Emerald Isle
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Mystery Beneath the Earth"Invitation to Paradise
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Comment from Yolanda King
Peter Langston, the oldest in the group asked, "How deep underground does the cave go?" = I think this is missing a , after group
At least he'll knows what to do in case we run into trouble." = he'll know without s
I find it a bit sad that pretty much all of the women except for Lori are depicted as rather fearful. Why not turn it around and make some men squeamish for a change?
All in all I like the description of the cave. I've been to many and I can well imagine yours while reading.
I also like the suggestion of sth spicy beginning between Lori and Mark. Would be interesting to see how far you'll take it.
Have fun writing the next chapter!
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Peter Langston, the oldest in the group asked, "How deep underground does the cave go?" = I think this is missing a , after group
At least he'll knows what to do in case we run into trouble." = he'll know without s
I find it a bit sad that pretty much all of the women except for Lori are depicted as rather fearful. Why not turn it around and make some men squeamish for a change?
All in all I like the description of the cave. I've been to many and I can well imagine yours while reading.
I also like the suggestion of sth spicy beginning between Lori and Mark. Would be interesting to see how far you'll take it.
Have fun writing the next chapter!
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Thank you Yolanda, for your review and comments. This is a multi-author book created by FanStorian, Begin Again (Carol). Each chapter so far has been written by a different author. The idea is to read a chapter and continue where the previous author left off. My chapter is number 6. I hope, with your remarkable editing skills, you decide to join the fun. I like your idea of making a few men squeamish. Thanks again for reading. I appreciate your time.
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It's an interesting idea to have a book written by multiple authors. Was yours the last chapter? And how do I know whether someone's already taken up writing the next one?
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I'm glad to know you're thinking about joining the fun. All you have to do is message Begin Again. Her real name is Carol. She wrote the first chapter and invited others to join in. She will tell you if you are next. I would suggest you contact her as soon as possible if you want to continue where I left off, before someone else writes something that changes the trajectory.
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Thanks for the info! Is there a way I can still look at some previous chapters, too?
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In order to see previous chapters, look at the top of my post. Beside the date, you will see the word 'Chapters.' Next to that you will see the numbers of the chapters. Mine is Chapter 6. Click on any number below 6. I would suggest you begin with the prologue by Begin Again. Have fun.
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Thanks, it took me a while but I've figured it out. I'm still new here and finding my way around (-:
Comment from Wendy G
Creepy, and your story gives a deep sense of foreboding - danger is imminent, and of course max is not to be trusted, and nor are some of the guests. Excellent continuation from the previous, and a fine stepping-off point for the next writer.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Creepy, and your story gives a deep sense of foreboding - danger is imminent, and of course max is not to be trusted, and nor are some of the guests. Excellent continuation from the previous, and a fine stepping-off point for the next writer.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Thank you Wendy, for your review and encouraging comments. I appreciate your time reading, and your SIX, magnificent, shiny stars. I surely hope someone decides to continue the story. Thanks again.
Comment from Julie G1
Well written. The author has skilfully highlighted the dramatic and scary mood with vivid descriptions and interactions of the characters. The reader easily envisages such scenes, depicted with an excellent talent.
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Well written. The author has skilfully highlighted the dramatic and scary mood with vivid descriptions and interactions of the characters. The reader easily envisages such scenes, depicted with an excellent talent.
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Thank you Julie, for your review and encouraging comments. I truly appreciate your time reading and your generous stars.
