Climbing Capitan
Facing El Capitan30 total reviews
Comment from sidone
your story got really good details with good expression,waiting for more,keep up the good work,a pleasure to read,good luck
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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your story got really good details with good expression,waiting for more,keep up the good work,a pleasure to read,good luck
Comment Written 30-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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HI Sidone, thank you!! I'm happy to hear your thoughts and also thank you for your time for me too! Happy writing! Susan
Comment from Mastery
Wow! What a "cliff-hanger" Pardon the pun...LOL..Good writing for sure, Susan. One sentence in here tripped me up just a bit: "His face beams up at me, sweat glistening, handsome and kind." How about: "His handsome face is sweating as he beams up at me."
Good chapter in any event, Susan. Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Wow! What a "cliff-hanger" Pardon the pun...LOL..Good writing for sure, Susan. One sentence in here tripped me up just a bit: "His face beams up at me, sweat glistening, handsome and kind." How about: "His handsome face is sweating as he beams up at me."
Good chapter in any event, Susan. Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 30-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Hi Bob, thank you! I guess I needed to do some research on climbing, but this just came to me, after G. left and he spoke of a friend who fell off Capitan. SO sad, his leaving and his good friend too. I used the person dropping as our friends on FS leaving? Just gone. So glad you liked this attempt my friend. Susan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, what a nightmare -
and such a waste of life.
I have to admit, I could never understand such daring,
which is the climbers own choice, because they are not
only risking their own life, but some poor soul who has
to risk theirs when going to the rescue. seems all wrong
to me.
A great write, Susan.
Margaret
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Oh, what a nightmare -
and such a waste of life.
I have to admit, I could never understand such daring,
which is the climbers own choice, because they are not
only risking their own life, but some poor soul who has
to risk theirs when going to the rescue. seems all wrong
to me.
A great write, Susan.
Margaret
Comment Written 30-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Hi Margaret! ME neither. I can't even watch them on the television. It's too scary. I climbed trees as a child tho, and loved it? I don't know. I lost that desire somewhere along the way! Thank God. I ride a tall horse, but other than that, well. I am a land lover? Thank you for liking this my friend. hugs, Susan
Comment from humpwhistle
Wow, Susan, that must have been one hell of a fanfriend. I get it though. The climb toward our goals, and the links that tie us together. I'm sorry your friend left, but your metaphor is an apt one. I hope you'll keep climbing. Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Wow, Susan, that must have been one hell of a fanfriend. I get it though. The climb toward our goals, and the links that tie us together. I'm sorry your friend left, but your metaphor is an apt one. I hope you'll keep climbing. Peace, Lee
Comment Written 30-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Hi Lee, sorry for this slow reply...I wrote this, thinking of G. I sure miss him. He was kind and helpful. And he once said, "we make friends here, and then they are just gone." Hence this story. Also he lost a friend climbing Capitan I guess. SO sad. I hope I don't fall , but I feel I am. Thanks Lee, I am glad you "got" this one. Suse
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Is this story real, if so you are brave. I have tried abseiling and had a safety harness I was terrified. A good story with good imagery. A good write well done. Mary
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Is this story real, if so you are brave. I have tried abseiling and had a safety harness I was terrified. A good story with good imagery. A good write well done. Mary
Comment Written 30-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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MARY! Ahhhhh!! Is that when you are just hanging? Hang gliding? Oh my Lord, there is NO way. You are brave! Wow, you should write about it! Seriously...gee. Thanks for this review, now, your turn! ") susan
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Susan:)
As a metaphor for losing someone dear, this is a powerful story. I have climbed many mountains and I know the thrill of the summit and exhilaration of danger on the climb. I could feel all those emotions surge through my body again as I read your story.
Most of all I can imagine the fear of waiting for rescue that might never come.
This story could have many endings:
1. You could have cut the rope.
2. Your new husband could have cut the rope.
3. you husband might have found a away to stop the fall.
I'm only showing these suggestion as possible continuations of a great story. I am still wondering; who was good Fanfriend that inspired the story?
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Hi Susan:)
As a metaphor for losing someone dear, this is a powerful story. I have climbed many mountains and I know the thrill of the summit and exhilaration of danger on the climb. I could feel all those emotions surge through my body again as I read your story.
Most of all I can imagine the fear of waiting for rescue that might never come.
This story could have many endings:
1. You could have cut the rope.
2. Your new husband could have cut the rope.
3. you husband might have found a away to stop the fall.
I'm only showing these suggestion as possible continuations of a great story. I am still wondering; who was good Fanfriend that inspired the story?
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 30-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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HI Roger! Wow, lots of good ideas. Did you know G? E.P.Thomas? He was so nice and helpful too. Sure miss his input. He lost a friend on Capitan years ago. SO sad. IT's great that you have climbed, I have no guts for it. I may have years ago, but lost the desire somewhere? I climbed trees a lot as a child tho! I am glad I brought back some memories, hope only good ones. AND thanks for the hugs, feels nice. lol. Luv you too. Suse
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I didn't much interaction with E. P. Thomas. I never climbed Capitan, but I did climb the north face of The Grand Teton. If I known how it was rated, I never would have tried. Lol
Roger
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Oh my. I am certainly glad you are still here Roger! Wow, what a grand adventure tho! G. said he would not do it again either! Wow. So rating means level of difficulty? Maybe like ski slopes. I prefer to stay low! Or maybe just as high as the back of my poor old horse! ") S.
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i guess moutain climbing was just my way of confronting fear. i still fear height in many situations.
I remember looking down the olympic ski slope in Steamboat Springs, colorado in the summer time. all I could think was that I wouldn't jump off that slope if someone held agun on me. I alwato shut fear out.
Rogerys have to look up or close my eyes
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Wow, I am told to get over spiders I should HOLD ONE???????? THERE IS NO WAY, NO WAY! EVEN, I don't think, if someone was going to shoot me. I don't know. You are brave to even try to conquer a fear like that! geez. S.
Comment from Gooloom
Oh my God that was so unexpected, so tragic and unbelievable. You have brought out out the poignancy of the situation very graphically, The art work is brilliant and in keeping with the story. For a marriage to end in this abrupt manner is really sad and you have done full justice to the story. The element of surprise is well brought out as is the language used to describe this incident. Very good work--neat and precise also. Gooloom
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Oh my God that was so unexpected, so tragic and unbelievable. You have brought out out the poignancy of the situation very graphically, The art work is brilliant and in keeping with the story. For a marriage to end in this abrupt manner is really sad and you have done full justice to the story. The element of surprise is well brought out as is the language used to describe this incident. Very good work--neat and precise also. Gooloom
Comment Written 30-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Hi Goo! Thank you so much. Your review is very encouraging! Thanks again, it is helpful to know our work gives emotions! HUG! Susan
Comment from Rama Rao
That sure is an excellent tribute to your friend who has left this site. Your piece made fine reading.
However,
it would be what tore us apart- How did you know in advance? It's better to leave it
It will be a very long time before someone comes to find us- here you are presuming somebody will find you. I might have to wait for long for someone to find us.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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That sure is an excellent tribute to your friend who has left this site. Your piece made fine reading.
However,
it would be what tore us apart- How did you know in advance? It's better to leave it
It will be a very long time before someone comes to find us- here you are presuming somebody will find you. I might have to wait for long for someone to find us.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Hi Ramarao! Great points! I should go back and redo. I will if I can find time. I always appreciate your honest and helpful reviews...I really do. Great to hear from you! Susan
Comment from psalmist
I'm not sure I would describe this as horror as much as a very sad love story. You did a good job of building the suspense in this short story, describing the loneliness of the climb with just the two of you, the moment of unsettling wind, even the lone eagle soaring overhead, I can almost hear his eerie call. Well done.
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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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I'm not sure I would describe this as horror as much as a very sad love story. You did a good job of building the suspense in this short story, describing the loneliness of the climb with just the two of you, the moment of unsettling wind, even the lone eagle soaring overhead, I can almost hear his eerie call. Well done.
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Comment Written 30-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Hi Psalmist! Thank you! I will try to re do the catagory? I guess it's more of a ? I don't know. I really appreciate hearing from you!! Cheers! Susan
Comment from misscookie
Lovely picture , The ARTWORK Ii breathtaking. I gave me chill not only looking at the climb but, the poem got to me.
Did this really happen. This is a good write.
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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2010
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Lovely picture , The ARTWORK Ii breathtaking. I gave me chill not only looking at the climb but, the poem got to me.
Did this really happen. This is a good write.
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Comment Written 30-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2010
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Hi Cookie, a fanfriend who just left FS, climbed this when he was young and lost a friend who fell. I have seen this, when I was a child, years ago, but never climb. That picture is neat! And scary too! Thank you for reading this for me Cookie! HUG!! Susan