Portrait of the Donor
A thrift store portrait reveals its owner's dark fate.22 total reviews
Comment from shelley kaye
trippy and creepy story!
very black mirror-ish
just like your character, you were pulled into fanstory's painting of words...
nicely written with a good flow throughout the story
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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trippy and creepy story!
very black mirror-ish
just like your character, you were pulled into fanstory's painting of words...
nicely written with a good flow throughout the story
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
shelley :)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!!
Thank you so much and thanks for that suggestion I fixed it thanks again
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Patty. It's nice to meet you
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
A collector of hearts, but not lonely, hearts, real hearts
Yeah, that sounds kind of creepy but based on your notes, I knew where it was going. I didn't know the exact place it was going, but I knew there'd be something creepy
I suppose the opposite could've been true The painting could've done a lot of good
Here it's not clear where Lucy returned from. Because she had to be near the painting to hear the whispers
" the painting whispered dark secrets. Lucy returned and discovered a dusty ledger with "
The fan story gremlin got you in your notes in the very last line
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Hi, Patty. It's nice to meet you
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
A collector of hearts, but not lonely, hearts, real hearts
Yeah, that sounds kind of creepy but based on your notes, I knew where it was going. I didn't know the exact place it was going, but I knew there'd be something creepy
I suppose the opposite could've been true The painting could've done a lot of good
Here it's not clear where Lucy returned from. Because she had to be near the painting to hear the whispers
" the painting whispered dark secrets. Lucy returned and discovered a dusty ledger with "
The fan story gremlin got you in your notes in the very last line
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much and thanks for that suggestion I fixed it thanks again