what it takes to keep it going.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and comments which are very valuable to me. Best wishes, Debbie
Comment from shelley kaye
The broken clock is a comfort, it helps me sleep tonight...
(broken by lifehouse)
my first thought while reading
great poem with smooth rhyme and flow
one suggestion i have is maybe try a brown background and a whitish font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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The broken clock is a comfort, it helps me sleep tonight...
(broken by lifehouse)
my first thought while reading
great poem with smooth rhyme and flow
one suggestion i have is maybe try a brown background and a whitish font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Have altered the font and background. Not quite the brown I wanted but great suggestion, thanks, Debbie
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Beautiful clock with a great story. I like the clock's personification in juxtaposition to your dad and your memories. Well done.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Beautiful clock with a great story. I like the clock's personification in juxtaposition to your dad and your memories. Well done.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and comments. Love the quote too. Take care, Debbie
Comment from Paul McFarland
Those old clocks are really something, Debbie. I think the really old ones are mostly gone. Some of the old farm houses around here still have some, but they are rare.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Those old clocks are really something, Debbie. I think the really old ones are mostly gone. Some of the old farm houses around here still have some, but they are rare.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your review and comments. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Debbie
Comment from Boogienights
Loving a clock! That is awesome. I used to have a ring watch that I loved so much....until I lost it. There is really something special about those time keepers. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Loving a clock! That is awesome. I used to have a ring watch that I loved so much....until I lost it. There is really something special about those time keepers. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much. They're strange things and certainly leave you a bit lost when they stop working. Best wishes, Debbie
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This was definitely worth the win in the contest. You showed with a clear description, not only the object, but also your reason for your affection for an inanimate object. Outstanding!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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This was definitely worth the win in the contest. You showed with a clear description, not only the object, but also your reason for your affection for an inanimate object. Outstanding!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your generous review and star rating. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it and am thrilled by this response. Best wishes, Debbie
Comment from lancellot
This is very nice. I like the rhyme scheme and good on your clock. That last line is funny. I can see how this poem resonates with the members. It has a feel-good tone and many people had such clocks. Congratulations on the win.
notes:
{Thus,needing} a memento,
-Thus, needing a memento,
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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This is very nice. I like the rhyme scheme and good on your clock. That last line is funny. I can see how this poem resonates with the members. It has a feel-good tone and many people had such clocks. Congratulations on the win.
notes:
{Thus,needing} a memento,
-Thus, needing a memento,
Comment Written 11-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments and rating. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I hope you noticed that the "hands down" were actually showing at 6.30 in the picture, thus proving that my clock can be co-operative when it wants to be! Have corrected the spacing. Many thanks again, Debbie
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think this poem shows how a favorite memento represents remembering one's father, as well as how the object can take on a life of its own, so to speak. I thought the last two lines were humorous, with the reference to 'hands down' and the implied reference to hands on a clock. You did a great job worthy of the win.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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I think this poem shows how a favorite memento represents remembering one's father, as well as how the object can take on a life of its own, so to speak. I thought the last two lines were humorous, with the reference to 'hands down' and the implied reference to hands on a clock. You did a great job worthy of the win.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, rating and comments. I'm so pleased you enjoyed the poem especially the last 2 lines and I hope you noticed the hands down to 6.30 in the picture. My clock can be very obliging when it wants to be! Best wishes, Debbie
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Ha ha, what a funny visual joke as well.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Debbie,
This is a good ode to the clock and your father. That you have kept this clock despite all you have had to put into it shows your love for both.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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Hi Debbie,
This is a good ode to the clock and your father. That you have kept this clock despite all you have had to put into it shows your love for both.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 11-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review, rating and comments. Much appreciated. Take care, Debbie
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You are most kindly welcome on all accounts, Debbie.
Joan