My Autumn Afternoon
Rhyming31 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
Fall, in my opinion the best time of the year. After this scorching summer what a relief. Your well written, rhyming poem brings out cool visions of spring.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Fall, in my opinion the best time of the year. After this scorching summer what a relief. Your well written, rhyming poem brings out cool visions of spring.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Hi there. Thank you for your lovely review of my Autumn verse. I really appreciate you and your words. Thanks again!
Melissa
Comment from Paul McFarland
There has been many sonnets about autumn lately, and yours is a good one.
Autumn
I really think that autumn
Is my favorite time of year.
The leaves are many colored,
And the air is crisp and clear.
The blackflies and mosquitos
Have all finally bit the dust.
I hate to get my rake out,
But my wife says that I must.
The foliage that I admired,
When it was at its peak,
Was only beautiful to me
For just about a week.
Those colored leaves are now all scattered
Over my front lawn.
And what enjoyment that I had
Is now all up and gone.
Now there must be a million
Of those multi-colored things
That autumn frost on cold clear nights
And Mother Nature brings.
So as I stand upon that leafy carpet,
Rake in hand,
I offer up a small request
I hope she'll understand.
"I ask for very little, Mother -
Just a tiny chore.
Would you please blow these leaves
Onto my neighbor's lawn next door."
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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There has been many sonnets about autumn lately, and yours is a good one.
Autumn
I really think that autumn
Is my favorite time of year.
The leaves are many colored,
And the air is crisp and clear.
The blackflies and mosquitos
Have all finally bit the dust.
I hate to get my rake out,
But my wife says that I must.
The foliage that I admired,
When it was at its peak,
Was only beautiful to me
For just about a week.
Those colored leaves are now all scattered
Over my front lawn.
And what enjoyment that I had
Is now all up and gone.
Now there must be a million
Of those multi-colored things
That autumn frost on cold clear nights
And Mother Nature brings.
So as I stand upon that leafy carpet,
Rake in hand,
I offer up a small request
I hope she'll understand.
"I ask for very little, Mother -
Just a tiny chore.
Would you please blow these leaves
Onto my neighbor's lawn next door."
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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I laughed so hard, Paul. I ran and read it to my hubby and got a big grin from him. Thanks for the humor and lighthearted review. Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem. I love the sound. Good rhymes and meter that are not forced. I love the autumn season and you described it so well.
Well done!
Gypsy
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Excellent poem. I love the sound. Good rhymes and meter that are not forced. I love the autumn season and you described it so well.
Well done!
Gypsy
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Hi Gypsy. Thank you for your lovely review of my Autumn verse. I really appreciate you and your words. Thanks again!
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is so relaxing; I just want to curl up and read a bit with something warm to drink. I love the scents of the apple candle and the beef stew emitting comfort. Yum! You might capitalize '(To) live my ....'
I can hear the clocks chiming as you snuggle. Wonderful use of the senses! Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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This is so relaxing; I just want to curl up and read a bit with something warm to drink. I love the scents of the apple candle and the beef stew emitting comfort. Yum! You might capitalize '(To) live my ....'
I can hear the clocks chiming as you snuggle. Wonderful use of the senses! Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you so very much, Carol. I'm glad you enjoyed this Autumn verse and all of the texture of senses that go with it. Hugs!
Melissa.
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Definitely my pleasure! Have a blessed weekend.
Carol
Comment from judiverse
Love it! It flows beautifully and the rhyme is smooth. It has a leisurely pace which matches the mood of the narrator. It's wonderful to have a time like this to relax and do what you love to do. The image of the clocks centering into time is delightful, and the spicy apple candle smells great. Wish I could enjoy those smells myself. Beautifully written. Oops, sorry! I have no sixes left, but this was worthy of one. judi
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Love it! It flows beautifully and the rhyme is smooth. It has a leisurely pace which matches the mood of the narrator. It's wonderful to have a time like this to relax and do what you love to do. The image of the clocks centering into time is delightful, and the spicy apple candle smells great. Wish I could enjoy those smells myself. Beautifully written. Oops, sorry! I have no sixes left, but this was worthy of one. judi
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much, Judi. I love autumn and all of the coziness it brings... sometimes you just have to slow down and savor life. Thanks again, my friend.
Melissa
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This was really terrific! judi
Comment from Rachelle Allen
What a cozy-delicious poem this is! This hideaway place sounds SO extremely perfect - and the image you found to couple it with could not be more picturesque and appropos! This is Norman Rockwell and Martha Stewart all wrapped up into one perfect idea. xoxo
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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What a cozy-delicious poem this is! This hideaway place sounds SO extremely perfect - and the image you found to couple it with could not be more picturesque and appropos! This is Norman Rockwell and Martha Stewart all wrapped up into one perfect idea. xoxo
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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haha, you made my day Rachelle. Those two are some of my favorite people... love his art, and her recipes :). Thank you so much.
Melissa
Comment from Katiemae1977
This is oh so calming and wonderful Melissa. Your rhyme and meter are flawless making for a very smooth and easy read. You've really captured the essence of autumn in this wonderful poem!
Bra-vo!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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This is oh so calming and wonderful Melissa. Your rhyme and meter are flawless making for a very smooth and easy read. You've really captured the essence of autumn in this wonderful poem!
Bra-vo!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thanks so much Katie! I am having a wonderful afternoon and wanted to share a bit of it :). Hugs.
Melissa
Comment from Mark D. R.
Melissa,
What a relaxing mood you put me in. The aromas of your foods are tantalizing.
Actually Autumn for me is gobbling more than few warm cider-cinnamon donuts and washing them down with cold apple cider!
I am willing to unwind now in my backyard under the current warm sun while reading a book. The problem is that I often nod off LOL
Mark
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Melissa,
What a relaxing mood you put me in. The aromas of your foods are tantalizing.
Actually Autumn for me is gobbling more than few warm cider-cinnamon donuts and washing them down with cold apple cider!
I am willing to unwind now in my backyard under the current warm sun while reading a book. The problem is that I often nod off LOL
Mark
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Haha, Mark. I nod off too :). I'm glad to know you are enjoying these last days of warm weather before the cool weather really sets in. I envy you your cider donuts. The last time I had one was when we were visiting our son at Ft. Drum, NY a few years ago. Gobble one for me too :)
Thanks so much.
Melissa
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Melissa,
They get lots of snow in the Ft. Drum locale. I think the yearly snowfall is 12 feet. Never having served in the armrd forces, I did once drive as a passenger in a tank at Drum as we had an assignment to be at that location. There I found out that they get 1 mile on three gallons of fuel! Even if my memory is lagging, switching the numbers does not make their mpg dry efficient LOL
For many years, we spend a vacation at Trapp Family Lodge in Stowe, VT starting the 4th Sunday in June. There we gorge on the cider donuts!
Mark
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your poem is sweet and cosy Melissa, warming food and spicy scents in the air, a candle burning and those moments unwinding as we look out at the autumnal colours make this poem a gem. A fine presentation, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Your poem is sweet and cosy Melissa, warming food and spicy scents in the air, a candle burning and those moments unwinding as we look out at the autumnal colours make this poem a gem. A fine presentation, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you Dolly. I am finding it very true for me that I need to unwind to be at my best. Today is one of those days :). Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Janet Foor
What a lovely scene you have shared in this cozy Autumn afternoon poem.
Makes me want to find my book and cup of tea and sit right down with you.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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What a lovely scene you have shared in this cozy Autumn afternoon poem.
Makes me want to find my book and cup of tea and sit right down with you.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Haha, thank you Janet. I'm in to cozy today :). Hugs.
Melissa