Hello, Operator
A little song'll do it35 total reviews
Comment from Nanny 6
Lol... this is priceless, a great story with some good memories in song. Original and a great contest entry! Good luck, this is too cute... Judy
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Lol... this is priceless, a great story with some good memories in song. Original and a great contest entry! Good luck, this is too cute... Judy
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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judy... wow, priceless! Thank you for the nice comments and for taking the time to read my story... John
Comment from toni guerrero
That was very amusing piece.Your dialogue was good and your topic, good. You also had good flow to the story.
I would recommend your story to others to read. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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That was very amusing piece.Your dialogue was good and your topic, good. You also had good flow to the story.
I would recommend your story to others to read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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toni, thank you for your interest, comments and statement that you would recommend it, thats very nice. John
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you are very welcome
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you are so welcome.
Comment from anabelle
LOL! You really did have fun with this and consequently, so did we. I loved this.
What a great way to say Happy Birthday Mom.
One nit; 'Not ever.'
Thanks for the laugh.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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LOL! You really did have fun with this and consequently, so did we. I loved this.
What a great way to say Happy Birthday Mom.
One nit; 'Not ever.'
Thanks for the laugh.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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anabelle.. thank you for reading and commenting. I also made he correction. Thank You... John
Comment from Dustman6180
There are a lot of really good entries in this contest, but so far this is the best I've seen. This is well written dialogue with a lot of humor. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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There are a lot of really good entries in this contest, but so far this is the best I've seen. This is well written dialogue with a lot of humor. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Dustman6180.. thank you for reading and reviewing my story. Very much appreciated.. John
Comment from resilke
Thank you for sharing your story. This is well written and to the point. Lots of dialogue always helps to enhance a story as you've used. Good character development. Lots of memorable moments. Good ideas. Creative. Entertaining. Keep writing. All best
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Thank you for sharing your story. This is well written and to the point. Lots of dialogue always helps to enhance a story as you've used. Good character development. Lots of memorable moments. Good ideas. Creative. Entertaining. Keep writing. All best
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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resilke.. thank you for reading nd commenting. I appreciate your time, John
Comment from fionageorge
I think it meets the rules, but more than that, it was very entertaining, and a great entry to this contest. Loved the dialogue, and the twist at the end. What a cute son. Timmy, even his name sounds cute.
Good luck in the contest and warmest regards, Marijke
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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I think it meets the rules, but more than that, it was very entertaining, and a great entry to this contest. Loved the dialogue, and the twist at the end. What a cute son. Timmy, even his name sounds cute.
Good luck in the contest and warmest regards, Marijke
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Marijke.. thank you for those fine words and for taking the time, John
Comment from Begin Again
John,
What a clever son and a clever writer as well. I loved the story especially using the songs as dialogue..Flash backs with every new line. Well done.
Carol
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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John,
What a clever son and a clever writer as well. I loved the story especially using the songs as dialogue..Flash backs with every new line. Well done.
Carol
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Carol... many, tons of many great songs back in the day. Thank you for your time in reading and commenting, John
Comment from Ash Madox
This was priceless, it was so good. Who'd've thunk to use your favorite songs for this dialogue contest...you! So well done, and what a great resolution--a surprise joke on mom for her birthday. It sure does qualify; brilliantly. So many good entries in this choice contest, but I'm sure you'll do well with this sort of imagination. Loved it. Good luck. Ash.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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This was priceless, it was so good. Who'd've thunk to use your favorite songs for this dialogue contest...you! So well done, and what a great resolution--a surprise joke on mom for her birthday. It sure does qualify; brilliantly. So many good entries in this choice contest, but I'm sure you'll do well with this sort of imagination. Loved it. Good luck. Ash.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Ash, thank you for those fine words in your commentary. John
Comment from Belinda
What a surprise ending. The 'harrasser' turns out to be her own son, remembering her birthday. You have a splendid idea for this contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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What a surprise ending. The 'harrasser' turns out to be her own son, remembering her birthday. You have a splendid idea for this contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Belinda, thank you for stopping and taking the time to read and comment on my story. It's very appreciated... John
Comment from Sandollar
I loved this. It was fun, lighthearted, and very creative. Although I'd have hung up after time in a bottle. This seemed like fun for you and that's what the challenge was about, too. I know every one of the songs mentioned and this piece brought back a lot of fun memories. Yes, this did comply with the rules. Great work. Best of luck in the contest.
I found no errors.
Sandollar
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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I loved this. It was fun, lighthearted, and very creative. Although I'd have hung up after time in a bottle. This seemed like fun for you and that's what the challenge was about, too. I know every one of the songs mentioned and this piece brought back a lot of fun memories. Yes, this did comply with the rules. Great work. Best of luck in the contest.
I found no errors.
Sandollar
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Sandollar... thanks for the fine words in your commentary. I am so glad that you enjoyed it. John
