5/7/5 (Leaves in Fright)
Leaves float back to tree, so frightened.121 total reviews
Comment from Dakaufmann
I like the action going on here and idea presented (has a witty perk). If you wanted to keep the light, kiddy tone, then "'Twas Halloween Eve" is good. But maybe something a little more unique or even frightful sounding.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I like the action going on here and idea presented (has a witty perk). If you wanted to keep the light, kiddy tone, then "'Twas Halloween Eve" is good. But maybe something a little more unique or even frightful sounding.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Thank you for reading and for the suggestion. I will work on the first line. livelylinda
Comment from Fiddler on the Roof
You painted a wonderful picture with your words. I can see this happening on a chilly Halloween night! Not many writers can convey their message in few words. You do this well.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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You painted a wonderful picture with your words. I can see this happening on a chilly Halloween night! Not many writers can convey their message in few words. You do this well.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Thank you for reading and your positive comments. livelylinda
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Linda. Good write here for the contest. I find these 5-7-5 s difficult myself. I think you stand a good chance of winning the contest. Good luck,,,Bob
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Hi, Linda. Good write here for the contest. I find these 5-7-5 s difficult myself. I think you stand a good chance of winning the contest. Good luck,,,Bob
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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I didn't win but thanks for reading. livelylinda
Comment from Cookie333
The reader has a sense of the leaves floating, or perhaps hanging onto the tree in fright. Some of our trees never quite lose all their leaves for the winter here.
good luck
thank you
karen
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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The reader has a sense of the leaves floating, or perhaps hanging onto the tree in fright. Some of our trees never quite lose all their leaves for the winter here.
good luck
thank you
karen
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Thanks Cookie. Linda
Comment from ann marie mazz
hello
this is fabulous
the format is true to form
your words tell the tale
even the leaves had a fright
well done and executed and displayed
thank you for sharing your talent
happy halloween
ann marie
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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hello
this is fabulous
the format is true to form
your words tell the tale
even the leaves had a fright
well done and executed and displayed
thank you for sharing your talent
happy halloween
ann marie
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Thank you for reading and your kind words. livelylinda
Comment from mickbey
I like the illustration, a common scene but a unique view, I can say the same thing about the poem, a common reference this time of year but an original take on it, well done, good luck.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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I like the illustration, a common scene but a unique view, I can say the same thing about the poem, a common reference this time of year but an original take on it, well done, good luck.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Didn't win the contest. But, thank you for reading. livelylinda
Comment from SteveY
Now that's what I call being scared! Great job in coming up with this very imaginative and creative little piece of work in this limited format. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Now that's what I call being scared! Great job in coming up with this very imaginative and creative little piece of work in this limited format. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Didn't win the contest, SteveY. But, thanks for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Excellent use of the fear of Halloween. Having the leaves jump back on the trees, what a brilliant line, and goes so well with the illustration. Good luck with this great 5-7-5 in the contest! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Excellent use of the fear of Halloween. Having the leaves jump back on the trees, what a brilliant line, and goes so well with the illustration. Good luck with this great 5-7-5 in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Didn't win the contest, but, thanks for reading. Linda
Comment from christopherjl
Awww. I love this, I love the way that you personified the leaves jumping back onto the trees. Very well written, I can see it's already an all time best and recognized. Well done!!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Awww. I love this, I love the way that you personified the leaves jumping back onto the trees. Very well written, I can see it's already an all time best and recognized. Well done!!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Thank you!
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Linda,
This is an excellent 5/7/5 poem that begs to be read over and over. Your word selections are expressive and creative. Your second line is innovative and clever. Well done and good luck in the contest...blessings, chey
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Hi Linda,
This is an excellent 5/7/5 poem that begs to be read over and over. Your word selections are expressive and creative. Your second line is innovative and clever. Well done and good luck in the contest...blessings, chey
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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I didn't win the contest. But, thank you for reading and for your positive feedback. Linda
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Dang, your poem should have won! Hugs, chey