Spirited Justice
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "When Trouble Knocks Chap 2"Mystery, crime and ghostly high jinks
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Comment from Lindsey Russell
I like that this story seems to be a spinoff of unfinished brushstrokes. Its interesting so far! I can't wait to read more. Good luck writing it. Keep on writing!!!
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I like that this story seems to be a spinoff of unfinished brushstrokes. Its interesting so far! I can't wait to read more. Good luck writing it. Keep on writing!!!
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thanks Lindsey. Yes, the same characters and a few more are from the last story. I don't know if yu caught the prologue and Chap. 1 but it's posted and still has money if you are interested. I hope you continue to follow. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Gunner Lil
An enjoyable read that has some good information.
Excellent dialogue that moves the story along for the slower readers.
The first half of this chapter ( in the elevator) has good tags but lacks sensory descriptions. Was anyone else in the car with them? Did they carry briefcases? What floor did they enter the lift?
When they got off where did they go? Who's workplace, did they go to?
The writing got better after the **** break with better details.
Thank you.
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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An enjoyable read that has some good information.
Excellent dialogue that moves the story along for the slower readers.
The first half of this chapter ( in the elevator) has good tags but lacks sensory descriptions. Was anyone else in the car with them? Did they carry briefcases? What floor did they enter the lift?
When they got off where did they go? Who's workplace, did they go to?
The writing got better after the **** break with better details.
Thank you.
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Sorry...you missed the first chapter that said they were coming from the morgue and headed back to Detective Donatelli's office. Danny is a ghost. thank yu for reading and reviewing. I hope you will continue to follow the story.
Smiles, Carol
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Got it!! Thanks.
