A Wind Chime
A gift In Memory, see author's notes31 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
A beautiful tribute for a loved one. The wind chimes are used by many races, prayers every time they give sound to the wind. I enjoyed your poem because it has told a story of death and rejuvenation.Thanks for sharing, I wish every person would give thought to remembering a soul this way. Well done poet.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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A beautiful tribute for a loved one. The wind chimes are used by many races, prayers every time they give sound to the wind. I enjoyed your poem because it has told a story of death and rejuvenation.Thanks for sharing, I wish every person would give thought to remembering a soul this way. Well done poet.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Aussie, thank you so very much my wonderful friend. Yes, the wind chimes are phenomenal and you are right. They have been used by many cultures and religions. again my sweet friend, thank you so much... jimi
Comment from Dave M
Jimi,
This is an excellent eulogy and fine words to accompany the memorial gift of a wind chime. I think this, instead of flowers, was a proper gift, since it will last for years. He was too young to die, a lot younger than I am. My thoughts are with you and your family.
Dave
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Jimi,
This is an excellent eulogy and fine words to accompany the memorial gift of a wind chime. I think this, instead of flowers, was a proper gift, since it will last for years. He was too young to die, a lot younger than I am. My thoughts are with you and your family.
Dave
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Hi Dave, thank you once again ever so much. Yes, he was too young and he quite possibly could have lived longer if he had not ignored his pain from five years ago. He constantly complained his back hurt and could not figure out why. He woke up one morning with so much pain in his back he could hardly move and his left arm was extremely swollen. A tragedy for sure.. again thank you so very much... jimi
Comment from Joan E.
Welcome back, and thank you for sharing your poignant tribute and the additional context in your notes. I admired your rhymed quatrains and prayer-like quality of your verse. I particularly liked your "mortal token" metaphor, along with your use of "bell" and "fingers" as verbs. Please accept my condolences for your family's loss. -Joan
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Welcome back, and thank you for sharing your poignant tribute and the additional context in your notes. I admired your rhymed quatrains and prayer-like quality of your verse. I particularly liked your "mortal token" metaphor, along with your use of "bell" and "fingers" as verbs. Please accept my condolences for your family's loss. -Joan
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Jona E. thank you so much for stopping by. It is always a very pleasant surprise to hear from you. Thank you for your wonderful review and for you heartfelt condolences.. I appreciate you very much... jls
Comment from Maureen's Pen
I am so sorry for your loss... This was a beautiful gift to read. It gave me some moments of peace and inner weaving of love. So beautifully penned I can't help but feel the release and share blessings for rest in peace.
Thank you for sharing Jimi.
A big hug to your family.
Maureen
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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I am so sorry for your loss... This was a beautiful gift to read. It gave me some moments of peace and inner weaving of love. So beautifully penned I can't help but feel the release and share blessings for rest in peace.
Thank you for sharing Jimi.
A big hug to your family.
Maureen
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Maureen, thank you ever so much for stopping by today. It is so good to hear from you. I appreciate you and your review and your hugs very much.. again thank you... jimi
Comment from EMB
This is a beautiful piece of work. Your wording flowed with authority and purpose, and your rhyming scheme never seemed stilted or forced to me at all. Well done.
My condolences for your recent loss.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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This is a beautiful piece of work. Your wording flowed with authority and purpose, and your rhyming scheme never seemed stilted or forced to me at all. Well done.
My condolences for your recent loss.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Edward M.Baldwin, thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my work. I am honored and much appreciative of your time and your condolences... again thank you.. jls
Comment from Lobengula
I'm so very sorry for your loss. More especially, perhaps, that of your youngest son. The poem was as superb as any Savell, a superb piece of work, work we have come to expect.
"As each zephyr fingers with an angels score". What a lovely symphony of words.
Well done, and may the Lord give strength to your family.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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I'm so very sorry for your loss. More especially, perhaps, that of your youngest son. The poem was as superb as any Savell, a superb piece of work, work we have come to expect.
"As each zephyr fingers with an angels score". What a lovely symphony of words.
Well done, and may the Lord give strength to your family.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Mike, this is such a pleasant surprise!It is sooo good to hear from you.As always you are so gracious and kind and complimentary of my work. I am truly humbled. I am back and hope to catch up to so many. thank you for your review and your condolences. It has been extremely hard on my son, extremely. again thank you... jimi
Comment from Glasstruth
Cancer, what a horrible disease. I remember Nixon saying lets find a cure before 2000. Well, it hasn't happened. Just yesterday I had surgery on my face because of skin cancer, which is nothing compared to what you're writing about. Your rhyming, your chose of words are so elegantly written and heartfelt. Thanks for sharing. Les
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Cancer, what a horrible disease. I remember Nixon saying lets find a cure before 2000. Well, it hasn't happened. Just yesterday I had surgery on my face because of skin cancer, which is nothing compared to what you're writing about. Your rhyming, your chose of words are so elegantly written and heartfelt. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Glasstruth, thank you ever so much for stopping by. I an sorry to hear of your recent bout with cancer. I do hope you are doing well. You are right, Nixon did declare the war on cancer, 1969. At that time, one in every five people were affected by this dreaded disease. It did not mean they had it, it meant they knew someone who did. Today, despite all the research, despite all the new designer targeted drugs, despite modern technology, we are going backwards. Now, one in every three people are affected by cancer and it does not mean you know some one, it simply means you have it. Scary. We do know differnt that we did 43 years ago. We approach this disease the same, we cut, we burn, we poison, only with more sophisticated ammo. Still, the battle is continuous, but we as a soxciety fail to step back and look through a different lense. We are an illsociety with a rescue mentality and the medical and pharmaceutical industry feeds off of our need. ok, I have said enough, but thank you so very much. jls
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Just imagine if we were to put the same money into this as we do for the military, where would we be now?
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I hear you, however, there is soooo much money given for research, but the irony is, very little money if ast all is given toward educating people in the need for lifestyle changes and holding the food industry and pharmaceutical industry accountable for their part is propegating and propitiating disease. Research on our part will disinterr some very blaring truths about these two bed partners. If all were healthy, the pharmaceutical industry and medical industry complex would implode. There is not enough castastrophic events free of disease that keep them afloat. The big conglomerates of the food industry would not exist and their wealth would go down the drain. Cheap engineered food down our gullets, more profit for them and more profit for the pharmaceutical industry.. for now we have high blood pressure, obesity, diabesity, diabetes, cancer, ms,severe depression, arthritis, heart disease, kidney disease, the list is endless. Now, just where would our good doctors be without our money in sick care? You tell me..
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You make an excellent point. The food industry and pharmaceutical companies are laughing all the way to the bank. Les
Comment from Gungalo
You made me cry, girl. Such a blessing yu are there for his son and you wrote this everlasting memory for him. May these windchime forever carry your message.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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You made me cry, girl. Such a blessing yu are there for his son and you wrote this everlasting memory for him. May these windchime forever carry your message.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Gungalo, please don't cry. Yes, it is still difficult for my son, but time will help him move throughthis life altering event. again thank you so much. It is so good to hear from you my friend... jimi
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I've stopped now but it was so moving.
Comment from terry drake
Very well done. Your rhyme scheme was well chosen and the rhythm to your verse encouraged further investigation into your theme of losing a loved one.
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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Very well done. Your rhyme scheme was well chosen and the rhythm to your verse encouraged further investigation into your theme of losing a loved one.
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Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
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terry drake, thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your taking your valuable time to do so, Again thank you very much... jls
Comment from dmt1967
I am so sorry for your loss very well written poem I enjoyed reading it and I liked the picture very peaceful sounding thank you for sharing
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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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I am so sorry for your loss very well written poem I enjoyed reading it and I liked the picture very peaceful sounding thank you for sharing
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Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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dmt1967, thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my work. I am honored. jls
