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Comment from Paul McFarland
They say that we have just started the biggest month for tornadoes and hurricanes. Hopefully we will escape with very little destruction. Nice Haiku.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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They say that we have just started the biggest month for tornadoes and hurricanes. Hopefully we will escape with very little destruction. Nice Haiku.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hi there Paul! Thanks so much for your wonderful review. It's so appreciated!
Melissa
Comment from Katiemae1977
What an ominous haiku with an ominous picture to boot. You describe the storm so very vividly I can almost feel it.
Excellent haiku with all rules followed. Best wishes in the contest!
Katiemae1977
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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What an ominous haiku with an ominous picture to boot. You describe the storm so very vividly I can almost feel it.
Excellent haiku with all rules followed. Best wishes in the contest!
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hi Katie! Thanks so much for your wonderful review. It's so appreciated!
Melissa
Comment from Nicki.B
I really enjoyed this, a very powerful expression of a tornado, we just watched the new Twisters movie at the weekend an it was fascinating and truly devastating at the same time.
The image is great too, well done. Good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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I really enjoyed this, a very powerful expression of a tornado, we just watched the new Twisters movie at the weekend an it was fascinating and truly devastating at the same time.
The image is great too, well done. Good luck!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much for your wonderful review. It's so appreciated! We plan to see the Twister movie too :)
Melissa
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It's great! Enjoy Melissa!
Comment from mermaids
This is a vivid and scary description of a tornado. Your use of words shows the twister in action. I also like the words "deadened leaden". They give a rhythmic feel to your words.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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This is a vivid and scary description of a tornado. Your use of words shows the twister in action. I also like the words "deadened leaden". They give a rhythmic feel to your words.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much for your wonderful review. It's so appreciated!
Melissa
Comment from Jacob1395
This made me think of the scene from The Wizard of Oz when Dorothy is carried off in the tornado. You describe the storm perfectly and I could really feel just how violent it could be. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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This made me think of the scene from The Wizard of Oz when Dorothy is carried off in the tornado. You describe the storm perfectly and I could really feel just how violent it could be. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hello Jacob... Thanks so much for your wonderful review. It's so appreciated!
Melissa
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nicely written haiku for the contest. I enjoyed very much listening to it and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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This is a very nicely written haiku for the contest. I enjoyed very much listening to it and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Patricia... Thanks so much for your wonderful review. It's so appreciated!
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You created a dark, threatening and gloomy scene as this tornado tears through your poem like a whirlwind, I enjoyed your powerful Haiku Melissa, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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You created a dark, threatening and gloomy scene as this tornado tears through your poem like a whirlwind, I enjoyed your powerful Haiku Melissa, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hey Dolly. It is dark one, but it is how tornados make me feel. Once, I had one coming straight for me. Thank goodness it veered off... Thanks so much for your wonderful review. It's so appreciated!
Melissa
Comment from royowen
I think you've described well what we might call a small whirl wind, but this looks far worse Melissa, like a severe tornado, but thank the Lord we don't get them, beautifully written blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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I think you've described well what we might call a small whirl wind, but this looks far worse Melissa, like a severe tornado, but thank the Lord we don't get them, beautifully written blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hello Roy. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. It's so appreciated!
Melissa
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My pleasure
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You too
Comment from lyenochka
This is a stunning haiku with its alliteration, powerful metaphor and even internal rhyme! Tornado season gives us the "kigo" and the satori of the whirling dervish really works! Hope this does well in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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This is a stunning haiku with its alliteration, powerful metaphor and even internal rhyme! Tornado season gives us the "kigo" and the satori of the whirling dervish really works! Hope this does well in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hi there Helen. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. It's so appreciated!
Melissa
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Great job! 💖
Comment from judiverse
Wouldn't want to go through that. The state where I live has had some bad tornados, but I haven't been through any of them. Very compelling picture. I like your rhyming with deadened and leaden. Great description of the sky, too. Dervishing is a great word choice. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Wouldn't want to go through that. The state where I live has had some bad tornados, but I haven't been through any of them. Very compelling picture. I like your rhyming with deadened and leaden. Great description of the sky, too. Dervishing is a great word choice. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Good morning, Judi. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. It's so appreciated!
Melissa
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You're very welcome. When I was living in Texas, there were several threats. We we instructed to go to the restroom if there was a tornado approaching. We probably would have needed to use it, anyway, with the anxiety about a tornado coming. judi
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Hahaha... so funny.
M