The Old Witch House
A daring young man makes a fatal mistake34 total reviews
Comment from wierdgrace
ohh this story could have even gone further, well done, I loved the subject, the way you used the words to tell a story and it was exciting, good luck in the voting booth, and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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ohh this story could have even gone further, well done, I loved the subject, the way you used the words to tell a story and it was exciting, good luck in the voting booth, and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
"Gather wood or our[your]
I wish he had escaped but I suppose everyone to his own taste. I wised that somehow he would turn the tables on his x-friends. Well done though. Poor kid. Nancy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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"Gather wood or our[your]
I wish he had escaped but I suppose everyone to his own taste. I wised that somehow he would turn the tables on his x-friends. Well done though. Poor kid. Nancy
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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I meant our because the boys were the witches helpers and the young man's friend as well. It was supposed to be a hint. Glad you liked it. Gretchen
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OHHHH! That explains it, LOL Sorry
Comment from Judy Couch
This is well written and interesting. I didn't expect it to end as it did. I thought it would have a happy ending but everything isn't the way we want it to be.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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This is well written and interesting. I didn't expect it to end as it did. I thought it would have a happy ending but everything isn't the way we want it to be.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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I like a scary story to be just that. I liked to leave people with nightmares. Thank you for the fun review. Gretchen
Comment from barleygirl
Nicely composed story where the reader is compelled to find out what's going to happen, at every line. The outcome is believable & well-told & fun, in a dramatic sort of way, with many unusual details. Great work! Good luck!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Nicely composed story where the reader is compelled to find out what's going to happen, at every line. The outcome is believable & well-told & fun, in a dramatic sort of way, with many unusual details. Great work! Good luck!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from sibhus
Ja, I noticed that there was no mention of a required word count, so I think your good. Interesting story with the nice twist of the buddies turning the hero over to the witch. You've used the required words flawlessly as I had to hunt for them. Good story and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Ja, I noticed that there was no mention of a required word count, so I think your good. Interesting story with the nice twist of the buddies turning the hero over to the witch. You've used the required words flawlessly as I had to hunt for them. Good story and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the great review. I appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Fiction! The author was extremely descriptive in creating the scene. The reader was able to in vision the detailed descriptions well. The author met the guidelines of this contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Excellent Fiction! The author was extremely descriptive in creating the scene. The reader was able to in vision the detailed descriptions well. The author met the guidelines of this contest.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thanks. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Great use of the mandatory words. A very creepy story. I didn't expect it to play out as it did. Usually these types of stories end up with a grossly misunderstood person, i.e., the witch. She certainly lived up to her reputation! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Great use of the mandatory words. A very creepy story. I didn't expect it to play out as it did. Usually these types of stories end up with a grossly misunderstood person, i.e., the witch. She certainly lived up to her reputation! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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A witch is a witch, no matte what type of pointed black hat she wears. LOL. Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from joann r romei
I did enjoy it, this was well written, no errors noted in the work, the only thing is it was a bit predictable, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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I did enjoy it, this was well written, no errors noted in the work, the only thing is it was a bit predictable, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Lovinia
I enjoyed your tale which kept me riveted to the page. The title and the image perform well to embellish your story. Each paragraph flowed smoothly and the dialogue well suited to the boys and the old woman. What a scary story .. two accomplices sending one of their own to his doom. A nice twist which I didn't expect..... so, you got me!
Entertaining and no spag that I spotted. An excellent entry for the contest. Warmest Regards - Lovinia xoxoxo
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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I enjoyed your tale which kept me riveted to the page. The title and the image perform well to embellish your story. Each paragraph flowed smoothly and the dialogue well suited to the boys and the old woman. What a scary story .. two accomplices sending one of their own to his doom. A nice twist which I didn't expect..... so, you got me!
Entertaining and no spag that I spotted. An excellent entry for the contest. Warmest Regards - Lovinia xoxoxo
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Dean Kuch
With friends like John & Merwin, who needs enemas?
So, the lad got more than his goose cooked for him, that's for sure. He was lured by that proverbial fifteen minutes of fame, prompting him to sneak into the old witches house. Well, actually, in his case, he simply knocked, and was admitted in. He had high hopes for more hot maidens than he could shake his stick at, but the heat he received had little to do with any fair maiden.
There is a moral to this fine, well written story. If you are going over to a witches house for dinner, be very sure that she hasn't included you on the menu.
Nicely done!...
~5 out of 5 skulls~
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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With friends like John & Merwin, who needs enemas?
So, the lad got more than his goose cooked for him, that's for sure. He was lured by that proverbial fifteen minutes of fame, prompting him to sneak into the old witches house. Well, actually, in his case, he simply knocked, and was admitted in. He had high hopes for more hot maidens than he could shake his stick at, but the heat he received had little to do with any fair maiden.
There is a moral to this fine, well written story. If you are going over to a witches house for dinner, be very sure that she hasn't included you on the menu.
Nicely done!...
~5 out of 5 skulls~
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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You know it. A witch is a witch no matter what pointy black hat she's wearing. Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
