Short Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Mistaken Identity"A book of a mixture of stories
72 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
Congratulations for winning your contest. This is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Sometimes, mistakes pay off.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Congratulations for winning your contest. This is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Sometimes, mistakes pay off.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Charlie,
Thanks for the kind review and wishes. Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Carol I see that you won the contest,smiles
Great beginning leading into the letter.
And a very sensual letter at that;
and the ending that surprised me.
"We were discussing mistaken identities
Gert
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Hello Carol I see that you won the contest,smiles
Great beginning leading into the letter.
And a very sensual letter at that;
and the ending that surprised me.
"We were discussing mistaken identities
Gert
Comment Written 19-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Gert,
Thanks for reading and enjoying. Appreciate the review. Smiles to you, Carol
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You are welcome Carol
Gert
Comment from Queenise
This is so interesting and it is what I call using a mistake to your advantage. It has great story line and I see a moral here. Good flow,pace,content. It was quite a surprise and I liked it a lot. Queenise
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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This is so interesting and it is what I call using a mistake to your advantage. It has great story line and I see a moral here. Good flow,pace,content. It was quite a surprise and I liked it a lot. Queenise
Comment Written 19-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Queenise,
Thank you for your kind comments. Smiles to you, Carol
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Carol, you're most welcome. Blessings. Queenise
Comment from MissMerri
An excellent story, so well told, so cleverly conceived, I can see nothing at all to suggest or change. I loved the ending, and thought the build-up was great too. A pleasure to read such good work.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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An excellent story, so well told, so cleverly conceived, I can see nothing at all to suggest or change. I loved the ending, and thought the build-up was great too. A pleasure to read such good work.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Miss Merri,
An awesome review from an awesome person...Thank you so much. Smiles to you...Carol
Comment from Rama Rao
An excellent story which made good reading.
The ending was indeed good.
Do women send such e-mails?
I'm wiser.
Why don't I find such mails in my inbox?
Wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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An excellent story which made good reading.
The ending was indeed good.
Do women send such e-mails?
I'm wiser.
Why don't I find such mails in my inbox?
Wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Ramarao,
Thanks so much for the kind review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my gosh. This is just too much. Will Mandy explain what happened or have a date. HUMMM, what about Susan. Oh dear, I see a romance developing.
Mandy smiled, (period)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Oh my gosh. This is just too much. Will Mandy explain what happened or have a date. HUMMM, what about Susan. Oh dear, I see a romance developing.
Mandy smiled, (period)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Barbara,
Thanks for stopping by and enjoying the story. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from Realist101
OH NO! I know e-mails are dangerous, and you have found a different take on this. VERY good, and fun to read Carol. HA, how things go...you just never know!!! Hugs, Susan
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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OH NO! I know e-mails are dangerous, and you have found a different take on this. VERY good, and fun to read Carol. HA, how things go...you just never know!!! Hugs, Susan
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Susan,
Thanks for stopping by and leaving me such a kind comment. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from RebelRose
Good story. That email did Mandy a big favor. I can't help but wonder who it was actually meant for, though. LOL. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Good story. That email did Mandy a big favor. I can't help but wonder who it was actually meant for, though. LOL. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Patty,
Thanks for the great review as always. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from RaymondJohn
over worked--overworked.
Nice. Charming little story with a nice built-in reverse revenge twist. Clean narrative with fine pace. Good blend of narrative and dialog. Well done. You should have a strong entry in the contest. Ray.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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over worked--overworked.
Nice. Charming little story with a nice built-in reverse revenge twist. Clean narrative with fine pace. Good blend of narrative and dialog. Well done. You should have a strong entry in the contest. Ray.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Ray
Thank you for the wonderful review and for catching that little nit. Appreciate the comments. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from Werdy_Nerd
What an excellent piece of flash fiction! I was just peeking through some of the reviews and I agree about adding a short dialogue tag at the end of "Be a sweetheart and finish Jack's last letter for me." (Susan said). I know it's flash, but I think this would help immediately establish the direction and flow of their conversation.
Overall, it was a great story with a satisfying ending. Way to go, Mandy! :P
Werdy
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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What an excellent piece of flash fiction! I was just peeking through some of the reviews and I agree about adding a short dialogue tag at the end of "Be a sweetheart and finish Jack's last letter for me." (Susan said). I know it's flash, but I think this would help immediately establish the direction and flow of their conversation.
Overall, it was a great story with a satisfying ending. Way to go, Mandy! :P
Werdy
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Werdy,
Thanks so much for your kind review and your enjoyment for sure. I'll take another look at your suggestion. Smiles, Carol