Angry American
How an American feels about the country right now25 total reviews
Comment from Kahlani
Hi Cecilia, firstly, welcome to the FanStory family. I'm a newbie as well and love this supportive community. I can feel the frustration and disappointment in your poem. Congratulations on your first milestone.
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Hi Cecilia, firstly, welcome to the FanStory family. I'm a newbie as well and love this supportive community. I can feel the frustration and disappointment in your poem. Congratulations on your first milestone.
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your feedback. Just curious why you chose good or excellent. I would be interested in more feed back it you have it. As a newbie yourself welcome and hope this platform helps you.
Comment from patcelaw
Wow! You have expressed in this poem the way many of us as Americans feel first of all I would like to say thank you for your service. I also want to thank you for a very well written poem and if America does not wake up soon, we're going to find ourselves in all kinds of trouble. It's bad enough right now, but it could get worse so I'm hoping that America is awake. May God bless you and keep you safe and may God bless America and make her wake up.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Wow! You have expressed in this poem the way many of us as Americans feel first of all I would like to say thank you for your service. I also want to thank you for a very well written poem and if America does not wake up soon, we're going to find ourselves in all kinds of trouble. It's bad enough right now, but it could get worse so I'm hoping that America is awake. May God bless you and keep you safe and may God bless America and make her wake up.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your review. I express my feelings through poetry and this country is in serious trouble. There are so many young people who do not understand what is going on in this country and it's a sad fact. May God bless you and yours also.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Understanding politics takes time and effort and the only way to make real changes is to use our vote wisely and understand exactly what we are voting for.
It is not about someone's personality, their personal life or how they treat their wife, who they went to bed with etc etc etc., It is about the big decisions they will make when they are in office. Everyone has the vote in America, and to make improvements they will need to understand what the candidate stands for. This fundamental understanding is missing in most Americans who vote because they like someone's personality.
I sincerely hope that some of the issues you raise will be resolved soon.
A poignant poem Cecilia and welcome to Fanstory.
I hope America finds its way back soon and the people are united again.
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Understanding politics takes time and effort and the only way to make real changes is to use our vote wisely and understand exactly what we are voting for.
It is not about someone's personality, their personal life or how they treat their wife, who they went to bed with etc etc etc., It is about the big decisions they will make when they are in office. Everyone has the vote in America, and to make improvements they will need to understand what the candidate stands for. This fundamental understanding is missing in most Americans who vote because they like someone's personality.
I sincerely hope that some of the issues you raise will be resolved soon.
A poignant poem Cecilia and welcome to Fanstory.
I hope America finds its way back soon and the people are united again.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Dolly,
Thank you for your review. I don't think this country will ever be what it was. The politicians promise all this greatness and then don't deliver. I agree that most Americans don't understand politics and vote on personalty.
Comment from Julie Helms
Welcome to Fanstory! Your poem expresses the frustration felt by a lot of Americans. I personally think you hit the nail on the head with the motivation behind the disastrous policies: divided we fall.
I have a few suggestions, if you're interested:
pissed off American
(pissed-off)
tax payer money
(tax-payer)
Why is the question?
(I had to reread this several times to get the gist of what you were saying. Maybe if you set off the Why it would help, with italics or a comma: Why, is the question)
Jesus pleas come soon
(please)
Well done!
Julie
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Welcome to Fanstory! Your poem expresses the frustration felt by a lot of Americans. I personally think you hit the nail on the head with the motivation behind the disastrous policies: divided we fall.
I have a few suggestions, if you're interested:
pissed off American
(pissed-off)
tax payer money
(tax-payer)
Why is the question?
(I had to reread this several times to get the gist of what you were saying. Maybe if you set off the Why it would help, with italics or a comma: Why, is the question)
Jesus pleas come soon
(please)
Well done!
Julie
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Julie,
Thank you for the feedback I really appreciate it. I will take your suggestions and revise the poem. I use my poems to express my thoughts. I thought this one would be a great first poem. Thank you again for the feedback.
Comment from dragonpoet
Welcome to the site Cecilia
This is a good poem that shows what our country is lacking more and more. I agree that if more people acted in a kind Anne compassionate way this country could r what it was meant be. Even though I am not a veteran, I agree they haven't been honored and thanked as much as they should be. So thank you for your service.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Joan
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Welcome to the site Cecilia
This is a good poem that shows what our country is lacking more and more. I agree that if more people acted in a kind Anne compassionate way this country could r what it was meant be. Even though I am not a veteran, I agree they haven't been honored and thanked as much as they should be. So thank you for your service.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Joan
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Joan,
Thank you for the review. I wrote this poem one day when life was getting me down. I love to use my poetry to express my thoughts.
Thank you again for the review.
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You are most kindly welcome, Cecilia.
Yes poetry can be cathartic.
Joan