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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I have heard the word scrumping, now I know what it means. Nice intriguing story. I had three sisters. I was the prankster a lot of the time. My things hurt no one they were just silly. Putting crackers under the mattress so that every time Kathy moved it made noise. Bringing koolaid to the table for everyone her's had no sugar. Things like that. She was a big snot. She hasn't changed much in that regard. Good strong story. Karen
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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I have heard the word scrumping, now I know what it means. Nice intriguing story. I had three sisters. I was the prankster a lot of the time. My things hurt no one they were just silly. Putting crackers under the mattress so that every time Kathy moved it made noise. Bringing koolaid to the table for everyone her's had no sugar. Things like that. She was a big snot. She hasn't changed much in that regard. Good strong story. Karen
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Lol! You are so funny, Karen! I love this about you. That's what makes you special, you have a good sense of humour. And you are talented as well. Thank you for another lovely review and sharing your story with me. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
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I am beaming. You really perk me up when my pain brings me down. Thank you gobs. Happiness is a choice. Instead of seeing all that is wrong, see all that is right. Avoid things that irritate you. I cut some family out of my life because they were toxic. I tried all my life to help them, and love them, but they never helped me in any way, they just took, and whatever you did for them. it was never enough. And they were never ever grateful for anything. I learned to say no to their emails for money, and I blocked them on my phone. Their whiney voice always got to me. I am down today, but you made me feel better. Thank you so much. Karen :-)
Comment from Pam (respa)
A good image to go with your story, Sandra. You tell it well with the dialect appropriate for the time period and the characters involved. I am guessing the sibling rivalry is mutual between Reggie and Valerie. I hope she has a really good scheme to get back at him.
It is a good thing that Reggie and Trevor decided to get apples, and then heard Mrs. Coombs scream although they didn't know what it was at the time. Luckily, the mothers were involved, too, and they were all at the hospital to reassure Mrs. Coombs. I felt sorry for her lying there with no one to help, but help did come so that was a very good thing.
It sounds like Mrs. Coombs will be getting some extra help, and that should be good for her.
One small thing: After this, "We don't want a reward, Missus Coombes. A few apples
there is a large space and the sentence finishes on the next line.
I look forward to seeing what comes next. Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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A good image to go with your story, Sandra. You tell it well with the dialect appropriate for the time period and the characters involved. I am guessing the sibling rivalry is mutual between Reggie and Valerie. I hope she has a really good scheme to get back at him.
It is a good thing that Reggie and Trevor decided to get apples, and then heard Mrs. Coombs scream although they didn't know what it was at the time. Luckily, the mothers were involved, too, and they were all at the hospital to reassure Mrs. Coombs. I felt sorry for her lying there with no one to help, but help did come so that was a very good thing.
It sounds like Mrs. Coombs will be getting some extra help, and that should be good for her.
One small thing: After this, "We don't want a reward, Missus Coombes. A few apples
there is a large space and the sentence finishes on the next line.
I look forward to seeing what comes next. Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Oh, Valerie does have a plan, don't you worry. Lol. But I'll not say any more. I wrote these years ago, long before I joined FS. Long before I married Graham! Now I'm dusting them off and finding out what Fanstorians think about them. Thank you, my friend, I always love reading your reviews and this one is great. Thank you! Love you lots, Sandra xxx
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You are very welcome for the review, Sandra, and thanks for sharing about the stories. It still holds up today so that is saying a lot about your writing. Hope you do well with them.
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Thank you, Pam. I have to admit, it has lightened my load, I only have to tidy them up. You have no idea how pleased I am that you enjoyed it. Watch out for Valerie in the next one!! 🥰🥰 xx
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You are welcome, Sandra, and I am glad the review was meaningful. I think I will have to watch out for Valerie!
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You really should! 😂🥰xx
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I love your use of the vernacular in this, Sandra. I remember it in your poem and you've got it off to a fine art here too! Your lovely 1950s story is a real feel-good one that takes the reader right back in time to bucolic days of apple scrumping. Mrs Coombes' sorry state is palpably described, both concerning her emotions and the agony of her broken ankle. I think I'd make 'over' and 'grown' (referring to the bank) one word. Thank you so much for this very well expressed and entertaining read with a very happy ending! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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I love your use of the vernacular in this, Sandra. I remember it in your poem and you've got it off to a fine art here too! Your lovely 1950s story is a real feel-good one that takes the reader right back in time to bucolic days of apple scrumping. Mrs Coombes' sorry state is palpably described, both concerning her emotions and the agony of her broken ankle. I think I'd make 'over' and 'grown' (referring to the bank) one word. Thank you so much for this very well expressed and entertaining read with a very happy ending! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi Debbie, I love listening to people talk, and in the village I was born in there were many interesting dialects. Many came up from London when the bombing started, and quite a few stayed. I wasn't quite old enough to remember that, but I did play with some of the children after the war. Funny how some things stick. I'm really pleased you enjoyed this story, Reggie's mum might not have remembered, Valerie has, and she is wanting payback.
Thank you for your lovely review,my friend, I really appreciated it. Warmest hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This chapter "Valerie and the Orchard Adventure" is a charming tale that celebrates the bonds of friendship and neighborliness, reminding readers of the joy that can be found in unexpected encounters and acts of kindness.
Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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This chapter "Valerie and the Orchard Adventure" is a charming tale that celebrates the bonds of friendship and neighborliness, reminding readers of the joy that can be found in unexpected encounters and acts of kindness.
Well done.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you, dear Jasmine, for reading my story, I had fun with it, but Valerie isn't a happy bunny, and in the next part, she will be looking for payback! Will it work though? Lol. Thank you for you nice comments, my friend. Warmest hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Sandra,
What a cute story about a couple of rascals, one in particular who locked his sister in the outhouse, then proceeded to steal apples from Mrs. Coombs. Fortunately, that put the boys right where they needed to be to save her life.
Cute and wholesome.
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Hi Sandra,
What a cute story about a couple of rascals, one in particular who locked his sister in the outhouse, then proceeded to steal apples from Mrs. Coombs. Fortunately, that put the boys right where they needed to be to save her life.
Cute and wholesome.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much, Rhonda. Valerie will be trying to get her own back in the next one. I've just seen you've posted another chapter. I'm off to bed now, but will be reading it first thing tomorrow. Thanks for reading this one, my friend. Warmest hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Ric Myworld
You always seem to bring back memories I haven't thought about in years. Like summer camp when I got in trouble and had to white wash the outhouses as punishment. Already in trouble, but the sudden urge to reach my brush between two flapping boards and swat Sarah Myers butt was irresistible. I should have run, but couldn't for laughing. :-)
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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You always seem to bring back memories I haven't thought about in years. Like summer camp when I got in trouble and had to white wash the outhouses as punishment. Already in trouble, but the sudden urge to reach my brush between two flapping boards and swat Sarah Myers butt was irresistible. I should have run, but couldn't for laughing. :-)
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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That is hilarious!! And I can quite see you doing that! LOL, Now I'll be laughing all night! I'm glad my story brought back a lovely memory for you. (and I'm even happier you shared it with me.) Love and hugs, dear friend. xxxx
Comment from Begin Again
Oh, here I was preparing to read something about Flossie and instead I found a new story, one with a moral and two generations coming together. I really enjoyed it and the English accent too. I love when you can read a story and put another level of "personality" into it. Great job! But that's you, always entertaining me, my friend.
Smiles, hugs and love, Carol
ever fought of it. (thought)
"Could 'ave told us (me)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Oh, here I was preparing to read something about Flossie and instead I found a new story, one with a moral and two generations coming together. I really enjoyed it and the English accent too. I love when you can read a story and put another level of "personality" into it. Great job! But that's you, always entertaining me, my friend.
Smiles, hugs and love, Carol
ever fought of it. (thought)
"Could 'ave told us (me)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Thank you, dear Carol! I love writing with dialect, and the two 'errors' you picked up is how some speak in rural areas. I will change the fought for thought, but many pronounce the th as a f - thing - fing. I know, bad English!! Lol. You get used to it, as you will by the time you've read the other two stories of brother and sister rivalry. And the ... could 'av told us... is also another example of local colloquialisms. A bit like your "y'all" We all have them. Thank you, my dear friend. Love and hugs. Sandra xx
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My apologies...It did cross my mind that you wanted it to be written that way, but then I thought....what if I was wrong? I'll not second guess you again and just sit back and enjoy the stories. Which I would prefer to do, of course. Love ya, Carol
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No need to apologise my dear friend. I would have made the same mistake had it been the other way round. Love you, too. xxx
Comment from lancellot
I see this is only part one. So, that means there is more, perhaps something deeper to the story. That the boys would find the old woman and aid her was pretty telegraphed, and the backstory to gain the readers sympathy for her. I'm sure that will come up later.
We'll see what develops. A young/old friendship perhaps or a surprise.
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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I see this is only part one. So, that means there is more, perhaps something deeper to the story. That the boys would find the old woman and aid her was pretty telegraphed, and the backstory to gain the readers sympathy for her. I'm sure that will come up later.
We'll see what develops. A young/old friendship perhaps or a surprise.
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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This is only three parts where Valerie has to get back at Reggie. The next chapter will see Valerie busting a gut to get revenge on her brother. It's a youngsters story. I'm working on editing The Descendent at the moment. So this is just to keep my brain active.
Thanks for reading, Lance. :) Sandra xx
Comment from patcelaw
I very much enjoyed the story. I especially liked how that you were able to with words give us the English accent to the words. It flows very well when read aloud and it speaks well in the English accent. Patricia .
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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I very much enjoyed the story. I especially liked how that you were able to with words give us the English accent to the words. It flows very well when read aloud and it speaks well in the English accent. Patricia .
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Patricia, I'm glad you liked it. It is only three parts. Valerie has to get her revenge on her brother. Warmest hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
