Renewal
Home-Made Carpe Diem89 total reviews
Comment from bigbat
Very interesting read. The intertwining of the woman and the tree - brilliant. This reminded me of calgon and eucalyptis, with a bit of peppermint. Calming.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Very interesting read. The intertwining of the woman and the tree - brilliant. This reminded me of calgon and eucalyptis, with a bit of peppermint. Calming.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you, bigbat. Your review is much appreciated.
Comment from boberto
Sounds like sound advise for all. I found it an interesting
read. I do have a question. In the beginning you use quotation marks when "he" speaks. But, later you don't.
My mission, he says: Should must after this be in qoutes?
boberto
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Sounds like sound advise for all. I found it an interesting
read. I do have a question. In the beginning you use quotation marks when "he" speaks. But, later you don't.
My mission, he says: Should must after this be in qoutes?
boberto
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you boberto for the great review. I will work in those details, they are well taken.
Comment from peggysis64
Very well written with vivid imagery and a strong descriptive scheme leading to an enjoyable read. Detected no spag. Speaks a strong message, the need to take time for ourselves to reconnect with ourselves. thank you. k
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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Very well written with vivid imagery and a strong descriptive scheme leading to an enjoyable read. Detected no spag. Speaks a strong message, the need to take time for ourselves to reconnect with ourselves. thank you. k
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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Yes, we all need to take time for ourselves. Best medicine there is. Thank you peggysis.
Comment from allborn66
It's a beautiful poem. It's a wonderful message. Everyone needs a "day off" just because. The poem has a great flow to it. The photo is great.
Barbara
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It's a beautiful poem. It's a wonderful message. Everyone needs a "day off" just because. The poem has a great flow to it. The photo is great.
Barbara
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you Barbara. Lovely review and comments.
Comment from nancyjam
My favorite line "to connect
to the in's and outs
of my breath"
We all need to sit in silence and breath and realize what a miracle that is
and without it nothing else would matter. You convey such beautiful
thoughts with your spare words. A wonderful poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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My favorite line "to connect
to the in's and outs
of my breath"
We all need to sit in silence and breath and realize what a miracle that is
and without it nothing else would matter. You convey such beautiful
thoughts with your spare words. A wonderful poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
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I like it when my reviewers tell me their favorite lines. "The ins and outs of the breath" is one of the favorite ones. Thank you, nancyjam.
Comment from Curt Mongold
A very nice piece of prose my friend. It is eloquent and well stated, and gives a unique perspective for the reader to contemplate.
Sincerely,
Curt
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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A very nice piece of prose my friend. It is eloquent and well stated, and gives a unique perspective for the reader to contemplate.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you Curt.
Comment from Hitcher
It is scary for me but I can relate completely to what you are saying there friend. I have been recovering from spinal surgery for 3 months now and my wife has taken advantage of this and has slotted back into the work force while I recover. I am now in her words 'THE HOUSE BITCH' now, ha ha, I know, cooking, cleaning, girls ready for school, taking them to dance and swimming lessons, ect. my once precious smile is now a scowl, ha ha. It is bloody hard work and I appreciate my darling wife so much more now!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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It is scary for me but I can relate completely to what you are saying there friend. I have been recovering from spinal surgery for 3 months now and my wife has taken advantage of this and has slotted back into the work force while I recover. I am now in her words 'THE HOUSE BITCH' now, ha ha, I know, cooking, cleaning, girls ready for school, taking them to dance and swimming lessons, ect. my once precious smile is now a scowl, ha ha. It is bloody hard work and I appreciate my darling wife so much more now!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you for the fun, ironic and very real review. I hope your precious smile come back soon. Hurray for your wife for being much more appreciated now.
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Indeed!
Comment from Janelle
What a lovely way to gently remind us all of re-connedting with our inner selves. Too often we run around like headless chooks, denying ourselves the pleasure of just 'being'. I especially liked:
To connect
to the ins and outs
of my breath.
Just sitting still making yourself aware of the simple miracle of breathing, can help centre you and allow you to focus on what's important, just being you! :) Lovely poem and I like how it was set out. Good luck in the contest, Jan.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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What a lovely way to gently remind us all of re-connedting with our inner selves. Too often we run around like headless chooks, denying ourselves the pleasure of just 'being'. I especially liked:
To connect
to the ins and outs
of my breath.
Just sitting still making yourself aware of the simple miracle of breathing, can help centre you and allow you to focus on what's important, just being you! :) Lovely poem and I like how it was set out. Good luck in the contest, Jan.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you Janelle. That is the most popular phrase written about. Thank you for the opinion.
Comment from honeypip
this poem is good but need a little more attention. somethimes this poem was confusing to me but it does show passion so keep at it
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this poem is good but need a little more attention. somethimes this poem was confusing to me but it does show passion so keep at it
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a lovely little poem, Amada. It makes the reader feel very relaxed, in the spirit of the tree. My only suggestion, is that the reader doesn't at first know that you are talking to the tree. In the first stanza, you could say "Checking in / with my friend, the tree." I did enjoy reading this sweet poem. Good luck in the contest.
Sally
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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This is a lovely little poem, Amada. It makes the reader feel very relaxed, in the spirit of the tree. My only suggestion, is that the reader doesn't at first know that you are talking to the tree. In the first stanza, you could say "Checking in / with my friend, the tree." I did enjoy reading this sweet poem. Good luck in the contest.
Sally
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you, Sally. Your comments are well taken and I will check on that.
