George Carlin and Ivory Soap
practicing for the big leagues40 total reviews
Comment from poetbear
I will miss George Carlin who made alot of sense.
This is charming and endearing. Many will concur with your words.
Flows well and makes sense.
Must read.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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I will miss George Carlin who made alot of sense.
This is charming and endearing. Many will concur with your words.
Flows well and makes sense.
Must read.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you, poetbear, for this great review for my story. I appreciate your selecting my story to read and for your great comments. Thanks!
Comment from Patti R.
This is a terrific dialog between boy and mom!! I have two ten year old boys, when they were in grade 2 they came home with a verbal list of "new" words that they wanted to know if they were allowed to say out loud, 'cause all their friends said the "all the time"! This is that frightening stage where parents realize that they've no longer got full control over what goes into their child's brain...ah, the real world! Good luck.
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This is a terrific dialog between boy and mom!! I have two ten year old boys, when they were in grade 2 they came home with a verbal list of "new" words that they wanted to know if they were allowed to say out loud, 'cause all their friends said the "all the time"! This is that frightening stage where parents realize that they've no longer got full control over what goes into their child's brain...ah, the real world! Good luck.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you for this great review for my story, Patti. I appreciaye your comments, best wishes, and sharing your story of your boys. Thanks!
Comment from Econ Teacher
This was funny. Kids say the darnedest things. My sons haven't had the potty mouth experience yet, but soon. I know it's coming soon. They are 9 years old and they have been hearing the words, but as the boy in this story would say, "They don't have the balls yet to use them."
I've never had my mouth washed out with soap either. Now soup on the other hand, I think I would like that.
Good luck to the kid playing for the Red Sox. He's got the mouth for it.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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This was funny. Kids say the darnedest things. My sons haven't had the potty mouth experience yet, but soon. I know it's coming soon. They are 9 years old and they have been hearing the words, but as the boy in this story would say, "They don't have the balls yet to use them."
I've never had my mouth washed out with soap either. Now soup on the other hand, I think I would like that.
Good luck to the kid playing for the Red Sox. He's got the mouth for it.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Hello Econ Teach! Thanks for this great review for my story. I appreciate your reading and your kind comments. I'd tell you to get the Ivory ready...but maybe your boys won't play baseball :>)
Comment from Ricky1024
A very funny talk between a mom and her 2nd grade age child.
a cute blend between the mom and the foul language thing,baseball, and George Carlin{What a mouth on him!}
Content- *****(Just long enough)
Flow-*****Easy reading.
Adjective content******extremely funny and well tied together!
Grammar/Pronunciation*****
Synopsis-*****I liked this piece very much for the
delightful way the author blended it together.
note:You would like a piece I wrote but not released
called "Tarzan and Jane take Manhattan.Ricky1024 poet/writer/artist.
led called
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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A very funny talk between a mom and her 2nd grade age child.
a cute blend between the mom and the foul language thing,baseball, and George Carlin{What a mouth on him!}
Content- *****(Just long enough)
Flow-*****Easy reading.
Adjective content******extremely funny and well tied together!
Grammar/Pronunciation*****
Synopsis-*****I liked this piece very much for the
delightful way the author blended it together.
note:You would like a piece I wrote but not released
called "Tarzan and Jane take Manhattan.Ricky1024 poet/writer/artist.
led called
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you so much, Ricky, for your complete and in-depth review of my story. I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment. Let me know when you release Tarzan and Jane! (well, when the contest is over, you'll know who to contact lol)
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OK, I most certainly will do just that.
The Tarzan thing is just me having a little fun on that subject. There's actually two chapters written. the first into introduces you to Tarzan, Jane,, Boy, and of course "Cheetah".Ricky1024.
Comment from bhogg
Well, I got mine washed out...Ivory was a piece of cake. Your post brought a smile and a couple of chuckles my way. Best of luck in your contest. Regards, Bill
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Well, I got mine washed out...Ivory was a piece of cake. Your post brought a smile and a couple of chuckles my way. Best of luck in your contest. Regards, Bill
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Hello Bill! Thank you for this wonderful review and your kind comments for my story. I spent hours in the bathtub trying to get that piece of cake to sink. Thanks for your best wishes!
Comment from glpar
My brothers would agree that ivory is terrible tasting soap as they were honored to taste it on a few occasions. Well done, good read and funny. Good luck.
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My brothers would agree that ivory is terrible tasting soap as they were honored to taste it on a few occasions. Well done, good read and funny. Good luck.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you, glparm, for this great review for my story. I appreciate your taking the time to read and your kind comments. Thank you so much for reading and your best wishes.
Comment from Soledadpaz
And I believe your story, every word! This was just too cute. A young boy aspiring to the big leagues, in every aspect down to the language. The Mom was great and too believable. This is a great entry. Good luck!
Sole
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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And I believe your story, every word! This was just too cute. A young boy aspiring to the big leagues, in every aspect down to the language. The Mom was great and too believable. This is a great entry. Good luck!
Sole
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Sole, for your kind review and comments. I appreciate your taking the time to read my story and your good luch wishes.
Thanks!
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Nine-year-old boys try out everything, from "glamorous" careers to the bluest of language. I remember noticing a fascination with elimination functions and products at that age. But girls are fastidious and rule-bound at nine so, in our opinions, boys NEEDED ivory soap in liberal quantities and all applications. "Boys - yuck!" :D Y'all are a difficult animal to domesticate...but we love ya. :) Nancy
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Nine-year-old boys try out everything, from "glamorous" careers to the bluest of language. I remember noticing a fascination with elimination functions and products at that age. But girls are fastidious and rule-bound at nine so, in our opinions, boys NEEDED ivory soap in liberal quantities and all applications. "Boys - yuck!" :D Y'all are a difficult animal to domesticate...but we love ya. :) Nancy
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my story, Nancy. It was a fun little story to write and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for your comments.
Comment from Kpj731
Ah! Love it!! Will ivory soap help my balls grow? Best line! This really made me smile and for as short as it is, I really knew what was going on. Nicely done!
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Ah! Love it!! Will ivory soap help my balls grow? Best line! This really made me smile and for as short as it is, I really knew what was going on. Nicely done!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Kpj, I'm so thrilled by this incredible rating and review for my story! Thank you for your kind comments and I'm delighted you enjoyed the story. Thank you!
Comment from humpwhistle
Evidently you never tasted Lava---nitty and gritty. When even that didn't work, my mother threatened me with Boraxo.
Ronald Reagan and a 20-mule team couldn't pull a sweat word out of me then. (Obscure reference, but maybe you'll get it).
Fenway? What about your beloved Wrigley, and the Cubbies?
They could use a first baseman (have you heard the Albert Pujols rumors?).
Good fu...friggin' story, Indy.
Peace, Lee
(in) the bottom of the ninth (inning---necessary?)
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Evidently you never tasted Lava---nitty and gritty. When even that didn't work, my mother threatened me with Boraxo.
Ronald Reagan and a 20-mule team couldn't pull a sweat word out of me then. (Obscure reference, but maybe you'll get it).
Fenway? What about your beloved Wrigley, and the Cubbies?
They could use a first baseman (have you heard the Albert Pujols rumors?).
Good fu...friggin' story, Indy.
Peace, Lee
(in) the bottom of the ninth (inning---necessary?)
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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No, Lava or Boraxo wasn't a staple in our house. It was always Ivory that went into our potty mouths...even though we tried to hide it or get it to sink in the bathtub. I did however love to watch Death Valley Days and the Borax mule team that Ronnie was the narrator (and sometimes guest)of the show. I did love the Western TV shows and wish there were some these days instead of a bazillion reality shows. Did you like Wild Wild West?
Yeah...I've been hearing the scuttlebutt about AP. I hate the guy...he kills the Cubs every game. But if he signs with the Cubs as a free agent, then I will crown him King of Wrigleyville and love him like a brother. (If they do sign him, the Cubs would only need to get an infield, an outfield, and some pitchers who actually know how to throw a strike to be a team with some potential)
Thanks for your suggestion...will fix it up.
Thanks, LeeMan.
Unknown Writer :>)