Dance Hall Girl
Scenes from a Dance hall34 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
I guess they'll never learn. It's a sad tale, but one that is probably happening more than we know.
Good rhyme and meter throughout and lively images.
Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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I guess they'll never learn. It's a sad tale, but one that is probably happening more than we know.
Good rhyme and meter throughout and lively images.
Nancy
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Nancy for a nice review
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, my!!!!!!!!! I do not know why, but this made me laugh, Pam -- poor idiot!!!!!! Wait -- maybe I DO know why, and it's not funny. (it's only funny because he was so d-u-m-b.
Lusting and lying? Even being in that club was an invitation for trouble.
Excellent poem!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Oh, my!!!!!!!!! I do not know why, but this made me laugh, Pam -- poor idiot!!!!!! Wait -- maybe I DO know why, and it's not funny. (it's only funny because he was so d-u-m-b.
Lusting and lying? Even being in that club was an invitation for trouble.
Excellent poem!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Hi Dawn. Remind me not to die on your watch. You?ll laugh at me. Haha. Thank you for the nice review
Comment from Henry Wesevich
I liked the poem. I thought it had a funny, fairy tale nature despite the heavy story. I'd also don't believe alcohol is what made this man do wrong.
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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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I liked the poem. I thought it had a funny, fairy tale nature despite the heavy story. I'd also don't believe alcohol is what made this man do wrong.
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Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Hi, Henry. If you liked the story, why only four stars. I?m just curious as your rating will be thrown away. The best and worst ratings are thrown out. Thanks
Comment from jmdg1954
Nothing good has ever happened when drinking to much hooch! Your poem told a good story about this man's impurities. Did he deserve to die? No.
The next poem should be about the wife and how she found out where he was and doing? Why she shot him? Her life afterwards?
Nicely done
John
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Nothing good has ever happened when drinking to much hooch! Your poem told a good story about this man's impurities. Did he deserve to die? No.
The next poem should be about the wife and how she found out where he was and doing? Why she shot him? Her life afterwards?
Nicely done
John
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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lol John. You cracked me up. Thank you for your nice review
Comment from Shanbreen
You definitely get your point across about moral values. I personally didn't mind the ending. Of course, the person didn't deserve to die (that's a given), but it does give a certain bang to your poem. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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You definitely get your point across about moral values. I personally didn't mind the ending. Of course, the person didn't deserve to die (that's a given), but it does give a certain bang to your poem. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Hi Shanbreen. You made me laugh out loud. Thank you for the supportive comments and a wonderful review.
Comment from teafor2
Pamusart, some parts of this sadly reminds me of "They Shoot Horses, Don't They." Thanks to title and picture, this theme is furthered complexed and tragically played out due to escapades via your copious notes. An interesting story/poem. teafor2
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Pamusart, some parts of this sadly reminds me of "They Shoot Horses, Don't They." Thanks to title and picture, this theme is furthered complexed and tragically played out due to escapades via your copious notes. An interesting story/poem. teafor2
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Thank you, teafor2 for your wonderful comments and a great review
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Pam,
This is a sad story of how married men acted in these places and with prostitutes. Alcohol leads you to do things you wouldn't do sometimes. Jealousy and adultery are dangerous sins that lead to others.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Hi Pam,
This is a sad story of how married men acted in these places and with prostitutes. Alcohol leads you to do things you wouldn't do sometimes. Jealousy and adultery are dangerous sins that lead to others.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Joanne for a lovely review
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Don't mention it, Pam.
Joan
Comment from jenintorre
Wow! What a great poem. I love it. Poor guy, he was a bit naughty but I agree, he didn't deserve to get shot. Love the artwork. Thanks for the very entertaining read. Jen.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Wow! What a great poem. I love it. Poor guy, he was a bit naughty but I agree, he didn't deserve to get shot. Love the artwork. Thanks for the very entertaining read. Jen.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Hi Jen. Thank you so much for the sixth star, your wonderful comments and a great review
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed your story. When you are in a place like that there is so much temptation. You can easily get pulled in. The poem was interesting and written well. Great job.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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I enjoyed your story. When you are in a place like that there is so much temptation. You can easily get pulled in. The poem was interesting and written well. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Brenda for your great review
Comment from Douglas Goff
What a fun read! It took a turn to the bad side of the dancehall rather sharply:
Their clothing now begins to stink
They're smashed with nothing left to say
Most enjoyable.
D
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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What a fun read! It took a turn to the bad side of the dancehall rather sharply:
Their clothing now begins to stink
They're smashed with nothing left to say
Most enjoyable.
D
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Hi, Douglas. Thank you for your wonderful comments and review
