Spit
Determination - Free Verse28 total reviews
Comment from Lastamen
A wicked, and deliciously nasty episode. Perhaps it should have been entitled - "Deliberate" as it takes an absolute purposeful intent for this erotic encounter (unless the entrance is accidental - LOL). Wait a minute - just what are we talking about? (smile). Love the way you're able say what you say without saying it - well done.
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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A wicked, and deliciously nasty episode. Perhaps it should have been entitled - "Deliberate" as it takes an absolute purposeful intent for this erotic encounter (unless the entrance is accidental - LOL). Wait a minute - just what are we talking about? (smile). Love the way you're able say what you say without saying it - well done.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Glad you like bubbles you. What an awesome review and okay if you say so!!!! Never nasty. Just gotta wet your finger with enough spit to be able to stick it inside the bubble. So love them. MUAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH. Thanks so much you!!!
Comment from Jean Lutz
Oh, my. I provide part-time child care for a precocious toddler. I hope he doesn't think of this. He finds bubbles everywhere. When I give him his vitamins in a spoon, he even looks to see if a bubble has formed in the thick liquid.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Oh, my. I provide part-time child care for a precocious toddler. I hope he doesn't think of this. He finds bubbles everywhere. When I give him his vitamins in a spoon, he even looks to see if a bubble has formed in the thick liquid.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Bubbles are fun for everyone. Sigh, why the super low score for bubbles, Jean?
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Oh my. This is the second time this has happened to me. I think it is my broadband connection. Sometimes if there is weather problems the computer is slow and I must have double clicked thinking it did not go through. I would never have given a one to anyone and especially one that brought warm thoughts of a special little one. I am off to fix.
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LOL thanks you for letting me know. It has happened to me too so I do know. I just love ya sweet one.
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This showed me I have to pay more attention to the star thingy. Most of the time I am just thinking about what I want to say and the stars are kind of automatic, but I will have to be more careful and give that one last look before I send. Bad thing is I was not on the computer all day so I didn't get around to making amends for about 12 hours. So sad. :-(
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It's okay. I knew the minute I read your words you didn't hate it. LOL. MUAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.
Comment from blast219
I find humor in the poem and bubble playing in the mouth can be considered a playful pastime. The piece is good. I like the piece de resistance it makes you wonder what will be the effect of the spit or how come you have your chest heaving there is suspense and in the end I find it funny.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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I find humor in the poem and bubble playing in the mouth can be considered a playful pastime. The piece is good. I like the piece de resistance it makes you wonder what will be the effect of the spit or how come you have your chest heaving there is suspense and in the end I find it funny.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Thanks Blast. Your review is real blast!!!
Comment from psalmist
What fun, I love how you titillated the reader with an almost erotic pleasure. Can't say I have ever tried this with spit, but most certainly with soap bubbles.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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What fun, I love how you titillated the reader with an almost erotic pleasure. Can't say I have ever tried this with spit, but most certainly with soap bubbles.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Just gotta wet the finger before you touch the bubble, that's all. Thanks you for a great review!!!
Comment from happy to be here
This idea is a little 'yukky' to me, but it might appeal more to males and would certainly appeal to young kids, especially boys. I wonder if, you needed to be just a little more explicit for some of us, that there was a spit bubble did not become apparent to me at least until the last line. Thanks. Good luck!
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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This idea is a little 'yukky' to me, but it might appeal more to males and would certainly appeal to young kids, especially boys. I wonder if, you needed to be just a little more explicit for some of us, that there was a spit bubble did not become apparent to me at least until the last line. Thanks. Good luck!
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Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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See the picture, it's not a spit bubble. LOL it's a bubble bubble and your finger has to be wet to be able to go inside of it!!!
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Ohh. thankyou.
Comment from Enrique28
I love this subject matter because you make it with a kind of sweetness that carries emotion. The opposite could be quite nasty! "In a few seconds, the bubble burst"... and "chest heaving and falling". Exactly my sentiment. The verse reads with a smoothness that accentuates the mood. Sheer delight!!
Enrique28
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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I love this subject matter because you make it with a kind of sweetness that carries emotion. The opposite could be quite nasty! "In a few seconds, the bubble burst"... and "chest heaving and falling". Exactly my sentiment. The verse reads with a smoothness that accentuates the mood. Sheer delight!!
Enrique28
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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Thanks so very much Enrique!!!! A great review on the bubble poem. MUAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.
Comment from CodyJack
That would be sheer determination and you have a huge imagination LOL. My mind was going off in left field until you brought me back to the batters box at the ending. Love your writing. Keep it going. Your friend, Cody
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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That would be sheer determination and you have a huge imagination LOL. My mind was going off in left field until you brought me back to the batters box at the ending. Love your writing. Keep it going. Your friend, Cody
Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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LOL thanks Cody!!! Didn't you ever try to do this?
Comment from pearlecat
LMAO! Ok I'll admit it! You are so funny. I can't believe you wrote about this, but good for you. I loved it.
The way you dripped this story down the page. A very good free verse about a wet and sticky subject. Pearl
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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LMAO! Ok I'll admit it! You are so funny. I can't believe you wrote about this, but good for you. I loved it.
The way you dripped this story down the page. A very good free verse about a wet and sticky subject. Pearl
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Comment Written 14-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2010
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LOL hey, it's just a bubble. Hehehe. Hard to do that too!!!! Emphasis on hard!!!! Thanks you. Glad yer smiling too!!!
