Willing Hearts
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Chapter 12 B"Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?
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Comment from lyenochka
Yay! Noah finally admitted his feelings for Sami and reciprocated the hug! Now it should be less awkward for them. Great job leading into it with the informal conference with Noah's teammates.
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Yay! Noah finally admitted his feelings for Sami and reciprocated the hug! Now it should be less awkward for them. Great job leading into it with the informal conference with Noah's teammates.
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Teri7
This was a great chapter my friend. Wish I could give you more than 6 stars! I didn't see any spag or errors. I like that Noah and Sami are slowly getting closer, or so it seems. Great job my friend! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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This was a great chapter my friend. Wish I could give you more than 6 stars! I didn't see any spag or errors. I like that Noah and Sami are slowly getting closer, or so it seems. Great job my friend! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Awesome work here. Nice back and forth between Noah and Sami.
Should there be a comma after 'chuckling' like after 'giggling' in the second sentence?:
Chuckling Noah said, "I guess I'm like you. I'd have to think about it for a while. It would have to be quiet and beautiful. I don't want to be around a bunch of tourists. Just someplace to relax."
Giggling, Sami asked, "Do you know how to relax?"
How do blueberry scones hold up in the mail? Asking for a friend.
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reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Awesome work here. Nice back and forth between Noah and Sami.
Should there be a comma after 'chuckling' like after 'giggling' in the second sentence?:
Chuckling Noah said, "I guess I'm like you. I'd have to think about it for a while. It would have to be quiet and beautiful. I don't want to be around a bunch of tourists. Just someplace to relax."
Giggling, Sami asked, "Do you know how to relax?"
How do blueberry scones hold up in the mail? Asking for a friend.
D
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. You're correct there should be a comma there. I tend to leave out those type of commas even though, I know the rule.
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Cool! I owe you one billion fixes!
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nice chapter, Barb. This relationship with Noah and Sami is frustrating. I'm sure that eventually they will get together, but you keep teasing the reader.
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Nice chapter, Barb. This relationship with Noah and Sami is frustrating. I'm sure that eventually they will get together, but you keep teasing the reader.
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I can promise they will get together, but it will take a long while.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I think those hugs were very much needed and might have cleared the air a bit. Meanwhile, Noah continues to try and do things by the book. There's a small edit but otherwise faultless:
Sam(i) said: Thank you for bringing dinner tonight
Another excellent chapter which showed us from the start, with the pic, how things might evolve here between Noah and Sami. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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I think those hugs were very much needed and might have cleared the air a bit. Meanwhile, Noah continues to try and do things by the book. There's a small edit but otherwise faultless:
Sam(i) said: Thank you for bringing dinner tonight
Another excellent chapter which showed us from the start, with the pic, how things might evolve here between Noah and Sami. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for the catch. I appreciate you pointing it out.
Comment from jim vecchio
Here I am, reading instead of making supper, a sandwich, and your characters are having dinner and blackberry cobbler. Oh, well, I don't care how long your story goes, I'm enjoying all the interaction between the characters. You are doing a great job.
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Here I am, reading instead of making supper, a sandwich, and your characters are having dinner and blackberry cobbler. Oh, well, I don't care how long your story goes, I'm enjoying all the interaction between the characters. You are doing a great job.
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. LOL I do understand the food problem.
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If I could get it in in time, I will post a nonet about q special food tomorrow.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Barbara
It seems that your granddaughters allowed you to post.
This is the second chapter I've read for your book
I really appreciate the time you take to have details about every character in your notes and your intro from the prior chapter. I enjoyed this very much. Is this the last chapter? If not I look forward to the next one
I found a glitch but my copy paste did not work. Do a search on chose. One of them should be choose
Great job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Hi, Barbara
It seems that your granddaughters allowed you to post.
This is the second chapter I've read for your book
I really appreciate the time you take to have details about every character in your notes and your intro from the prior chapter. I enjoyed this very much. Is this the last chapter? If not I look forward to the next one
I found a glitch but my copy paste did not work. Do a search on chose. One of them should be choose
Great job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. My granddaughters are young enough they still nap, plus we keep them busy. LOL Heavens no, I'm only about a third of the way finished posting this novel.
Comment from BethShelby
This has to be tough, having all these feeling but unable to admit any real caring or love. It doesn't sound like anything can happen between them as long as Noah has this job. But Sarah is married. so I'm not sure why not. I always enjoy your posts.
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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This has to be tough, having all these feeling but unable to admit any real caring or love. It doesn't sound like anything can happen between them as long as Noah has this job. But Sarah is married. so I'm not sure why not. I always enjoy your posts.
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Sami is in protective custody, and one should not form a relationship with the people who's in charge of your protection. Sarah is married to another agent.
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written and I enjoyed very much listening to it. Your sentence structure in your paragraph is well done. I also wish for you the very best as you continue your writing with fan story. Patricia .
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reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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This is very well written and I enjoyed very much listening to it. Your sentence structure in your paragraph is well done. I also wish for you the very best as you continue your writing with fan story. Patricia .
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Comment Written 26-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Begin Again
Awesome! I think caring for someone or maybe even being to care a lot would be a difficult situation if you aren't allowed to show those affections. I think even Noah is beginning to understand how difficult it is. Glad you are having a good time. Be safe coming home.
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Awesome! I think caring for someone or maybe even being to care a lot would be a difficult situation if you aren't allowed to show those affections. I think even Noah is beginning to understand how difficult it is. Glad you are having a good time. Be safe coming home.
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Noah will struggle resisting his feelings for Sami.
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Good! Because I want to climb right into the middle of that story and give him a swift kick in the keester. Life's too short, young man! LOL
Smiles, Carol
