How Babies Want You to Vote
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Comment from NanaGaye
A beautiful soul searching poem. Perfect rhyming and extra perfect picture. If only we could all keep the innocence of a child within. Good luck with the contest and Happy New Year
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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A beautiful soul searching poem. Perfect rhyming and extra perfect picture. If only we could all keep the innocence of a child within. Good luck with the contest and Happy New Year
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Nana. Thank you with all my heart. I am seeing that even many Christian?s aren?t speaking out as much anymore, so your review was refreshing. Thank you for the kind compassion for the cause and for the gracious six stars too.
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Take care Good night from New Zealand
Comment from Dawn Munro
First, your notes -- you won't receive any 'opposition' from me, and seriously! You should NOT get any from anyone. This is a writing site, and as such, reviewing is SUPPOSED to be judging the merit of the writing, not the content. If I sound like I am ranting, it's because I am.*smile* It is in the site's list of instructions.
I love the picture you chose for your poem, and the font you chose too -- it's an excellent presentation IMHO. The meter could be improved in a few places, but overall, this is a powerful verse.
Let me give you an example of a 'stumble' in meter -- the syllable count is correct but the emphasis is on the wrong syllable in the word "babies". It's an easy fix though = "That those who kill (a babe) will pay"
"Some laws are made for votes, we know
To say it's right, won't make it so
The Bible says there is a day
That those who kill babies will pay"
I hope my review has been of help. Your poem is wonderful. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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First, your notes -- you won't receive any 'opposition' from me, and seriously! You should NOT get any from anyone. This is a writing site, and as such, reviewing is SUPPOSED to be judging the merit of the writing, not the content. If I sound like I am ranting, it's because I am.*smile* It is in the site's list of instructions.
I love the picture you chose for your poem, and the font you chose too -- it's an excellent presentation IMHO. The meter could be improved in a few places, but overall, this is a powerful verse.
Let me give you an example of a 'stumble' in meter -- the syllable count is correct but the emphasis is on the wrong syllable in the word "babies". It's an easy fix though = "That those who kill (a babe) will pay"
"Some laws are made for votes, we know
To say it's right, won't make it so
The Bible says there is a day
That those who kill babies will pay"
I hope my review has been of help. Your poem is wonderful. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Dawn, you are precious. I am a stickler on meter so it didn?t feel right to me either, but as much as I changed it I wanted to get my message across.
Thank you, my sweet friend, for the awesome feedback, and for your kind comments. You are the best!!
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Aw, thank you! You are very welcome!
Comment from Julie Helms
Beautifully stated! Good for you putting this out there. Satan has darkened the minds of many. Turning on ones own baby it's just unfathomable, and yet today its so acceptable. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Beautifully stated! Good for you putting this out there. Satan has darkened the minds of many. Turning on ones own baby it's just unfathomable, and yet today its so acceptable. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Hi Julie, I thank you for your compassionate review and comments on behalf of the babies. It is so appreciated.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I appreciate your point of view. You mentioned the Bible and a God fearing land. According to the Bible, God's plan was that a man and woman purposely come together (in marriage) so that ALL babies would be born in love. Since many in our culture care little about God's plan, problems and division developed. Great poetic message with beautiful artwork that intensifies the message. Best wishes in the contest.
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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I appreciate your point of view. You mentioned the Bible and a God fearing land. According to the Bible, God's plan was that a man and woman purposely come together (in marriage) so that ALL babies would be born in love. Since many in our culture care little about God's plan, problems and division developed. Great poetic message with beautiful artwork that intensifies the message. Best wishes in the contest.
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Lorraine, I thank you for your compassionate review and comments on behalf of the babies. It is so appreciated.
Comment from Janet Foor
No push back from me. I'm on your side and the side of that unborn baby. How anyone can justify the murder of an unborn baby is beyond my comprehension.
You did a great job speaking for them.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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No push back from me. I'm on your side and the side of that unborn baby. How anyone can justify the murder of an unborn baby is beyond my comprehension.
You did a great job speaking for them.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Hi Janet, thank you with all my heart. I am seeing that so many Christian authors on this site were shy on the topic so your review was quite refreshing. Thank you for the kind compassion for the cause and the lovely six s
Comment from royowen
Oh yes dear girl, I know that a life conceived whether in lust or in another sin, is not the babes fault, but if we terminate this young life, it is an offence to God, we don't have a choice once a baby is conceived, God has already made a plan for this child, the Bible says clearly it is murder. Beautifully written my friend, I know who this is, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Oh yes dear girl, I know that a life conceived whether in lust or in another sin, is not the babes fault, but if we terminate this young life, it is an offence to God, we don't have a choice once a baby is conceived, God has already made a plan for this child, the Bible says clearly it is murder. Beautifully written my friend, I know who this is, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Hi Roy, I thank you for your compassionate review and comments on behalf of the babies. It is so appreciated.
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Comment from Yardier
Any opposition you were concerned with was already muted by God giving you holy passion. While I don't know any scripture which reveals aborted babies go to heaven, I am confident they do. Satan is making a big error in thinking the souls of aborted babies go to hell.
A very fine touching poem. Thank you for sharing truth.
Yardier
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Any opposition you were concerned with was already muted by God giving you holy passion. While I don't know any scripture which reveals aborted babies go to heaven, I am confident they do. Satan is making a big error in thinking the souls of aborted babies go to hell.
A very fine touching poem. Thank you for sharing truth.
Yardier
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Mr Yardier I am seeing that even many Christian?s aren?t speaking out as much anymore so your review was refreshing. Thank you for the kind compassion for the cause.
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I am so very sorry but I forgot to thank you for the generous six star review for my poem. Thanks again, Debi
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No problem, enjoy the New Year with God's gift in your soul.
