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Comment from Lori Mulligan
Another great chapter! Your writing is a delight to read. I enjoyed the dialogue. You're very prolific and I'm always excited when I get a note in my inbox that you've posted something new. It's a pleasure.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Another great chapter! Your writing is a delight to read. I enjoyed the dialogue. You're very prolific and I'm always excited when I get a note in my inbox that you've posted something new. It's a pleasure.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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You sweet-talkin' reviewer, you!! These words just melt me. Thank you!! xoxox
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This unfortunate diversion on this trip is turning out to be quite a learning curve for the two of you and a source of enjoyment too, I have really enjoyed your post Rachelle, a wonderful story, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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This unfortunate diversion on this trip is turning out to be quite a learning curve for the two of you and a source of enjoyment too, I have really enjoyed your post Rachelle, a wonderful story, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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This is a helpful, warm and gracious review that I appreciate with all my heart, Dolly. Gretchen and I are growing as much in real life from this experience as we are in the novel, itself. Thank you for this generous review. xo
Comment from Neonewman
What an emotional piece you have so elegantly delivered, Rachelle. I've tried to leave a review with corrections as well with the weird three A's and a square. Says unable to send, try again. So I left the original review in messages.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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What an emotional piece you have so elegantly delivered, Rachelle. I've tried to leave a review with corrections as well with the weird three A's and a square. Says unable to send, try again. So I left the original review in messages.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Alright, great; thank you. Another member just told me that I missed some of those weird gremlin things, too. Thanks for having my back!! xoxox
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Yeah! This has happened to me. Where the hell do they come from?
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I see them whenever I have used a dash.
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Ah! Ok.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Rachelle,
You've captured the essence, of the Amish way of life. Simple people, who aren't slave to electronics, and very religious.
Your story reads nicely, except for the paragraph starting with "As I...". Where you have a few of of those bothersome characters that come up.
It's still an excellent story, Rachelle!
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Rachelle,
You've captured the essence, of the Amish way of life. Simple people, who aren't slave to electronics, and very religious.
Your story reads nicely, except for the paragraph starting with "As I...". Where you have a few of of those bothersome characters that come up.
It's still an excellent story, Rachelle!
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Damn! (Oh, THAT's not very Amish of me!!) I thought I'd found them all! Thank you, Cindy, for being my eagle-eye reviewer! I'll get right on that. xoxo
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Who'da thunk it, that an Englisher would be accepted as a music teacher in Amishland? Very creatively done. Good work.
I'm enjoying this two-sided tale very much.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Who'da thunk it, that an Englisher would be accepted as a music teacher in Amishland? Very creatively done. Good work.
I'm enjoying this two-sided tale very much.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Yes, Gretchen and I are very happy with the way it's turning out, too. We started it on such a whim and without any real "thought" to it, that who knew HOW it was going to go! But it's making us happy with the results. Thank you for this lovely encouragement, Wayne. I totally appreciate it. xoxox
Comment from GWHARGIS
Okay. Wow. This is a side of Rachelle that I dare say, few here on FanStory have ever seen. You captured their vulnerable desire to do the one thing that brings them peace. Rarely, do I tear up, but this chapter did it. The line where you said a shiver went through you, described how I felt reading it. This was absolutely beautiful. Wonderful, sweet, and very tender. Gretchen
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Okay. Wow. This is a side of Rachelle that I dare say, few here on FanStory have ever seen. You captured their vulnerable desire to do the one thing that brings them peace. Rarely, do I tear up, but this chapter did it. The line where you said a shiver went through you, described how I felt reading it. This was absolutely beautiful. Wonderful, sweet, and very tender. Gretchen
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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This is honestly Teacher Me. This is who I am when I teach, and it's why I love it so much. Grown-ups make me out of my mind more times than not, but children always bring out my best.
Thank you for this really beautiful review. As I told you, I loved the side of you I saw in your chapter this week, too. We may end up taking a road trip to meet each other halfway between our places once this is all completed. Who knows! The world is our scrapple.
xoxoxo
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We will just be wary of goats. Lol
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Baaaaack atcha!!
Comment from BethShelby
This is a lovely chapter Rachel. You are fitting right in and even quilting with them and now your want to be their choir leader. I wonder if the three can deside that without the permission of their bishop. From the Amish books I've read, those men seem to be the ones to make all the decisions.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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This is a lovely chapter Rachel. You are fitting right in and even quilting with them and now your want to be their choir leader. I wonder if the three can deside that without the permission of their bishop. From the Amish books I've read, those men seem to be the ones to make all the decisions.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Hmmm. That's a very good point. I will check it out. My sense was that when it comes to teaching music as hymns. then they can be taught even by Englisher.
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Hi again!
I've looked and looked but can't get a definitive answer, so I'm going to take your advice and have a conversation with the Bishop and get his permission. Thank you for this facet of protocol which I would have overlooked without your help. Very much appreciated, Beth. xo
Comment from GoWiSt
Oh my, the goats ate your city clothes? Won't they require a vet?
A city-sleeker chick manually sewing quilts? The oxymoron here is paradoxical!
Oh geez, you've turned those simple Amish kids into the von Trapp family singers. Next, you'll be whisking them away from the drudgery of their farm life. Poor things don't know what they're in for.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Oh my, the goats ate your city clothes? Won't they require a vet?
A city-sleeker chick manually sewing quilts? The oxymoron here is paradoxical!
Oh geez, you've turned those simple Amish kids into the von Trapp family singers. Next, you'll be whisking them away from the drudgery of their farm life. Poor things don't know what they're in for.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Nope. Nor do you!
I actually honestly DO quilt. Some people are more than just one thing (city slicker/seamstress...or, in your case, writer/haranguer...)
And if you had a little more "country" in you, you'd know that goats can eat ANYTHING and not get sick. They've been known to eat tin cans for gawd sake! You need to get out into the country more.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I enjoyed the quiet Amish life this week in both stories. I know Amish families and you are quiet realistic with your portrayal. I found one tiny typo.
"Our daed had a nice voice, too," Solomon adds. "Very deep." (DAD)
Nicely done.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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I enjoyed the quiet Amish life this week in both stories. I know Amish families and you are quiet realistic with your portrayal. I found one tiny typo.
"Our daed had a nice voice, too," Solomon adds. "Very deep." (DAD)
Nicely done.
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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No, that is the Amish (Pennsylvania Dutch) spelling of "dad," and it is pronounced "Dot."
Thank you, though, for the catch all the same. I always appreciate an eagle-eye reviewer!! xoxo
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Ohhhh ok. I learned something new
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I love that feeling!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I enjoyed reading. Yes, musical talent is a gift from God. I would strongly suggest that you add the spaces for ease of reading.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I enjoyed reading. Yes, musical talent is a gift from God. I would strongly suggest that you add the spaces for ease of reading.
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Oh, double space, you mean? Thank you. I'll do that. xoxo
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It will make it easier to read.
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I had a bit of trouble with the Advanced Editor when I first posted, so I went back and changed the font and enlarged it. I hope that helps. xo
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I just checked much better. Wonderful job.
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Thanks for the help! xoxo
