I'm Not Me
ADULT Erotic Writing Contest27 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
With the obvious thrill your protagonist was having preparing for this meeting, I was convinced your story would end up saying: This is me after all! In fact your ending was a whole lot better and a nice surprise twist:) Beautifully expressed and evolved, hooking the reader from the start and then immersing them in some pretty erotic stuff, before concluding with a smile of satisfaction, this is a guaranteed placing. Love the symmetry of the clicking stilettos too, very sexy! Good luck, Jess! Debbie xo
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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With the obvious thrill your protagonist was having preparing for this meeting, I was convinced your story would end up saying: This is me after all! In fact your ending was a whole lot better and a nice surprise twist:) Beautifully expressed and evolved, hooking the reader from the start and then immersing them in some pretty erotic stuff, before concluding with a smile of satisfaction, this is a guaranteed placing. Love the symmetry of the clicking stilettos too, very sexy! Good luck, Jess! Debbie xo
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Debbie, thank you so much for your wonderful feedback and encouraging words! :)
Xo
Jess
Comment from Sally Law
Ladies and gentlemen, we have the winner right here! I knew this would be great and tasteful because you're so classy. I loved all of this and it was just right. Sometimes you must leave some things to the imagination of the reader, which you did. I have a super imagination. I've also been married to my darling for nearly 49 years.
Oh, I dearly hope we get to vote in this contest!!
Sending you my best today as always, dear Jess, and my very best wishes in the upcoming contest.
Sal Xoxo's
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Ladies and gentlemen, we have the winner right here! I knew this would be great and tasteful because you're so classy. I loved all of this and it was just right. Sometimes you must leave some things to the imagination of the reader, which you did. I have a super imagination. I've also been married to my darling for nearly 49 years.
Oh, I dearly hope we get to vote in this contest!!
Sending you my best today as always, dear Jess, and my very best wishes in the upcoming contest.
Sal Xoxo's
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Sally, your wonderful comment made my whole day! I'm so pleased that you enjoyed this naughty little piece, lol. Transitioning from poetry to prose can be challenging for me, so receiving positive feedback from the master herself means everything! ;)
Xoxo
Jess
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your writing paints a clear picture of a late-night encounter in the city. I love that it is filled with anticipation and desire. The atmosphere you create is excellent. I was drawn into her world and meeting. Her confidence is shown so well. I enjoyed watching her navigate the quiet streets as she enters his office building. You capture the tension and excitement of the encounter. I like that you hint at the deeper connection between them and the role they play in each other's lives without spoiling it. The ending is perfect. Great job!
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Your writing paints a clear picture of a late-night encounter in the city. I love that it is filled with anticipation and desire. The atmosphere you create is excellent. I was drawn into her world and meeting. Her confidence is shown so well. I enjoyed watching her navigate the quiet streets as she enters his office building. You capture the tension and excitement of the encounter. I like that you hint at the deeper connection between them and the role they play in each other's lives without spoiling it. The ending is perfect. Great job!
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Michael, thank you so much for your thoughtful and thorough feedback!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Terry Broxson
Jessica, sorry I'm out of sixes. You have a good story here. I had no idea where you were going with this, but you found a good place. This should do well in the contest. Good luck, Terry.
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Jessica, sorry I'm out of sixes. You have a good story here. I had no idea where you were going with this, but you found a good place. This should do well in the contest. Good luck, Terry.
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Terry, thank you so much for the feedback! It means a lot!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very clever, the wife fulfilling his 'need'.
And very nicely written.
Maybe I am inured, but I think this piece only just barely calls for the language warning. And while the two definitely had sex, it was not all that graphic... well, maybe it was. (smiley face here)
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Very clever, the wife fulfilling his 'need'.
And very nicely written.
Maybe I am inured, but I think this piece only just barely calls for the language warning. And while the two definitely had sex, it was not all that graphic... well, maybe it was. (smiley face here)
Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Wayne, thank you so much for your feedback. You're absolutely right about the language warning; nerves may have gotten the best of me, lol. I've since removed it. I appreciate your thoughts very much!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Debra White
Hi Jessica :)
I really enjoyed reading your story.
So descriptive and erotic with absolutely no smut, no sleaze and no swearing - Less is more and you nailed it completely.
I love that they are married and are secure in their relationship to play out the scenario that they both find so freeing and beneficial.
Nothing to add or take away from this write - it's wonderful.
Good luck for the contest - I am certain that your fresh approach will place you highly :)
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Hi Jessica :)
I really enjoyed reading your story.
So descriptive and erotic with absolutely no smut, no sleaze and no swearing - Less is more and you nailed it completely.
I love that they are married and are secure in their relationship to play out the scenario that they both find so freeing and beneficial.
Nothing to add or take away from this write - it's wonderful.
Good luck for the contest - I am certain that your fresh approach will place you highly :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Debra, thank you so much for your wonderful comment and highly valued feedback! I admit I was a bit nervous about how it would be received, so I am very grateful to know your thoughts! :)
Xo
Jess
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Oh, Jess, please know this is worth ten stars! But I only have five. Wow, what a story and what a buildup of details and erotic passion. Then you play the
"Perhaps she'll feel bad" card as she looks at the picture.
The whole time, I'm still singing Pretty Woman. But I love how you drop the bomb at the end of the fact that they are married. I never suspected. Should be a winner for sure! Great job! Love ya! Debi
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reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Oh, Jess, please know this is worth ten stars! But I only have five. Wow, what a story and what a buildup of details and erotic passion. Then you play the
"Perhaps she'll feel bad" card as she looks at the picture.
The whole time, I'm still singing Pretty Woman. But I love how you drop the bomb at the end of the fact that they are married. I never suspected. Should be a winner for sure! Great job! Love ya! Debi
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Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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My Debi, thank you so much for your wonderful words of encouragement! You don't know what it means to me. I admit I was a little nervous about this one. lol. Thank you for easing my worries, and for being YOU!!!
Sending lots of love,
Jess