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Comment from Tom Horonzy
Well, ... what can I say. I cannot tell a lie, like Morris! And we now know he doesn't. As for this piece I stand confused. You lived in an apartment but was only 14. You each had a BR and a bath and yet the apartment had still more room and all for $500 bucks. What era was the story supposedly in?
Good luck. I must appreciate the time spent in writing this.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Well, ... what can I say. I cannot tell a lie, like Morris! And we now know he doesn't. As for this piece I stand confused. You lived in an apartment but was only 14. You each had a BR and a bath and yet the apartment had still more room and all for $500 bucks. What era was the story supposedly in?
Good luck. I must appreciate the time spent in writing this.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Morris was telling his friend what happened to him on his grandfathers when he was 14. He and his friend are 68. There are still some family owned apartments to this day that have a permanent monthly rate in New York. As long as a family member lives in the apartment the rent cannot be raised. It was 2018. :-)
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I suspect I overlooked that with no ill intent intended! Be well.
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Perfectly fine. I have made bonehead mistakes in my stories from time to time. In one story I called my heroine Charlotte, then later called her Carol. I think it slightly confused folks. :-)
Comment from T.A. Walk
This is very detailed and descriptive!
Nice idea to break it into two parts to avoid the naysayers on length! Wonder where you got that idea??
There's a line where you mention them growing up "in" the same city block. I think "in" should be "on" but I think either applies.
Great job!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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This is very detailed and descriptive!
Nice idea to break it into two parts to avoid the naysayers on length! Wonder where you got that idea??
There's a line where you mention them growing up "in" the same city block. I think "in" should be "on" but I think either applies.
Great job!
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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No, you are right. growing up in a city block sounds quite uncomfortable. Thank you, I will change it. Karen
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YAY!! I helped :)
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Don't get all carried away there. In or on is acceptable, but your bringing it up gave me a picture of two boys trying
to walk down the street while partially encased in a block of cement! I do thank you.:-)
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That?s kind of what I thought.
Yikes!! Being encased in cement could make for a good horror story :)
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There was a story on an episode of "Midsomer Murders"
on Acorn with no commercials. or free on Roku with commercials where a lady upset at her gentleman caller knocks him out with champagne with an extra zing! included in his roomy car, then when he passes out, she connects the cement trucks chute next to his widow and fills up the vehicle with fast drying cement. He never fooled around on her ever again. :-)
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Yikes!! I know there?s been a ton of mobster movies where they put folks under buildings!
Yikes!!
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According to series Tv there are a lot of hinky basements in New York too! :-)
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There?s a lot of hinky everything in New York I think lol
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I live in Texas, we got plenty of our own weird. Karen
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I was stationed at Sheppard AB for a school when I was in the Army. That?s in Wichita Falls. Loved it there!
Comment from Navada
I'm so glad there will be a part two! You drew these characters so clearly and they are each pretty lovable in their own way after going through various forms of trauma. I love the idea of them coming together to look after each other. What a shocking thing for poor Morris to witness as a boy - can't wait to read the next installment!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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I'm so glad there will be a part two! You drew these characters so clearly and they are each pretty lovable in their own way after going through various forms of trauma. I love the idea of them coming together to look after each other. What a shocking thing for poor Morris to witness as a boy - can't wait to read the next installment!
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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I am dropping the last part tonight, Thanks for the read. Karen
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I'll look out for it! :)
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Thank you in advance, Karen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice story. And very well written.
Curious - why the #1 in the title, but the disclosure of no part two in Author's Notes? Did you add the Author's Note after reviewers' comments?
Just curious.
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Very nice story. And very well written.
Curious - why the #1 in the title, but the disclosure of no part two in Author's Notes? Did you add the Author's Note after reviewers' comments?
Just curious.
Best wishes.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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The author's notes said there is a part two. I will probably drop it tonight. Karen