haiku (ancient bonsai tree)
Haiku contest entry31 total reviews
Comment from Shanbreen
I am wondering if you are being philosophical, making this haiku a progression of life. Even if you didn't have that in mind, it certainly speaks of it. Very well done. Definitely a 6-pointer. Thanks much for sharing, and all the best for the Haiku contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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I am wondering if you are being philosophical, making this haiku a progression of life. Even if you didn't have that in mind, it certainly speaks of it. Very well done. Definitely a 6-pointer. Thanks much for sharing, and all the best for the Haiku contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much Shanbreen for your review and stellar rating! So glad you liked it!
Katiemae1977
Comment from gansach
I love bonsai trees, they are so beautiful and they look like little fairy trees to me. The one in your photo is gorgeous and I love your descriptive words "twists and turns its way". This is a great entry for the Haiku contest. Well done!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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I love bonsai trees, they are so beautiful and they look like little fairy trees to me. The one in your photo is gorgeous and I love your descriptive words "twists and turns its way". This is a great entry for the Haiku contest. Well done!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review gansach! I love all things Japanese
Katiemae1977
Comment from SimianSavant
This works pretty well. The words lack phonetic flow, but the visual they depict goes fairly well with the image. I suggest cropping the shutterstock text off the image and adding that as a citation in the author notes to make the image cleaner and less distracting.
Thanks for the read,
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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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This works pretty well. The words lack phonetic flow, but the visual they depict goes fairly well with the image. I suggest cropping the shutterstock text off the image and adding that as a citation in the author notes to make the image cleaner and less distracting.
Thanks for the read,
🦍
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for your review and suggestions. I will most definitely look into it!
Katiemae1977
Comment from mermaids
Excellent haiku form that creates a clear picture and also brings forth feelings and emotions. Bonsai trees are so beautiful and worthy of a poem, they are poetry in motions. Excellent use of words that takes the reader to another place.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Excellent haiku form that creates a clear picture and also brings forth feelings and emotions. Bonsai trees are so beautiful and worthy of a poem, they are poetry in motions. Excellent use of words that takes the reader to another place.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for your lovely comments and review mermaids!
Glad you liked it.
Katiemae1977
Comment from Neonewman
This is an excellent haiku, and how you went about it is unique. A road less traveled. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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This is an excellent haiku, and how you went about it is unique. A road less traveled. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much Steve for your lovely comments and review!
Katiemae1977
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My pleasure, Katiemae.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
A nice short sweet poem about the humble Bonsai tree and all that the tree has seen on its long journey through life. Bonsoi trees are indeed special and reflect the beauty of nature
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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A nice short sweet poem about the humble Bonsai tree and all that the tree has seen on its long journey through life. Bonsoi trees are indeed special and reflect the beauty of nature
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks Jake for your review! So glad you liked it!
Katiemae1977
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation, Katiemae.
-You wrote a good haiku with a good topic.
-A good opening line followed by good
descriptive detail of the bonsai tree.
-They are an interesting tree since
there is no set form or shape that they have.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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-Very nice image and presentation, Katiemae.
-You wrote a good haiku with a good topic.
-A good opening line followed by good
descriptive detail of the bonsai tree.
-They are an interesting tree since
there is no set form or shape that they have.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much for your wonderful comments and review!
Katiemae1977
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Nicki.B
I love your little philosophical Haiku.
The bonsai is such a beauty. Great how you referred to lifes twist and turns are such like the bonsai. And a great punch line with a road less traveled.
Very well written I really enjoyed this.
Well done, good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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I love your little philosophical Haiku.
The bonsai is such a beauty. Great how you referred to lifes twist and turns are such like the bonsai. And a great punch line with a road less traveled.
Very well written I really enjoyed this.
Well done, good luck in the contest
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review Nicki! Glad you liked it!
Katiemae1977
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You're welcome! If you had time I'd appreciate if you could review my poem 'last days'. Sorry for being a cheeky so and so for asking x
Comment from bonespur
This poem is a good submission for the contest. I like the way you've incorporated the winding tree limbs and life's journey. People don't usually choose the hard road. Good job and good luck have a blessed day
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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This poem is a good submission for the contest. I like the way you've incorporated the winding tree limbs and life's journey. People don't usually choose the hard road. Good job and good luck have a blessed day
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much for your comments and review bonespur. Have a blessed day yourself
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Ancient Bonsai Tree, has the proper formatting and notes that this plants path to growth has definitely and essentially "made all the difference".
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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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This 5-7-5, Ancient Bonsai Tree, has the proper formatting and notes that this plants path to growth has definitely and essentially "made all the difference".
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you Bill for your comments and review!
