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Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "End of the Road "Two very real women in not so real situation.
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Comment from royowen
I love the last comment, I'm sorry Jane, he's talking to me. Heh heh. Yep getting even is your thing, I remember my mother would never let me get the last word in, it's good seeing a collection of women not really getting on, with Jane the one being the 'fly in the ointment', beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : a young man, (in dreads)
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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I love the last comment, I'm sorry Jane, he's talking to me. Heh heh. Yep getting even is your thing, I remember my mother would never let me get the last word in, it's good seeing a collection of women not really getting on, with Jane the one being the 'fly in the ointment', beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : a young man, (in dreads)
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Sometimes its better to not get the last word in. Silence can sometimes be deafening. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Hahaha. You saved the best for last: antique rack!! Hahaha. And the you one...er, TWO?... upped her with yours! You got right into the trashy NJ lifestyle!!
Very good chapter with lots of sensory descriptions that take us right into the scene with you.
Can't wait to see where this takes us!!
Xoxoxo
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Hahaha. You saved the best for last: antique rack!! Hahaha. And the you one...er, TWO?... upped her with yours! You got right into the trashy NJ lifestyle!!
Very good chapter with lots of sensory descriptions that take us right into the scene with you.
Can't wait to see where this takes us!!
Xoxoxo
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much, Rachelle. I am dreading this story ending, but after a few weeks, you are hitting the road to join me during hurricane season. I'm glad you approved of my take on this chapter. Gretchen
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I love everything you write. You know this. Xoxi
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Gretchen!
Geesh!
You and Rachelle have certainly given me many moments of hilarity today!
What a twosome you are!
Scary as well!
I have so enjoyed how you both look at the same situation but from your own individual perspectives!
Humor abounds - although decidedly individual and unique from both of your pens!
Just one little edit needed, maybe. Below, I've copied and pasted two sentences. The second one doesn't sound right to me... Just a thought:
She cuts her eyes at me. "I can put you back there as well," she snaps.
I don't press it, just look once more a tinted divider wondering how I'd be feeling back there.
Thank you for sharing!
fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Hello, Gretchen!
Geesh!
You and Rachelle have certainly given me many moments of hilarity today!
What a twosome you are!
Scary as well!
I have so enjoyed how you both look at the same situation but from your own individual perspectives!
Humor abounds - although decidedly individual and unique from both of your pens!
Just one little edit needed, maybe. Below, I've copied and pasted two sentences. The second one doesn't sound right to me... Just a thought:
She cuts her eyes at me. "I can put you back there as well," she snaps.
I don't press it, just look once more a tinted divider wondering how I'd be feeling back there.
Thank you for sharing!
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Diane. I will revisit that sentence. It is a tad awkward. I'm so glad you are enjoying this. I am having a blast, and hate to see it end. But, we are getting close. Thank you so much for this fine review and the exceptional rating. Gretchen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I got the boobs reference. I'm just surprised Rachelle didn't lock you in the backseat for calling them 'antique'!
She cuts her eyes at me. "I can put you back there as well," she snaps. - One of the best lines of the entire story! She said it, but YOU wrote it!
Great teamwork.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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I got the boobs reference. I'm just surprised Rachelle didn't lock you in the backseat for calling them 'antique'!
She cuts her eyes at me. "I can put you back there as well," she snaps. - One of the best lines of the entire story! She said it, but YOU wrote it!
Great teamwork.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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I was talking to Jane about the antique rack. Lol. My mouth has this little razor that comes out when it wants to. Thank you so much for this awesome review and the exceptional rating. Gretchen