Comment from lancellot

Exceptional

This is very well written. It feels like a perfect female-oriented fantasy. You have solid tone, pacing and editing.

notes:

"She coat was the color of nutmeg."
-should this be-
"Her coat was the color of nutmeg."

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024

Hello, my friend. This book is one of my female centered. I've written two others that were male centered and sort of geared around the personality of my son.

Thanks for finding the grammar issues and for taking time to read carefully.
Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from Cassandra Vaillancourt

Excellent

Hello. I loved your story. I'm just confused about the words Wilson my finance. Was that supposed to be fiance? That was the only thing that stood out the rest of the story was great!

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 Comment Written 15-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024

Hi Cassandra,
Thank you so much for reviewing my chapter. That means a lot to me. I misspelled fiance, lol. A lot of people caught that. Silly me!!
I'm glad you liked it,
Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

For once your images makes my heart sing so beautiful and colorful and the story is to die for. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.

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 Comment Written 15-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024

Hi Iza,
Thank you so much for reviewing this chapter. I always look forward to your insight! I'm glad the artwork spoke to you. I have way too much fun with them.
Thanks for the well wishes,
Hugs,
Rhonda