Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Haydon, who ran with scissors..."A collection of my children's poems
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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written and it has good rhyming through the poem it is enhanced well by the art work and it made me laugh well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Yes this is well written and it has good rhyming through the poem it is enhanced well by the art work and it made me laugh well done regards Jill
Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming couplets
excellent use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your poem
good alliteration in phrases like sagely stated and lovely lad
I'm dying with laughter here to learn that this boy's one small imperfection led to such dire dire consequences LOL
One slip and the family name will never get passed on - this is just hysterically witty It's at times like this a girl is glad she has no willy to begin with!
Sorry it's a Saturday with nary a six to be had :-)
Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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solid rhyming couplets
excellent use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your poem
good alliteration in phrases like sagely stated and lovely lad
I'm dying with laughter here to learn that this boy's one small imperfection led to such dire dire consequences LOL
One slip and the family name will never get passed on - this is just hysterically witty It's at times like this a girl is glad she has no willy to begin with!
Sorry it's a Saturday with nary a six to be had :-)
Brooke
Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Brooke, thanks as always for the thorough review.
Steve
Comment from RYME4U
Very funny, The humor is subtle and well done. The rhymes are a delight to read and the rhythm runs fast like little Hayden.Too bad it's the end of the line for them (willy and Hayden, too)Ha ha.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Very funny, The humor is subtle and well done. The rhymes are a delight to read and the rhythm runs fast like little Hayden.Too bad it's the end of the line for them (willy and Hayden, too)Ha ha.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from speakup
This one has a good message, I liked the read, it rhymed very well and proved to be an easy and enjoyable write. Very good work.
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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This one has a good message, I liked the read, it rhymed very well and proved to be an easy and enjoyable write. Very good work.
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from lorijean
A funny, fast moving poem with a painful message, love it's content, kids just don't listen till something nasty happens... a fun verse.....
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A funny, fast moving poem with a painful message, love it's content, kids just don't listen till something nasty happens... a fun verse.....
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve